VN Ren'Py Abandoned Love, Demons and Broken Nose [v0.2.1] [Lawfullame]

[TundraLupus]

About relationships with Jane and Dana:

Jane: you will be able to maintain a friendship with benefits, or work to turn it into a romantic relationship or give away funny business with Jane

Dana: only a romantic relationship will be possible, and it requires not trying to have a romantic relationship with Jane or a friendship with benefits with Jane. The events of the first chapter have some influence, but do not prevent a romantic relationship with Dana.

So there will be no real harem path for the next few updates.

However, there are points of "Corruption" and many other factors for Dana. Corruption does not mean turning Dana into a total slut but it means that under certain circumstances, she will be open to a non-monogamous relationship involving MC, Jane and Danu in the late stages of my VN.

Those paths are not totally separated. It will mean different events, some short, some long, but then there will always be a common storyline before further branching, except for the final part of the game, which will lead to different endings.

Thanks for the response on that, as I said I really enjoy the game so far, and I do understand why you would put the third-person perspective, as I said it is more of a preference, but I will explain myself better on the inner thoughts, I do agree that they can be useful to deliver more information to the player, what I meant was, that there were inner thoughts where the character literally says, "I should take this route", and being that it is his thoughts it feels a little unnatural to follow a different one.

My main problem with inner monologues is what I talked about above, and overuse or when they are used to replace conversations or things that the environment can show, but I don't see that in your game.

 

[lawfullame]

V 0.2.1 is out

Today version 0.2.1 has been released.

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It's just a small update that fixes a few typos, includes a few reworded sentences and fixes issues that caused errors on some Android devices.
If you played Chapter 2 (0.2_beta) and this version worked on your device, you can skip 0.2.1.

Changelog

• A few minor changes in the texts and typo corrections.
• Resolved an issue that caused errors on some Android devices.
• File size reduced by about half

 

[ontach]

Appreciate the notification that this is a bugfix release - no new content. Thanks lawfullame for making it clear.

 

[Kyril87]

And now my comment on one funny review:


Although there are some horror elements, it is not my intention to create a truly horror visual novel. I think most people can recognize that there is a certain level of exaggeration. The supernatural entity that Vechernyaya mentions will play an important role in the story of the following chapters. And maybe some of you have noticed that it wasn't totally harmless in the second chapter either. Not every villain has to pose a direct physical threat.

About those "NRA"and "alt-right" things: MC and Jane were not very enthusiastic about firearms, and Dana also (sometimes) recognizes that they are not a universal solution for all situations. Looks like two or three of the jokes in my VN hurt someone's progressive feelings.

But I will not avoid such jokes in the next chapters just because people like Vechernyaya don't like them.
I don't think there are so many such jokes/commentsto be disturbing for most players.

Artistic integrity!
Do what you think is right. The game's fans will either stay or leave. I think you're doing O.K. (after several false starts), but this game has quite a way to go before it beats your previous effort.
Keep trying!
Best wishes.

 

[lawfullame]

Artistic integrity!
Do what you think is right. The game's fans will either stay or leave. I think you're doing O.K. (after several false starts), but this game has quite a way to go before it beats your previous effort.
Keep trying!
Best wishes.

False starts and previous efforts? This is the first VN I'm working on.
But, the uploader created a game thread for this VN at a time when my VN was more of a preview than an actual release.
From the beginning I work slowly but consistently on this VN.

 

[Kyril87]

False starts and previous efforts? This is the first VN I'm working on.
But, the uploader created a game thread for this VN at a time when my VN was more of a preview than an actual release.
From the beginning I work slowly but consistently on this VN.

My mistake!
I had confused this with another game. Premature senility?

 

[joejr1]

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Wow, a fiery ginger with an assault rifle.
This is undoubtedly my future wife.
Scary...ginger with a gun!!! Everyone look out! But I like it!

 

[L0thar]

She scares only enemies.
She just knows how to take care of herself

 

[lawfullame]

Appreciate the notification that this is a bugfix release - no new content. Thanks lawfullame for making it clear.

It will take a few months before I release an update that brings new content. Each major update will contain an entire chapter, sometimes shorter, sometimes longer. Between chapters I only want to release one small update that will fix the problem, typos, etc., if needed.

She scares only enemies.
She just knows how to take care of herself

Well, in Chapter 2, Dana scares friends rather than enemies.

 

[L0thar]

It will take a few months before I release an update that brings new content. Each major update will contain an entire chapter, sometimes shorter, sometimes longer. Between chapters I only want to release one small update that will fix the problem, typos, etc., if needed.

Well, in Chapter 2, Dana scares friends rather than enemies.

She doesn't scare me. On the contrary

 

[Sngo]

Good job in the game for now im enjoying it .
Nice humor, just love Jane and the high friend call was fun as hell.
Ty for adding Jane as a romance char and not just fuck buddy cause till now i like her alot more than Dana.
If we get a triangle they will be equal right? Not like Dana is the main girlfriend and Jane the second ?
The ghost format its a bit weird in my opinion looks like some sneak peek of a LOL champ.
Its refreshing not to see overly sized boobs and buts .
Im one of the people that really dont like NTR but if you are really planning on put it ty for being avoidable, the thing now is to see how that avoidable will be.
The sex scenes could be more elaborated in better posion for exemple reverse cow girl to show better the action, its more about a personal preference since i dislike some games when their sex scenes dont really show much of the action in the meaning seeing the d in an out the v, its a porn game not just erotica.
Keep Jane to the MC and keep the humor and i wish all the good luck in your vn.
Hoping to play chap3.

 

[lawfullame]

Good job in the game for now im enjoying it .
Nice humor, just love Jane and the high friend call was fun as hell.
Ty for adding Jane as a romance char and not just fuck buddy cause till now i like her alot more than Dana.
If we get a triangle they will be equal right? Not like Dana is the main girlfriend and Jane the second ?
The ghost format its a bit weird in my opinion looks like some sneak peek of a LOL champ.
Its refreshing not to see overly sized boobs and buts .
Im one of the people that really dont like NTR but if you are really planning on put it ty for being avoidable, the thing now is to see how that avoidable will be.
The sex scenes could be more elaborated in better posion for exemple reverse cow girl to show better the action, its more about a personal preference since i dislike some games when their sex scenes dont really show much of the action in the meaning seeing the d in an out the v, its a porn game not just erotica.
Keep Jane to the MC and keep the humor and i wish all the good luck in your vn.
Hoping to play chap3.

I'm glad that the humor works, at least for someone.
Some players take my VN more seriously than I take it and they see propaganda instead of humor.

One of the endings will include both girls in an equal position. But as I mentioned in one of my posts this week, harem content is not planned in the next few chapters. This possibility will come in the late stages if the player makes some decisions during the story.

About that ghost ... maybe it's a different type of entity. The name of my VN includes some hidden spoilers.

As for NTR, I know this is a bit of a sensitive topic on this forum. So I should probably find out what NTR actually means.
I heard that according to the understanding of some players, more than one dick in VN = NTR.
According to this definition, my VN would probably be NTR, because it was already possible to spot two dicks.
But the story will not be about competing for Jane or Dana with other men. There may be an ending where Jane or Dana ends up with another man, but only if the player wants to. So from this point of view, it will not be an NTR story.

There will be explicit sex scenes in my VN, various positions, including some close-ups, but it will definitely be one of the adult VNs that is less sex-oriented.

 

[ImperialD]

glad to see this game wasn't abandoned ,, i thought it was

 

[nevermoreXX]

daum.. this Dana is saying all the "wrong things"...

"This has been a closed matter for a very long time."
"Don't worry. I'm long past the point where it hurt."
fuck ghosts.. she is the dangerous one..girl with repressed feelings..and then astral projection.. 1+1..?

and marty? = shorty lol

 

[Kitchentable]

I like the Dana character. She's quirky. And volatile. Gonna be fun!!

The ladie's character models look great. I really appreciate the more natural look.
Really great and I peronally like the no make-up look too.

The renders are good. No noise, no grain. Very well.

And I like the humour. I mean just look at the title!

Proper english too. Decent size and amount of content.

Overall a very good and promising start or rather updates so far!

 

[lawfullame]

glad to see this game wasn't abandoned ,, i thought it was

I'm just slow. Work, family, children ..,
Those cute little angels, or maybe rather demons, can sometimes drain all my life force.

Honestly, I don't expect to have significantly more free time in the near future than I have had so far, but I've learned to do some things faster. So I hope that the development of the third chapter will be faster than the development of the second chapter. And a little more sleep at night, which is related to the fact that my little angels are growing up, may also help.

 

[Kitchentable]

In my country we have saying calling kids a gift from the heavens.
Only you never know wether they were meant as punishment or as a reward!

Anyhow, slow progress is better than no progress!

 

[ImperialD]

I'm just slow. Work, family, children ..,
Those cute little angels, or maybe rather demons, can sometimes drain all my life force.

Honestly, I don't expect to have significantly more free time in the near future than I have had so far, but I've learned to do some things faster. So I hope that the development of the third chapter will be faster than the development of the second chapter. And a little more sleep at night, which is related to the fact that my little angels are growing up, may also help.

i hear ya .. i've raised 7 kids ... currently have 6 grandkids & 3 great grandkids ... been thru it all ...

 

[lawfullame]

I started working on Chapter 3. I'm writing dialogues, at the moment I have about 180 lines and in the meantime I'm doing "casting" for the role of Jitka, one of the key characters who will be introduced in Chapter 3.
Jitka is a mysterious girl who will give our trio several answers related to the events of the previous chapters but at the same time she will try to keep some big secrets to herself.
In the story of Chapter 3, the main protagonist, together with Jane and Dana, will reveal some of Jitka's secrets.
I hope to be able to share a few preview images in the coming weeks.

 

[yelcho]

Just love the whole thing' story art and humour. hard to believe that it is first VN. The girls are so deliciously real and the English is better than from many native speakers. Please please keep on keeping on as you have been