PapaPhat
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- Mar 31, 2022
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I agree. The dialogue needs proofread with spelling and grammar correction including updates to sentence structure. Unfortunately, I see this kind of thing far too often in AVN and kinetic stories here...I feel like this one needs a proof reader, grammar correction and someone to make the dialogue sound more organic and less like punctuated statements. The story in general is good, but the dialogue could be so much better.
Adventure ever on friend, Phat