Hello, Dev. I just wanted to show you some screenshots of some things I think you should know of.
Typos and some thoughts.
You put "The" twice here. It should be "I'm just here to say that the" not the the.
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You misspelled a word here. It's Mystery not Mistery.
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For this one, the sentence doesn't make sense to me. Shouldn't it be "It's like, it's just us here" or "It seems like it's just us here" and not "it's like there's just us" I'm a bit confused on this one xD
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Do you proofread everything or have someone doing it? or will you proofread it at a later time? just wondering. There's a couple more typos and stuff, but I didn't want to paste too many screenshots to show them. Also, the night scenes where the MC is saying goodnight. Why does the MC say goodnight, one other character says goodnight but another character invites him to sit down and eat or mentions they were waiting for him? twice this happened xD like, am I going to sleep or saying goodnight just to end up sitting down to eat.
Oh, did you get the idea for the characters Smoke and CJ from Grand Theft Auto: San Andreas? I was laughing when I made it to this scene lol.