VN Ren'Py Abandoned Gates Motel [v0.6] [P_S_Y_C_H_O]

[kanskje1]

And it's good you're even making the effort to have them as optional as possible for those that aren't into it as well.

Which is the main reason i became a Patreon even though it was uploaded less than 24 hours ago, scat (and puke &/or diapers are the few things i will skip), just hope that the main gameplay will have that much options (who's dom and not etc)

 

[jonrage39]

Jesus, what a start. Between this and Heavy 5, 2019 is off to a fantastic start. I wasn't expecting much, truth is, most porn games are trash, and even more common is the lazy-ass, money-grab first version. But, man I am impressed.

The renders are original, realistic and attractive. It's a good looking game. But I would agree with some of the other comments in that the lighting is a bit dark in some scenes, and hard to make out what is what.

The writing is in-depth, creative and indicative of a real desire to tell a story. The introduction really gives you a feel for how each of the characters are different and they each feel like real and unique people.

Knowing the basics of the inspiration, I'm interested in where the plot is going to go. I'm eager to find out how you put your own twist on the story.

The fetishes are great. I'm up for all of them, except scat, but that's cool, put it in anyway. I really hope you make the game YOU want to make. I've already seen a lot of suggestions and requests for different things in the thread, but I hope you stick with what you want. If you lean too much into what others are requesting, you could end up shoehorning stuff in that may not fit the game that you want to make. That being said, if you feel comfortable writing it into your story, go for it. I will always defer to the creator's judgement. Include everything, as long as it's optional, I'm here for it.

This is definitely another game I'll be keeping an eye on. If you can continue to create updates regularly and at this level of quality, I will definitely giving you some patronage.

Seriously, great job.

 

[kanskje1]

I really hope you make the game YOU want to make. I've already seen a lot of suggestions and requests for different things in the thread, but I hope you stick with what you want. If you lean too much into what others are requesting, you could end up shoehorning stuff in that may not fit the game that you want to make. That being said, if you feel comfortable writing it into your story, go for it. I will always defer to the creator's judgement. Include everything, as long as it's optional, I'm here for it.

I agree with this. Requests can always be good to a certain degree, but if the creator of the game doesn't feel it, can't write it in in a proper way, or isn't close to what they want to make, it will just ruin the flow and progress of the game. But when/if they try's to include as many fetishes as possible, yeah, make at least the less focused on fetishes optional

 

[jonrage39]

Fuck me, I can't believe I forgot to mention that scene with Alex and Grace. Fuck, that was phenomenal.

 

[supermanz95]

Genuinely curious to see what you have planned for Alex, stuff like hairy content which you almost never see in wegs is a sight to behold for me personally, as long as you don't go to the deep end and start including turbo autismal fetishes like beast, this is looking to be a promising game.

 

[kanskje1]

Fuck me, I can't believe I forgot to mention that scene with Alex and Grace. Fuck, that was phenomenal.

I loved the scene itself, however, I'm personally not that much fan of "dream sessions" as depicted in this game. Would much rather have something like "I'm nauseous, let's change seats" type of variation, than "oh the last 40 minutes was a dream" type of situation. Even tough Rose depicted as a bitch so far, that wouldn't really change much from a story wise sense. Yeah, you would miss the early "femdom" (if you could call the part in between there that since it's a dream), however, in my personal opinion, it would all make more sense from the story we are told so far, since Norma is a church goer, Grace is innocent, Alex haven't really found herself yet (still transitioning etc).

I don't mind how it is now, but when I had been reading for about 30-40 min, than 75% of the people in the car wanted to grab the MC's dick with how they were raised, it just felt forced in my opinion. It's a great start, but it would feel more natural for me if the dream sequence that's in the game now didn't happen, and rather be changed to the "lets change seats".

However, it's not a deal breaker, and it's all up to the developer of the game

 

[Endurable]

Im very excited that theres a good futa and milf femdom game looks great!!

 

[ThunderRob]

i have the arthritis..will have to hire a half-nakkies asian cutie to shave the dames...ya know..because safety...

 

[RareRed]

The hairy pits on the mother (?) are a major turnoff for me.

+6 people total (so far) liked that.

First off let me start with TO EACH THEIR OWN. I don't care for it either way, hair, no hair, but the game itself done a really good job at explaining about the hair on females body's. Alot of women back in the day didn't shave and they had some fucking kinky ass vintage porn <3 Besides I'm getting tired of seeing 100% skinsuit women on H-games hair mixes it up alittle.

 

[PattyPlainJane]

My only complaint is that, the scenes are very long winded. You get reminded of plot points about 2-3 times, really need to clean up the narration a little bit. Either needs to be chopped down, or you need to expand the vocabulary a bit.

Also, pointing the scene down at his pants, and its extremely dark is kinda boring. Change up angles are somthing, I don't know but POV isn't always the best.

 

[shgth]

Gonna try this for the good and for the worst. I can probably handle it

EDIT: And my first post wohoo!

 

[OGRey]

I'm sorry but she is looking like 55 years old woman, pls change this to 40ish or late 30

 

[Zolkane]

The sicker the better. It's not some playboy magazine with plastic supermodels. It's fucking porn game.
I didn't mention bestiality on Patreon, but will look into it. Not sure how to patch a game with added pictures yet, but should be not too hard.

1-bro if you had Besty please do Horse!!!!
2-what do you think about the position love train with MC in the ass of futa, the futa in the ass of mother exemple. all together connected
3-what do you think about make the mom wiht bigger boobs?

I like your game, future is bright for you

 

[Higurashika]

I'm sorry but she is looking like 55 years old woman, pls change this to 40ish or late 30

NO WAY. She looks perfect.

 

[Higurashika]

oh you kinky pinky
Seriously. I am not sure about harem stuff. Without magic or hypnosis there is no way you could talk the whole family into being your harem sluts. I want to make it realistic.
It is still doable. All WTF shit still can take place in MC's dreams. But it is a subject to discuss with patrons.
Maybe if you can control what your dreams are about, this shit is doable? Why not. I would love to.
Or put all of them in a cellar and impregnate? Like the end of a story because cops will become suspicious.

I understand, but let me show you this fantasy from another angle of view:
- we got family without a father
- his role could potentially belong to MC in the future
- you mentioned that family is pretty religious
- also, it's a perfect material for "family above all"
What it looks like? Yeah, like a sect I just mean that it's possible to do realistic harem with pregnancies. I don't say you should do it, 'cause it's your game, but i also know that you could do it, because this game has a very big potential.

I do like master/slave fetish, that's why i think this way. And i get it, if some ppl don't like such relations. But if we talk about "realistic" relations between characters in this game, i see only three ways:
- hard abuse
- sect
- normal romance

Why? Because MC is not Moriarty, he is just a 18 y.o. kid. He can act primal ways to get women.

What do i think about secret harem? Dunno. Don't like it because don't like it. I don't like cheating, don't like NTR. Though for me any open relations are better than hidden amour adventurous. It could work at the start, but then.. i'd like to have some options to make it more obvious, more open, more public.

 

[NandabaCanti]

Norma kinda looks a bit like Lauren Cohan (Maggie from The Walking Dead); I'm really digging on her design. Grace is pretty cute too. I can't say I'm into Rose, but in a way that kinda means you were successful with her design as well. She looks very much like a bitch and gives off that vibe and she kinda pisses me off, just as she surely does the MC. In a way you also kinda got Alex nailed a bit too well. There's enough male traits left in her face to leave little doubt she started off as a dude, which is a turn off for me personally, but when I can avoid dwelling too much on her face she has an appealing body design.

The renders were decent, but a bit on the underlit side. I think you may have relied too heavily on the HDRIs and probably should have added some slightly diffuse lamps in to brighten things up a bit and get a bit more contrast going on in those interior shots. With such a bright sunny setting, it's a bit jarring to me to see the interior of the car on the dim and fairly evenly lit side, which is a common side effect with scenes where indirect HDRI is doing the majority of the lighting work.

The story kept my attention, there were only a handful of minor issues with somewhat awkward wording. You did a decent job of making the end of the dream sequence feel properly surreal. I like that idea of him having a vivid and perverted dream life; I'm looking forward to seeing more of that stuff. I like the way you are setting up his character to be something of a slightly repressed and introverted pervert. Even though NTR isn't normally my thing, I think it will work really well for this character and setting. It fits the theme quite well if he's a bit quiet and odd and voyeuristic with a strong desire to take his over active imagination to the next level, but often times getting in his own way and settling for sneaking peeks at the action he wants to be a part of. But still occasionally taking bold and calculated risks for the sake of his personal pleasure.

 

[TiffanyMonroe]

What about if you could impregnate the trap? Butt babies. Now THAT'S kinky.

 

[Higurashika]

What about if you could impregnate the trap? Butt babies. Now THAT'S kinky.

Nah.. it's gross. But if Alex impregnate sister or mother - that's kinky

 

[wermi]

Femdom ... and what about feminization. It would be nice to join Alex for some juicy stuff, it should probably close some other story doors.

 

[P_S_Y_C_H_O]

I don't mind how it is now, but when I had been reading for about 30-40 min, than 75% of the people in the car wanted to grab the MC's dick with how they were raised, it just felt forced in my opinion. It's a great start, but it would feel more natural for me if the dream sequence that's in the game now didn't happen, and rather be changed to the "lets change seats".

I wanted to put as much as I can in this intro. Also I want to make it realistic, without WTF moments, or slooowly moving towards them.
So, "Hello guys, my name is Bob and here is my mom sucking me off while we move to our new home. And this is my sis fucking my bro at the rear seat." is completely inappropriate.
The only way to put some sick shit in it would be a dream.
When making a dream I was remembering my own nightmares and was trying to make it insane and not spoil too much at the same time before waking up sequence.
But, unfortunately, I'm not Tarantino. Doing it alone, keeping all this shit in my head, not being sure that people will like it at all, so I can just scrap months of my life is a big pressure. Maybe I fucked something up, and of course it could be better, but it is as it is and I liked it.
No offence taken just in case. Just wanted to explain this dream part.