Well I can't speak for you. A good story is what I am here for, that has sex in it.
But personally I hate Mary Sue characters. People aren't perfect, and showing people grow makes a better story. Would a story be as good if Kate was a glorified porn star, and opens up doing gang bangs? That's the equivalent of a Mary Sue in this story. She can do everything from the start and can bang 12 dudes, over and over and over... Other than the fact that it would make no sense, it would also get boring fast. The audience needs more and more spice to keep interest in the story, obviously spice in this context is sex.
I'm just saying you can have ONE sex scene be intentionally unpleasant which is the floor to build off of. Then you add more and more enjoyable sex scenes after and gets more erotic as Kate accepts sex in a new way. Then you can see how throughout the story how Kate has changed. The problem is that this scene isn't the first scene, it's the 4th in the bar... It makes much less sense as the 4th scene, but this scene REALLY needs to take place to create a sense of realism for a story.
In the end, the freakout scene is needed but in the wrong place. Sadly, Kate makes no sense. We are all unhappy, and that will never change.
But personally I hate Mary Sue characters. People aren't perfect, and showing people grow makes a better story. Would a story be as good if Kate was a glorified porn star, and opens up doing gang bangs? That's the equivalent of a Mary Sue in this story. She can do everything from the start and can bang 12 dudes, over and over and over... Other than the fact that it would make no sense, it would also get boring fast. The audience needs more and more spice to keep interest in the story, obviously spice in this context is sex.
I'm just saying you can have ONE sex scene be intentionally unpleasant which is the floor to build off of. Then you add more and more enjoyable sex scenes after and gets more erotic as Kate accepts sex in a new way. Then you can see how throughout the story how Kate has changed. The problem is that this scene isn't the first scene, it's the 4th in the bar... It makes much less sense as the 4th scene, but this scene REALLY needs to take place to create a sense of realism for a story.
In the end, the freakout scene is needed but in the wrong place. Sadly, Kate makes no sense. We are all unhappy, and that will never change.