- Jul 10, 2017
- 60
- 486
- Nov 21, 2018
- 1,820
- 4,019
Oh i stick to my themes no matter what, i'm only sad that i have mislead people with a lack of tags.
But even then, i think about all criticism, and some of the stuff people have mentioned actually makes sense, and i plan to twist one of the storylines a little due to this, which in my opinion will make it better(It was something i didn't even think about as a possibility, but now it seems so obvious that should have been the goal all along!)
Good for you, I hope that means what I think it means hehe. MC is gonna get the "landlady" right?
One question, maybe it's a bit of a spoiler but will MC ever "rein" Diasy in....preferably with his dick
Seriously though, like I said before the scenes with her are hot but it feels odd that she gets to basically walk in and walk out...while the MC is sleeping no less. I mean it's his place and he doesn't even know wtf is going on with his sister. Also it's like Diane is rubbing it in his face and his response is like "w0t ar u TaLkInG AbOuT?"
When I think about it, if Diane wasn't female you would be drowning in complaints of "NTR", because that's really the only thing "saving" it. The lesbian clause is circumventing most of that cuz a lot of guys find it hot myself included but still.
I think the models are fine as is. Short and petite doesn't mean underaged, but allowing the player to set the age doesn't hurt anybody. Whoever wants the fantasy gets it and those that don't simply set what they are comfortable with.
Last edited:
- Nov 21, 2018
- 1,820
- 4,019
- Nov 21, 2018
- 1,820
- 4,019
Good for you, I hope that means what I think it means hehe. MC is gonna get the "landlady" right?
One question, maybe it's a bit of a spoiler but will MC ever "rein" Diasy in....preferably with his dick
Seriously though, like I said before the scenes with her are hot but it feels odd that she gets to basically walk in and walk out...while the MC is sleeping no less. I mean it's his place and he doesn't even know wtf is going on with his sister. Also it's like Diane is rubbing it in his face and his response is like "w0t ar u TaLkInG AbOuT?"
When I think about it, if Diane wasn't female you would be drowning in complaints of "NTR", because that's really the only thing "saving" it. The lesbian clause is circumventing most of that cuz a lot of guys find it hot myself included but still.
I think the models are fine as is. Short and petite doesn't mean underaged, but allowing the player to set the age doesn't hurt anybody. Whoever wants the fantasy gets it and those that don't simply set what they are comfortable with.
I though I was confusing myself but Starr does refer to Daisy as "Diane" at least once. I changed my comments back to "Daisy" since that is what her name label says. Was this an oversight or did I miss something in the story? ApaGod
You don't have permission to view the spoiler content.
Log in or register now.
- Jul 10, 2017
- 60
- 486
I'm pretty sure i confused myself with the name... she's supposed to be Daisy... and i called her Diane from what i remember, so it's a shitshow of a mishmash of her name. Already straightened it out so it's just one name all the way through now.
- Oct 29, 2017
- 1,204
- 888
then simply don't mind what other people think. people have different opinions. they have theirs and you have yours. what matters is what you believe in. People will always be divided and look at different things in different perspectives. Either its from their culture, where they live , etc. You wanted them to look young but not your intention for them to be underaged, so? i don't see the problem there. It doesn't even specify which country they live in nor is the world they live in ours. there are countries where women are short, from 4'11" to 5', and sometimes that's the average or normal height in their region. If some people refuse to be open minded and understand that fact, then it's not anymore your problem, even as a developer. Everyone can be weird, we all have that in each and everyone. That's part of being human.
- Nov 21, 2018
- 1,820
- 4,019
- Jan 20, 2020
- 2,886
- 4,280
hawaian
Capital I for "I"
"as well" is too words
I'd suggest adding "is" to the end of the sentence i.e "Let's see how good this bed is." also it's "let's" and not "lets"
"at least" is also two words
"conscience"
"That's right, ever since they turned <age> "
"haven't"
Capital I for "I"
"as well" is too words
I'd suggest adding "is" to the end of the sentence i.e "Let's see how good this bed is." also it's "let's" and not "lets"
"at least" is also two words
"conscience"
"That's right, ever since they turned <age> "
"haven't"
Last edited:
- Jul 10, 2017
- 60
- 486
I'll just say i don't think we share the same preferences fully, but those ain't bad suggestions you made
.Not gonna promise it happens on your terms though
- Nov 21, 2018
- 1,820
- 4,019
I guess that's fair enough. Maybe there could be a middle ground.I'll just say i don't think we share the same preferences fully, but those ain't bad suggestions you made
Not gonna promise it happens on your terms though
I'll wait and see then.
- Jan 20, 2020
- 2,886
- 4,280
Make the game you want, don't let others dictate how you do it. Although I will say for the writing remember not to make it txt speech, so don't shorten words by removing vowels.I'll just say i don't think we share the same preferences fully, but those ain't bad suggestions you made
Not gonna promise it happens on your terms though
- Jul 10, 2017
- 60
- 486
- Jul 10, 2017
- 60
- 486
- Mar 31, 2020
- 1,677
- 3,054
- Nov 21, 2018
- 1,820
- 4,019
You don't have permission to view the spoiler content.
Log in or register now.
TLDR: Constructive criticism is good.
- Jul 10, 2017
- 60
- 486
Extremely! But it is also refreshing for people to say what he said, even if the two sides can seem to be opposites, they are both needed to keep the developer motivated to create the best game he's capable of.
- Jun 26, 2018
- 8,678
- 12,174
The truth is that I don't see anything in that lesbian kiss scene that makes me more interested in either of the two LIs (I'm going to assume that both are). Quite the contrary, that scene makes them less desirable. In fact, the way I see it, it's getting a lot closer to NTR than I'm comfortable with.
Better not. There are too many games that overdo feminine body traits, and usually it looks ugly because it's unnatural.
I had a tall girlfriend (about 175 cm) with really narrow hips. And there are so many tall supermodels with tiny tits (check internet if you aren't sure
). So we don't need to fall into constraints of stereotypes.In Mongolia or somewhere around that I heard a proverb, "Small dog is a puppy until really old", which means petite women often look young. It's true. The twins look like they could be anywhere from 15-16 to 25-26 and even older. So don't worry about that.
Perhaps you are right. It's just some people (like me) find beautiful girls kissing extremely hot. And as a story element, that experience could help the girl to kiss MC more readily (in the future).
So I wouldn't mind that first lesbian scene, especially if it lead to a harem development. (Their second scene was pretty unpleasant for me though).
- Jan 20, 2020
- 2,886
- 4,280
"loser" he's not loose (as in not tight)
On the sofa
As a suggestion, I think "yea" should be "yeah"
"I've got.." and "red"
Remove the "for" i.e "Is it really best business to shame your customers?"
Either just "conscience" or "subconcious"
"You weren't..."
I think "nh!" rather than "Ih!" for involuntary noises
asleep
you were
no-one
Unless he's gone mad and rhyming everything. Forever
were
Yeah my bad
On the sofa
As a suggestion, I think "yea" should be "yeah"
"I've got.." and "red"
Remove the "for" i.e "Is it really best business to shame your customers?"
Either just "conscience" or "subconcious"
"You weren't..."
I think "nh!" rather than "Ih!" for involuntary noises
asleep
you were
no-one
Unless he's gone mad and rhyming everything. Forever
were
Last edited: