VN Ren'Py Abandoned Kindread: The Redburns [Ch. 5] [Inkalicious]

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Naxos said:
No, no and just no!

I nominate you as the first we feed to the zombies. :p
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Of course it would be completely optional...like choose a different tactic in a combat scene (attack with weapon/attack with hands) with the hands scene being the zombie fuckfest option.

I am fully-aware that some people aren't into that stuff. Some of us, however, are.
 
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TheWelshMan said:
Of course it would be completely optional...like choose a different tactic in a combat scene (attack with weapon/attack with hands) with the hands scene being the zombie fuckfest option.

I am fully-aware that some people aren't into that stuff. Some of us, however, are.
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I go through a lot of ideas. A lot. So did I think of horny zombies? Yes. Why not. If their base need to feed is there, why not procreation?
Also. MC's cum prevents infection.

Not for this VN though.
 
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slightchance said:
Not sure if the route I took is responsible for it but I do wish the MC wouldn't get a free pass for everything and his interactions have more dire consequences in the future. Being denied once or twice gives his sexual adventures more meaning, I think. He just came onto food like it was nothing. I find that a bit absurd even with the words free use attached to it.
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This scene was fun to do, and hopefully the set-up worked as you expected the MC to be hunting for someone else. It's also the first scene that actually involves the true definition of free use, in my understanding of it.
In other scenes, they've strayed away from the intent of free use, either by discussing the act itself or blurring the lines of it being a release for one, while blithely using another.
Think girl playing games while her free-use partner mounts her as she's engrossed in a boss kill.

It's also there to announce the resumption of the agreement between Sam and the MC, and this is important. We shouldn't forget that, as far as Sam is concerned, she cannot refuse. Unless it's weird. Which she has done, depending on your path.
With Megan, again the path may show that the MC doesn't always get what he wants.
 
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darlic said:
I don't believe this would be what the story tried to tell us so far. This game's about a light-hearted story of a guy and a couple of girls that have to live together due to more or less obvious reasons. Putting "real life dramas" inside such a game would completely ruin its story and meaning, in my opinion.
You can think this as a way to counterbalance the grim atmosphere that constantly surrounds our protagonists.
The (great) humor that is present in almost every line of dialogue couldn't make me think otherwise, really.
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I try to add humor where I can and the focus is very much on the characters, not the apocalypse, but I don't think it should be taken as light-hearted.

It's a general concern that I haven't brought enough focus to their situation and plight.
I could also probably trace people's dislike of the MC to the fact they're not taking into account the entire situation. OK, he is a dick, but he's a young guy who's dealt with death for... years? Everyone is dead. Or kinda dead. He's probably seen loved ones die. Then had to put them back down. They scavenge, so if that fails, they die.
Now he's suddenly been handed the keys to two kingdoms and has went crazy with boner power. Meanwhile Sam is suffering from PTSD and Megan has made questionable choices to keep everyone together.

It is light-hearted in its moments, but not as a survival story and I hope that the flash-forwards give an inkling of this.
 
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thorin0815 said:
You forgot a no (or 10), and if one of our girls were to get fucked by zombies, the unspeakable three letters would have to be added to the tags.
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Really? The no-one-but-me brigade would get their knickers in a twist about a rigor mortis erection?

Damn. I'll need to remove the scene with the dead-end alley way and pack of stray dogs...
 
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I try to add humor where I can and the focus is very much on the characters, not the apocalypse, but I don't think it should be taken as light-hearted.

It's a general concern that I haven't brought enough focus to their situation and plight.
I could also probably trace people's dislike of the MC to the fact they're not taking into account the entire situation. OK, he is a dick, but he's a young guy who's dealt with death for... years? Everyone is dead. Or kinda dead. He's probably seen loved ones die. Then had to put them back down. They scavenge, so if that fails, they die.
Now he's suddenly been handed the keys to two kingdoms and has went crazy with boner power. Meanwhile Sam is suffering from PTSD and Megan has made questionable choices to keep everyone together.

It is light-hearted in its moments, but not as a survival story and I hope that the flash-forwards give an inkling of this.
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Maybe time for one or two flashbacks, showing bad memories of past events leading to bonding this group/family together, and i don't even care about sexual content in such scenes if it helps story-telling.
 
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inkalicious said:
I could also probably trace people's dislike of the MC to the fact they're not taking into account the entire situation. OK, he is a dick, but he's a young guy who's dealt with death for... years? Everyone is dead. Or kinda dead. He's probably seen loved ones die. Then had to put them back down. They scavenge, so if that fails, they die.
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It's not so much that I dislike their interactions but that it feels that there's no room for normal interactions that doesn't revolve around jerking, blowing and shooting the load somewhere. The floodgates are open now.

I don't know what it's like to be in his position when there's no other drama I'm able to connect with. Maybe it feels that way because there was such a huge pause in between updates and I can't remember if the MC was ever any different so don't take my words too seriously. There are still very good scenes in it, even the one with the ranch dressing. The pacing could be different though, I guess. Or maybe I am just tired.
 
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slightchance said:
It's not so much that I dislike their interactions but that it feels that there's no room for normal interactions that doesn't revolve around jerking, blowing and shooting the load somewhere. The floodgates are open now.

I don't know what it's like to be in his position when there's no other drama I'm able to connect with. Maybe it feels that way because there was such a huge pause in between updates and I can't remember if the MC was ever any different so don't take my words too seriously. There are still very good scenes in it, even the one with the ranch dressing. The pacing could be different though, I guess. Or maybe I am just tired.
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I agree with you regarding the pacing in this chapter. It's a continuous leap from one sexual encounter to another. This is deliberate as I wanted to show the mental rut that had the MC's has, quite happily, been stuck in (chasing the next orgasm). But this chapter is slightly shorter than I'd like, so I hope the balance will be restored, very quickly, in Chapter 6.

And, yep, I think the production length is taking a toll on how the characters and story is unfolding. We're supposed to reach this stage obviously much quicker, so thanks to all who are hanging in there.
 
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