Thank you so much for the super detailed criticism. As ever limitations of time and resources dictate the story. I try and release content at least once a week on
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, so comics need to get to the point quickly but believably. Lain takes those completed comics and turns them into VNs. I wish I could have a little more character growth, but I need to be able to tell a full (naughty) story in about 100 pages, so there just isn't time to flesh them out (pun intended).
As for the characters, art and the situations, the lack of porn that has any real plot other than "aggressive man bangs two balloons with sloppy holes" is the reason I started this. I wanted cute, beautiful girls that fit my preferred slim, small boobied aesthetic. I wanted them to be in control of the situations. I wanted the situations to be real life (ish). We girls get horny too, you know. And we have fantasies a little more nuanced than being raped over and over after getting plastic surgery.
So I made Betflix about a year and a half ago! Lots of people seemed to enjoy it, so I kept making content. Now I have nearly 20 complete comic series within the
Dumb Koala Comic Universe, 3 ongoing comics, dozens of photo sets, videos and 4 VNs starring over 30 girls!
I plan on doing this full time, so when I don't have a job getting in the way I can dictate a bit more time to making something a little more long form and dedicated to the VN format.
Thanks again!
Thanks for your time to answer. We grow on criticism, not on applause.
I always was more a fan of the petite slim body type. I also had more developed gfs, but generally i like them to be more petite. But in the huge jungle of VNs here, these girls are rare gems.
Many creators destroy a great atmosphere or general story idea, because they use the plastic surgery D cup victim on every age. With their nature to be
visual novels, you can't let your imagination work on a 18-20 years old girl, you have to live with the D-cup in the picture in front of you. For me, who always is looking for a bit of credibility in VNs, it's a pain in the ass and sad, because a great idea was killed with the art style.
Back to you:
I had the strong feeling Betflix was made from a real girls view. That was the first VN i've seen from you.
Btw: Betflix... what a awesome idea to use. I had a big smile on my face.
Also Vicky's got me the girl-written-vibe. Reason for this was the dads behavior. You put him into the weak position and let Vicky take developing advantage of the situation, that was a bit unusual. Also her addiction to watch the girls after she got him in her net was a indicator. But at same time she was not the common g/g only, what was unusual, too. That was unexpected for me and so, a great thing.
First i was a bit critical about g/g things, it just isn't my 100% preference. And most g/g VNs are just straight and flat b/g without a dick. But the thoughts you provided, made it different to the common just sex baloon party scene.
In my younger years i wrote a few short scene novels for two of my girlfriends about my phantasies with them. I only can say, it worked for them, they loved it. They begged for more.
(I wrote them in my native language, german. What is much better than my crippled english.)
It's not the easiest thing to share the own feelings, phantasies and thoughts, my greatest respect to you.
Maybe it's a bit harder as a man to write about these inner phantasies, maybe it's for girls also that hard. Only you can know that.
Great to get a feeling, how you feel yourself, creating theses novels. Thank you.
I always had the feeling girls prefer a bit more emotional, with wider developed "stages" but not less naughty, scenes. A bit less fast paced. And as you confirmed with the scripts to the VNs i've seen so far, they don't want all flowerish, nice and girlish, sometimes it can be a bit rougher, dirty, but not (always) just bang-a-wang and story/fap finished.
I only wanted to give a more detailed comment, to help to understand the more matured male pov. Not all of us stand for the fast fap.
Characterwise i'm not sissy, masochistic or a pheromon-driven creature. I'm just a normal straight man, who like cute girls. I just wanted to tell my impression of the novels and what edges could help to bring the story to a more developed project.
Sure, i understand the limitations of time and space. It took a lot of time for me with my novels, too. And i'm not a artist, god help, if i would have to create a comic...
Maybe i see some more thought conflicts in your stories in the future. I don't want a whole book, but i think 3-10 more conflicted renders/thought scenes could create a more intensive/ complex/ believable story.
Perhaps you provide me your age by pm, to better understand, what mind age created these novels. I don't want to be your boyfriend,
we all know you are in love with Holly!
Tell Lain, he/she is a visual creator god.
