VN Ren'Py Abandoned Hometown Trap [v1.5] [Spaceball1]

[Laird04]

Well, this is a first for me, the DEV actually gave me a Facepalm for my comment about their game, that's some thin skin there.
I may have been a bit harsh, but I see this as negative storytelling. a Facepalm from the DEV just proves the mindset of someone who is not mature enough to create quality content.
The art is not half bad, sadly wasted on the story.
If SpacBall1 would like to respond like an adult, I'm here.

It's just an emoji man.

 

[zephrates]

I think I'm going to pass on this one. I don't mind female protagonist games per se, but way too many of them seem to remove all agency from the MC and she ends up mostly being a victim. That's just not my cup of tea, and I'm getting very strong vibes that way from this one. Note that nearly every picture of the MC in the OP, she looks upset.
Good luck with your game, SpaceBall1.

 

[SpaceBall1]

I think I'm going to pass on this one. I don't mind female protagonist games per se, but way too many of them seem to remove all agency from the MC and she ends up mostly being a victim. That's just not my cup of tea, and I'm getting very strong vibes that way from this one. Note that nearly every picture of the MC in the OP, she looks upset.
Good luck with your game, SpaceBall1.

Thank you. I appreciate you’re feedback, and yes I see that, but it will change.

 

[kained]

A conspiracy of dirty, ugly old men against a beautiful young woman is a really hot concept. I enjoyed the short visual novel, but I did find some of the writing just a little stilted and I wish it were more like a game with some choices.

If you'd like some help, I'd be willing to do that. I think I can help flesh things out a little more and make things pop.

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Here's to hoping these ugly old men completely fucking with this girl's life and making her miserable!! Mwahahahahahahaha!

 

[SpaceBall1]

A conspiracy of dirty, ugly old men against a beautiful young woman is a really hot concept. I enjoyed the short visual novel, but I did find some of the writing just a little stilted and I wish it were more like a game with some choices.

If you'd like some help, I'd be willing to do that. I think I can help flesh things out a little more and make things pop.

You must be registered to see the links

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Here's to hoping these ugly old men completely fucking with this girl's life and making her miserable!! Mwahahahahahahaha!

Send me a message.

 

[SpaceBall1]

the game is like all games with such a default genre and as always grandfathers touch a young and innocent girl and stick if the developer does not add something new the game, like all games, becomes a default

I don’t know about “default”. But there are a lot of harem games, a lot of superpowers games, a lot of slutty girl games, horse cock games…my point is that there are tons of fetishes and some people like them and some don’t.

However I like to think mine is a little different because 1 the girl isn’t being turned on to a slutty side of herself like most games. 2 it is kinetic. 3 it is more focused on the real world, most people aren’t super models. Most men and women are not 10/10 attractive people. These people in my game are more like the people you would come in contact with in our world. At least imo. Thanks for your comment and I’m sorry it’s not for you.

 

[Netjiespinner]

Nah this game is not for me too many perverts trying to corrupt one girl too fast all at once a little too much and then the pathetic star spreading rumors because i cannot fuck the girl shame guess he is not that a big star LOL. Stepmom is total looser and clearly a cheap whore. Maybe if the girl could still make choices it would help but like previously mentioned the DEV wrote a path which he wants to end with. Good luck further with this game dev guess there a people who just want to fap and think when playing.

 

[Netjiespinner]

I don’t know about “default”. But there are a lot of harem games, a lot of superpowers games, a lot of slutty girl games, horse cock games…my point is that there are tons of fetishes and some people like them and some don’t.

However I like to think mine is a little different because 1 the girl isn’t being turned on to a slutty side of herself like most games. 2 it is kinetic. 3 it is more focused on the real world, most people aren’t super models. Most men and women are not 10/10 attractive people. These people in my game are more like the people you would come in contact with in our world. At least imo. Thanks for your comment and I’m sorry it’s not for you.

Not sure if forcing and corrupting a girl is fetish!!!!!

 

[Deleted member 3477186]

love this fetish.. keep working on that.. wnna see some pregnancy

 

[Deleted member 3477186]

dont forget about interracial sex, asians, blacks old ugly dudes having at her.. maybe she is manipulated into being a sugar baby ahaha

 

[damue151]

You never seen a short old Japanese man?

WTF????? See for yourself what are you talking about? I've seen a lot of old Japanese and none of them look as weird as your model, I swear

 

[SpaceBall1]

WTF????? See for yourself what are you talking about? I've seen a lot of old Japanese and none of them look as weird as your model, I swear

I googled old japanese men...this and many more like this came up...sorry to burst your bubble, lol

 

[bagodoughnuts]

I might be able to continue if the men were not so disgusting in their looks.

 

[Saint Blackmoor]

I thought Facepalm meant “ignored”. I was going to put a haha, but then I thought “you actually took the time to tell me that it was a waste of your time, wow poor guy”. That’s not thin-skinned at all. Bro, some people are going to hate it, some will love it. I am not worried about it. I actually have pretty thick skin and I think most of this is hilarious. Thank you for your comment.

At least you responded. thanks for that. I don't think you are being honest about the emoji. “ignored”

 

[Allan Trumbull]

Kinetic novel + female mc. What a ....... Combination!!

 

[Walter Victor]

3 it is more focused on the real world, most people aren’t super models. Most men and women are not 10/10 attractive people. These people in my game are more like the people you would come in contact with in our world. At least imo

The problem here is that most people don't come to F95 to find games about everyday people with normal lives. In FMC games, sex with unattractive males usually only appeals to those who like women being humiliated. [Not trying to kink-shame anyone. I realize there's a market for that.] I also note that you did NOT make the FMC unattractive. So much for coming across her in our world.

Also, note that making your game a kinetic novel will lose a lot of potential players right off the bat. And even with people who try it, chances are high that they will run across something that causes them to stop playing.

Just noting some drawbacks that I believe could affect the acceptance of your game. I'm actually a firm believer that a developer should have a firm plan for a game and follow it regardless of criticism, even from me.

Also, since I haven't played it yet, I should shelve final judgment. I will take a look at it though, since I'm a sucker for pretty girls getting laid

EDIT: Oh yeah, about the title. The problem with 'trap' is that it connotes gender-bending, which immediately puts some people off, and is why I almost didn't even look at this thread.

 

[kained]

People should accept that some games simply aren't for them. I don't go to threads with futa, and complain that the game has futa.

Some people like the dynamic of ugly guy/beautiful girl. If you don't like this dynamic then it's not for you. It's that simple.

 

[Bigjimst]

Great start to the game! can't wait to see whats next!

 

[SpaceBall1]

The problem here is that most people don't come to F95 to find games about everyday people with normal lives. In FMC games, sex with unattractive males usually only appeals to those who like women being humiliated. [Not trying to kink-shame anyone. I realize there's a market for that.] I also note that you did NOT make the FMC unattractive. So much for coming across her in our world.

Also, note that making your game a kinetic novel will lose a lot of potential players right off the bat. And even with people who try it, chances are high that they will run across something that causes them to stop playing.

Just noting some drawbacks that I believe could affect the acceptance of your game. I'm actually a firm believer that a developer should have a firm plan for a game and follow it regardless of criticism, even from me.

Also, since I haven't played it yet, I should shelve final judgment. I will take a look at it though, since I'm a sucker for pretty girls getting laid

I totally get everything you say Walter. The thing is that for me in a porn game, the look of the male makes absolutely no difference and neither does the size of his junk. As long as the woman is getting fucked, I don't care because I can pretend I am whichever guy is fucking her. It doesn't have to be humiliation, maybe I will make her want to make all these men feel good and alive and she willingly gives herself to them...it's fantasy so ya never know.

Yes I know a lot of people don't like Kinetic. It's ok because I am doing this for the fun of it. When I play choice games I want to see the worst stuff. And I feel that choice games take away from you writing your own original story. But I do know that a lot of people are just looking to Fap. But the erotic text from the thoughts of all the characters in my novel helps the imagery.

I have plan and I will stick with it. I greatly appreciate your input. I always like your comments in other game posts. Thank you sir.

 

[Silver]

Seriously, at least use some decent looking men. These men look hideous.