VN Ren'Py Abandoned Double Delight [Ch.2 v0.5] [Sorsteak]

[Sorsteak]

Graphics are ok and it's too early to tell how the story will turn out, but the writing is bad.
There is too much narration and most of it as if it was taken from an English for beginners book.
"Luis is going to work." "May is making coffee."
Don't narrate things that are clearly shown on the images.
If you need to tell things it's better to tell via dialogue or maybe an inner monologue.

I will consider your criticisms and try to fix it in the next update. Thank you

 

[Alley_Cat]

Disappointing. Saw the female protagonist and lesbian tags, no male protagonist tag, so I downloaded it. Named the male protags Shithead and Fucktard. Then the first POV and the first few choices was for the male protag. Waste of a download, and I feel mislead.

This needs the male protagonist tag so members like me that are after a lesbian protagonist game can avoid it.

 

[Sorsteak]

Disappointing. Saw the female protagonist and lesbian tags, no male protagonist tag, so I downloaded it. Named the male protags Shithead and Fucktard. Then the first POV and the first few choices was for the male protag. Waste of a download, and I feel mislead.

This needs the male protagonist tag so members like me that are after a lesbian protagonist game can avoid it.

First of all there is no female protagonist tag. Second, I was undecided about choosing that tag. I chose Lesbian tag because I left a scene about being a Lesbian in the sequel. I may have been wrong about this. This is due to my inexperience, so I'm sorry if I misled you. I hope I can keep you satisfied.

 

[MGUltimate]

First of all there is no female protagonist tag. Second, I was undecided about choosing that tag. I chose Lesbian tag because I left a scene about being a Lesbian in the sequel. I may have been wrong about this. This is due to my inexperience, so I'm sorry if I misled you. I hope I can keep you satisfied.

It certainly does have the female protagonist tag, but also has the multiple protagonist tag. If there is more stuff with choosing what male characters do I'd suggest also adding the "male protagonist" tag. Had I realized this was the first release I probably would have waited before downloading (1st releases usually have nothing, but not the case here.) This really looks promising I think.

 

[彡SILENT๛ONE]

( I will try to make it better thanks to your comments. Please specify what you want to see in the story in the comments.)

It looks promising readers are quite good also. SO, sure now I'm adding it on my playlist and soon reviews but , what we want ? We don't want NTR ! yo no need to share double delight also possibly threesome. HAREM PATH WILL BE BETTER. GOOD LUCK

 

[dregon87]

This may be an option. Anyone can continue however they want. Thanks for your feedback.

Will there be a multiple protagonist option in this case?
This is just my opinion and all that, but when you play as different characters and choose how they affect each other, for me personally it’s not as interesting as when you play one character like May and the world creates a story around you in which you choose the direction .
plus I'm not a big fan of male protagonis games, sex similarity with my character makes me put myself in the place of the character and make decisions that I would make in life, which automatically makes this character boring for me)

I repeat - this is just my opinion.

 

[Alley_Cat]

First of all there is no female protagonist tag. Second, I was undecided about choosing that tag. I chose Lesbian tag because I left a scene about being a Lesbian in the sequel. I may have been wrong about this. This is due to my inexperience, so I'm sorry if I misled you. I hope I can keep you satisfied.

Well since there are two female protags, there should be the female protagonist tag. I didn't particularly check, since my usual search for "Latest Updates" uses the female protag tag, and excludes male protag, so I assumed you included the female protag tag.

So I doubt I will be satisfied with this game, but that's my problem, not yours. Best of luck to you, but I don't think this game is for me.

 

[Sorsteak]

Well since there are two female protags, there should be the female protagonist tag. I didn't particularly check, since my usual search for "Latest Updates" uses the female protag tag, and excludes male protag, so I assumed you included the female protag tag.

So I doubt I will be satisfied with this game, but that's my problem, not yours. Best of luck to you, but I don't think this game is for me.

It`s OK. Thank you

 

[Gleemer]

Here is the Italian translation

of Double Delight [Ch.1 v1.0]

This translation is "unofficial, it was created by a fan.

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Ecco la traduzione italiana

di un fan Double Delight [Ch.1 v1.0]

Questa traduzione "non è ufficiale" è stata generata da un fan.

You must be registered to see the links

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Here is the Italian translation

of Double Delight [v0.1]

This translation is "unofficial, it was created by a fan.

You must be registered to see the links

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Ecco la traduzione italiana

di un fan Double Delight [v0.1]

Questa traduzione "non è ufficiale" è stata generata da un fan.

You must be registered to see the links

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[Deleted member 396172]

no fan of multiple protagonist



all the best for ur game

 

[Crow Armbrust]

THX

 

[Sesinho]

I would say it feels beta, or amateur. I needs:
Proper writting that is more than a succession basic phrases. ( I know this cause my english is bad)
And more of a story feeling. 2 People have sex after meeting 2 times and barely speaking t each other. And then there is sex, they go naked without transitions or dialogue and start fucking the entire kamasutra with a choice menu, no transition and no dialogue.

It needs some work, so people who wants porn, choses the game and not pornhub.

And of course, the game weights 800 compressed and its like 10 minutes long, images are between 1MB and 3.8MB.

 

[Sorsteak]

I would say it feels beta, or amateur. I needs:
Proper writting that is more than a succession basic phrases. ( I know this cause my english is bad)
And more of a story feeling. 2 People have sex after meeting 2 times and barely speaking t each other. And then there is sex, they go naked without transitions or dialogue and start fucking the entire kamasutra with a choice menu, no transition and no dialogue.

It needs some work, so people who wants porn, choses the game and not pornhub.

And of course, the game weights 800 compressed and its like 10 minutes long, images are between 1MB and 3.8MB.

First of all, thank you for your feedback. I'm working on the problems that you mentioned. (file size - lack of dialogue etc.). You are right it looks really amateur now. But I'm doing my best to fix that.

 

[Ifartedtoolong]

Saw the female protagonist and lesbian tags

Thanks for the heads up you saved me from downloading something I'd be deleting right away.

 

[oldschool34500]

Game looks promising...so please never bring NTR to ruin the game...

I do not agree! There are some very good games with NTR. you have the right to dislike NTR, but you don't have the right to force us to dislike NTR.

 

[oldschool34500]

It looks promising readers are quite good also. SO, sure now I'm adding it on my playlist and soon reviews but , what we want ? We don't want NTR ! yo no need to share double delight also possibly threesome. HAREM PATH WILL BE BETTER. GOOD LUCK

I do not agree! There are some very good games with NTR. you have the right to dislike NTR, but you don't have the right to force us to dislike NTR.

 

[88Michele88]

There are two main character.

that don't explain nor say nothing if the is chance to chose our gender or not.

 

[88Michele88]

So it forced male protagonist. The no chance to chose our gender to play with from wole game neight to avoid chose for male. Kinda disponted. No thanks.

 

[Ifartedtoolong]

Good luck

No luck needed finding games like that as there are quite a few games on the site that has a lesbian protagonist.

 

[Jun Sung Ahn]

Android ?