I like this game so far. It looks good and the plot is interesting enough. However...
It really needs a proofread. It has so many misspellings, some of which are just swapping letters around. I haven't counted, but it sure feels like way over a hundred. This even includes character names (Vivain, Evilin, Kathren, Katrhine) and, at least once that I saw, a variable name (script.rpy line 109 and chapter2.rpy line 4633, one of them has Evaline's name misspelled).
Oh, and of course we're missing tons of commas too.
There are a few mislabeled lines. At the bar after the art gallery, one of Mike's lines is labeled as Mom's line instead. And during the first meeting with Rebecca, one of her lines has no label (The line "Not that I'm complaining or anything." has the 'r' in front of it in the script but without a space. Normally this should work, I think, but it didn't display properly for me until I added the space.) And there's a line of Vivian's without a label early in the bar scene in Chapter 3.
If you don't invite Des to spend the night, even if you tell Mom truthfully that you don't intend to go to Rebecca's party, Vivian still thinks about "the look of disappointment" her mom had when she told her she wanted to go, followed by a bunch of other lines that only make sense if she wants to go to the party, like inviting Des.
The 'vcard' variable is defined as True and then immediately changed to an array, making it not work correctly in Chapter 3.
