Time for me bitching about grammar and stuff!
"I could take a load of of these old boots" should be "I could take a load off of these old boots"
"She hit's play" should be "She hits play"
"pushing there way in" should be "pushing Their way in"
"I've told you I wanted woke up like this" is awkward, either "I've told you I wanted to be woken up like this" or "I've told you I want to be woken up like this"
"I can't believe I stretch out that much" is fine, but a little clunky, "I can't believe it stretches me out that much" feels more natural.
"Feeling her tiny pressed against you" is missing a word, "Tiny Breasts" or "Tiny Body" seem like the most natural fits.
"I know your busy", "Your not too old", "Your always there", "If your up for it" all need "You're" in place of "Your"
And that's all I found.