VN Ren'Py My New Daughter's Lover Reboot [v0.7 Public] [DerketoGames]

[Takkertje]

My first car!
Opel Kadett.
I thank you.

 

[AnyName'llDo]

The main character's hair is distractingly awful. I would recommend shaving his head over keeping what he's got going on.

 

[Cavpal]

My first car!
Opel Kadett.
I thank you.

Damn, that's brutal! My condolences, man, no one deserves an infernal contraption like that; your previous incarnartion really dropped the ball, and now you're paying for his shortcomings...

 

[Richard Perkins]

where the loli at???

 

[Fightno1]

1 word, 'Nice'.

 

[Xo Mo]

The Engrish started out not too poorly, but it seems to be growing steadily worse.
Incomplete or half sentences that are missing either nouns, verbs, or have inverted male-female pronouns... very distracting and confusing.
The renders are merely okay. Camera angles seem random, most do not show well-lit or well-posed still images/characters in a flattering way.
The premise is typical but still intriguing. I'm hoping to plow through the existing content and see if the later chapters get any better or worse.

The font size could also be smaller, especially here:

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[5mithers]

Came here to also complain about the engrish and gender-swapped pronouns.

In a lot of language translations I could understand it. But it seems the developer is a native Spanish speaker. And Spanish has gendered pronouns. So for it to be this bad.... I would almost say it's a skill to pull it off.

 

[artichoke1979]

Ok I'm not going to bash the developer just for the sake of it but seriously it's 2024, even Google Translate can provide a better translation than the crap in this VN.

I understand that English is not his main language, but still.

If you're going to make a game for English speakers, please put in a small effort or just don't do it.

The renders look allright, the story is mehhh (been done like a thousand times) but ok, but my god the English, you spend more time trying to understand the dialogues.

 

[MrBenny]

Hmm...I suggest using RenPy's internal translating choice when generating your RenPy system/game files, to create a RenPy English format of the project. This can aid this title's future with getting the much needed language support, which can improve the English release of this project.

Even just using the ingame language choice when choosing English, it still doesn't completely make all the settings into English. But having a version of the RenPy system files completely translated, would help this title get english support from WT modders or much needed dialog support.

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Anyways, just a suggestion to help with the English market, which makes up a very large portion of the AVN industry marketplace.

Regards.

 

[Xo Mo]

OK... Just reached end of 0.7...

Thoughts... Typos, translation, and incomplete lines of dialogue aside...

The premise is very good. Strong presentation overall.

What would improve the game:

1. Every render that is "natural light" should be brightened/re-rendered at a brighter light level. Way too many pitch black images in the game, making it impossible to see what is rendered. Might as well be blackscreen in those instances. (I count a minimum of 20-30 renders that are 99% black.)

2. Find/hire a translator or script editor to polish and correct the English translation.

3. Browse through the royalty free / license-free sound effects and music available around the web. Add some atmospheric instrumental music to each scene. Consider adding moans/sex sound effects/sighs as well as vehicle or punch sound effects where those are needed. Being a VISUAL novel is fine, but adding the third dimension of SOUND will bring your game to life.

Royalty Free / Public Domain sound effects and music:
PIR

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Pixabay

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FMA

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BenSound

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Youtube Audio Library

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AVOID: Kevin MacLeod music. It's overused. No link from me for that one...

4. Give players a choice on where to finish with a woman, unless it's an essential aspect of the game to predetermine that "outcome"... So MC can finish inside, outside, on face, on body, on ass, or in mouth... Giving choices gives players the power, the control, and the satisfaction of being able to choose. A consideration - if pregnancy is a possible aspect of the game in the future - you'd need to set variables for internal when the girl is ovulating. Existing hints at potential consequences adds to the pleasure for some players who just want all the girls popping baby bumps. If that is something you plan to include at all.

5. If this game has zero chance at becoming a HAREM game, many players will be disappointed. If it's not gonna happen, make it very clear from the start. RN, it's still a possibility, with so many lovers to spend time with. Certainly the main love interest has our hearts, but MC is known for being a sultan, why not offer players a possible harem of women? Just asking.

 

[Richard Perkins]

5. include the loli's

 

[Firaxius]

I want to like this VN as the renders are pretty ok, but reading the english text is a pain, i'm not english speaking myself, but reading this is giving me a headache. Most of the time i don't understand what the characters are actualy saying, it's like i need to reconstruct ever sentence and remove the faults to even understand it. Like others suggested, find someone with more knowledge if english and can translate your spanish text into correct english text.

 

[DeD95]

4. Give players a choice on where to finish with a woman, unless it's an essential aspect of the game to predetermine that "outcome"... So MC can finish inside, outside, on face, on body, on ass, or in mouth... Giving choices gives players the power, the control, and the satisfaction of being able to choose. A consideration - if pregnancy is a possible aspect of the game in the future - you'd need to set variables for internal when the girl is ovulating. Existing hints at potential consequences adds to the pleasure for some players who just want all the girls popping baby bumps. If that is something you plan to include at all.

Can I get an AMEN brothers and sisters!! this is so F*CKING TRUE!!! player choice where to finish should be a mainstay in a Adult game honestly! just because you as a DEV only likes Creampies and facials does not mean all your playerbase will! im a "finish on Butt" guy! and nothing ticks me off more when you have a awesome doggystyle scene but no choice or no pullout option.. and im sure im not alone on this site..and sure I get it takes extra rendering time but if you have a patreon/subscribstar when Im sure you could put in the extra effort just me 2 cents and fully agree with Xo Mo

 

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[DKeeto]

Came here to also complain about the engrish and gender-swapped pronouns.

In a lot of language translations I could understand it. But it seems the developer is a native Spanish speaker. And Spanish has gendered pronouns. So for it to be this bad.... I would almost say it's a skill to pull it off.

Ok I'm not going to bash the developer just for the sake of it but seriously it's 2024, even Google Translate can provide a better translation than the crap in this VN.

I understand that English is not his main language, but still.

If you're going to make a game for English speakers, please put in a small effort or just don't do it.

The renders look allright, the story is mehhh (been done like a thousand times) but ok, but my god the English, you spend more time trying to understand the dialogues.

I think that all the comments like this are just a meme right now, and are used as a trigger to start insulting the game (why don't you better learn another language), all the comments like these is why I'm thinking on dropping english support on upcoming versions, also I'm never tried to aim the english market, where they who came to my games.
My english isn't as bad as the one on the game, but using a online translator is the only option I have right now (and my supporters never complained because most of them wheren't from the US).
Also is funny how the vast majority of guys here complain with the translation as they where my bosses, but they never gived me any money.
So I'm going to tell you the same I've said to nezron, you want a better english? here is the file, help me with that:

After that he claimed that he isn't the best english at grammar, and I should find another guy to do that.

The main character's hair is distractingly awful. I would recommend shaving his head over keeping what he's got going on.

The hair thing isn't new to me, other guys on ********** told me that, but the change may happen on chapter II, I need to ask on TG what hair looks better, and also make test to see the VRAM usage, I have another character with shaved head that use Macario skin (the guy called Marcus from PNBR) here is the one of the hairs I'm testing:

OK... Just reached end of 0.7...

Thoughts... Typos, translation, and incomplete lines of dialogue aside...

The premise is very good. Strong presentation overall.

What would improve the game:

1. Every render that is "natural light" should be brightened/re-rendered at a brighter light level. Way too many pitch black images in the game, making it impossible to see what is rendered. Might as well be blackscreen in those instances. (I count a minimum of 20-30 renders that are 99% black.)

2. Find/hire a translator or script editor to polish and correct the English translation.

3. Browse through the royalty free / license-free sound effects and music available around the web. Add some atmospheric instrumental music to each scene. Consider adding moans/sex sound effects/sighs as well as vehicle or punch sound effects where those are needed. Being a VISUAL novel is fine, but adding the third dimension of SOUND will bring your game to life.

Royalty Free / Public Domain sound effects and music:
PIR

You must be registered to see the links

Pixabay

You must be registered to see the links

FMA

You must be registered to see the links

BenSound

You must be registered to see the links

Youtube Audio Library

You must be registered to see the links

AVOID: Kevin MacLeod music. It's overused. No link from me for that one...

4. Give players a choice on where to finish with a woman, unless it's an essential aspect of the game to predetermine that "outcome"... So MC can finish inside, outside, on face, on body, on ass, or in mouth... Giving choices gives players the power, the control, and the satisfaction of being able to choose. A consideration - if pregnancy is a possible aspect of the game in the future - you'd need to set variables for internal when the girl is ovulating. Existing hints at potential consequences adds to the pleasure for some players who just want all the girls popping baby bumps. If that is something you plan to include at all.

5. If this game has zero chance at becoming a HAREM game, many players will be disappointed. If it's not gonna happen, make it very clear from the start. RN, it's still a possibility, with so many lovers to spend time with. Certainly the main love interest has our hearts, but MC is known for being a sultan, why not offer players a possible harem of women? Just asking.

Thanks for the feedback, I'll see what I can improve on upcoming versions; I'll give more context on some of the issues you mention:
About the dark images, is maybe due the new monitors that tend to show better blacks, but in the way a lot of manufacturers use cheap chinese panels, and have poor contrast on them, and are more similar to phone screens; So on the v0.8 I've changed the lighting for dark scenes, and gradually I'll remake the previous ones too, you can see it below:

Also, the menus that aren't translater are fixed along with the quick menu ones ("guardar" instead of "save"), but I forgot if I've applied the fix on the v0.7 or was just on the v0.8

The official game tags are these:

Remember that I don't own the threads, so the tags you see here aren't added by me, specially the loli one that has been discused earlier, I don't have much assets on the first game version, so I've worked with the ones I had, also the story happen on a fictionate world, but isn't US based as the majority of games are (is based on Latam), so if you see a short character doesn't mean that is a "loli", could be from México, Bolivia or Tatooine (I think is called Perú now).
I'm not a coder, so I've left the music and sounds for the end (when the game is completed), to not break something on the code that likely I won't be able to fix by myself.
Lastly the choices on the sex scenes, my hardware is very limited so I can't make many things right now, I've make some tests on the game below, before implementing it to others (yes the one that features Stacy & her Mom):

Is on a early state (just the v0.1 done), and only the first "bad path" is completed, when the game has archivements I will call this one "the horny boy" and the other one "the mothersucker", it was available on Patreon before it my account was deleted, and based on the feedback this was my "best" game with difference, the curiosity is that this game turned on the "Derketo's Lewd Housemates" (originally Marcos was this guy), and I think this is my biggest mistake.

Can I get an AMEN brothers and sisters!! this is so F*CKING TRUE!!! player choice where to finish should be a mainstay in a Adult game honestly! just because you as a DEV only likes Creampies and facials does not mean all your playerbase will! im a "finish on Butt" guy! and nothing ticks me off more when you have a awesome doggystyle scene but no choice or no pullout option.. and im sure im not alone on this site..and sure I get it takes extra rendering time but if you have a patreon/subscribstar when Im sure you could put in the extra effort just me 2 cents and fully agree with Xo Mo

I don't have Patreon or SubcribeStar, what are you talking about?, I know that I put much effort on the development, and try to improve on every update, but as many here didn't follow the development logs, just talk nonesenses.

Anyway, I hope that the majority of users enjoyed my "0/5 stars" games, I hope the next development year is better, because I'm done with this one (I've told I don't deserve all the hate, but since is december the losers need a piñata to have fun on their miserable lifes), see you next year!.

 

[artichoke1979]

I think that all the comments like this are just a meme right now, and are used as a trigger to start insulting the game (why don't you better learn another language), all the comments like these is why I'm thinking on dropping english support on upcoming versions, also I'm never tried to aim the english market, where they who came to my games.
My english isn't as bad as the one on the game, but using a online translator is the only option I have right now (and my supporters never complained because most of them wheren't from the US).
Also is funny how the vast majority of guys here complain with the translation as they where my bosses, but they never gived me any money.
So I'm going to tell you the same I've said to nezron, you want a better english? here is the file, help me with that:

After that he claimed that he isn't the best english at grammar, and I should find another guy to do that.


The hair thing isn't new to me, other guys on ********** told me that, but the change may happen on chapter II, I need to ask on TG what hair looks better, and also make test to see the VRAM usage, I have another character with shaved head that use Macario skin (the guy called Marcus from PNBR) here is the one of the hairs I'm testing:
View attachment 4316461 View attachment 4316478


Thanks for the feedback, I'll see what I can improve on upcoming versions; I'll give more context on some of the issues you mention:
About the dark images, is maybe due the new monitors that tend to show better blacks, but in the way a lot of manufacturers use cheap chinese panels, and have poor contrast on them, and are more similar to phone screens; So on the v0.8 I've changed the lighting for dark scenes, and gradually I'll remake the previous ones too, you can see it below:
View attachment 4316516 View attachment 4316517 View attachment 4316518
Also, the menus that aren't translater are fixed along with the quick menu ones ("guardar" instead of "save"), but I forgot if I've applied the fix on the v0.7 or was just on the v0.8
View attachment 4316485 View attachment 4316486 View attachment 4316487
The official game tags are these:
View attachment 4316526
Remember that I don't own the threads, so the tags you see here aren't added by me, specially the loli one that has been discused earlier, I don't have much assets on the first game version, so I've worked with the ones I had, also the story happen on a fictionate world, but isn't US based as the majority of games are (is based on Latam), so if you see a short character doesn't mean that is a "loli", could be from México, Bolivia or Tatooine (I think is called Perú now).
I'm not a coder, so I've left the music and sounds for the end (when the game is completed), to not break something on the code that likely I won't be able to fix by myself.
Lastly the choices on the sex scenes, my hardware is very limited so I can't make many things right now, I've make some tests on the game below, before implementing it to others (yes the one that features Stacy & her Mom):
View attachment 4316588 View attachment 4316589 View attachment 4316590 View attachment 4316591 View attachment 4316592 View attachment 4316593 View attachment 4316594 View attachment 4316595 View attachment 4316596 View attachment 4316597 View attachment 4316598 View attachment 4316599
Is on a early state (just the v0.1 done), and only the first "bad path" is completed, when the game has archivements I will call this one "the horny boy" and the other one "the mothersucker", it was available on Patreon before it my account was deleted, and based on the feedback this was my "best" game with difference, the curiosity is that this game turned on the "Derketo's Lewd Housemates" (originally Marcos was this guy), and I think this is my biggest mistake.


I don't have Patreon or SubcribeStar, what are you talking about?, I know that I put much effort on the development, and try to improve on every update, but as many here didn't follow the development logs, just talk nonesenses.

Anyway, I hope that the majority of users enjoyed my "0/5 stars" games, I hope the next development year is better, because I'm done with this one (I've told I don't deserve all the hate, but since is december the losers need a piñata to have fun on their miserable lifes), see you next year!.

Dude dude dude, get off your high horse. I found out about your game on F95 update page, I downloaded it and checked. I never insulted you or your game, I was polite. I also never personally asked you to make it in English.

YOU FUCKING MADE AN ENGLISH VERSION... YOU... YOURSELF.

So why the fuck would I give my money to someone who can't even make a tiny effort to make some easy corrections to the grammar.

I'm not talking about the whole fucking dialogue, but you could at least check some small things by yourself like the pronouns or like you said "my English isn't as bad as in the game" so you could at least read the English dialogue and make the appropriate corrections.

Also I speak 3 languages, Spanish is not one of them, I have no use for Spanish, I'm not planning to learn it and never will, so no I won't be translating your game, I don't care about it.

You can abandon it completely, you can make a Spanish only version or whatever the fuck you want to do, I don't give a shit.

You yourself uploaded the fucking game with an AWFUL CRAPPY ENGLISH translation so if you don't like critics, stop making VN's in other languages.

Don't worry, I deleted your game with your ugly gorilla looking MC.

Peace

 

[DKeeto]

Dude dude dude, get off your high horse. I found out about your game on F95 update page, I downloaded it and checked. I never insulted you or your game, I was polite. I also never personally asked you to make it in English.

YOU FUCKING MADE AN ENGLISH VERSION... YOU... YOURSELF.

So why the fuck would I give my money to someone who can't even make a tiny effort to make some easy corrections to the grammar.

I'm not talking about the whole fucking dialogue, but you could at least check some small things by yourself like the pronouns or like you said "my English isn't as bad as in the game" so you could at least read the English dialogue and make the appropriate corrections.

Also I speak 3 languages, Spanish is not one of them, I have no use for Spanish, I'm not planning to learn it and never will, so no I won't be translating your game, I don't care about it.

You can abandon it completely, you can make a Spanish only version or whatever the fuck you want to do, I don't give a shit.

You yourself uploaded the fucking game with an AWFUL CRAPPY ENGLISH translation so if you don't like critics, stop making VN's in other languages.

Don't worry, I deleted your game with your ugly gorilla looking MC.

Peace

I wasn't talking about you (just took some random post and generalized), but your reaction proves my point; at least you make me laugh calling Macario a "ugly gorilla", and certainly a shaved gorilla may look like him, a girl may choice a cute looking korean guy instead of Macario, but womans like the masculinity; text below isn't about you, bye and thanks for the feedback!.

About the "script.rpy" that I've shared on my previous post, the file is already translated, and I'm not talking anyone on specific (the mistake was write "I'm going to tell you" instead of "I'm going to tell any of you"), and the a whole translation isn't needed, just help with grammar corrections be needed, can be done easier to any english speaker, so know spanish isn't a requirement (although will make things easier), now I'll be going, my links are below to anyone that need it (the telegram linked is the public one), good bye.

 

[MrBenny]

Adjustment Mod

Hi...

I complied a few modifications together, as well included a few UI changes for this newish title. I also included about 50% of the way adjusting the dialog with English corrections. (Though, I stopped at around the hotel scene, where MC was having a flash back moment.)

Also includes the following:

• Made changes to the gui settings; decreased the dialog font size, moved the dialog position up higher.
• Edited the English translation files; fixed the English translations for the Ren'Py setting names
• Edited (work in progress) the English script translation file, corrected some mis-translations or many of the grammar errors (I missed some as I'm no writer or great a grammar star.) (English corrected up position 5083 (75%)
• Included the URM tool, which can be used to see behind some choices, or edit Ren'Py code (add points, see requirement checks happen, etc.) (Editing= ALT m will bring up the URM search window.)
• Included the Universal Choice Descriptor mod, which is used to display hidden info (on screen) that can be hidden behind some of the story choices (points or other info). (This is NOT a walk through mod, but this mod/tool can provide some hidden info that can help with making choices in the story.)
• Included a custom font outline script which aids with better displaying of the dialog text on screen (better viability for us older folks).
• Included a quick menu hiding script, which aid with cleaning up the dialog area of your screen (Just use your Q key to hide or display your quick menu at any time of play).

Install:
Just extract and merge the mod's game folder with this titles game folder (over write when prompted). Then run your game exe, and enjoy this title's minor changes and added utility features.

Note: Most of this mod compilation should not need regular updates, (provided no changes are done to the original Ren'py engine of this title)… Most of this mod compilation should still continue to work for future game releases.

(Also Note, the English translation script file is a work in progress feature, and I'm not sure if I will have the desire to complete the updating. Sorry. Maybe other can take over.)

And finally, I tested this MOD on a clean game version without having to UnRen (exstaact) it. If you get a loading error, exit and try again...as this happened once for me, and reloading corrected the load error issue for me.

Regards.



Optional:


A suggestion, the image below is displaying the ( Universal Music Mod ) which I use regularly for any titles that don't have sound or music. As the image below shows this music mod works very well with this title. (Also this 3rd party mod will play MP3's and other music file formats.)

And this player mod can be compiled with your own selection of music files in the assigned easy access folders. Also suggest to make things easier...keep a copy of the original umm folder somewhere, and just place (move) it inside any game folder of the title of your choice. (Note some versions of Ren'Py can cause errors with this mod, or it can have issues how a title has been coded. )

Also due to the size of this music player mod and music flies, I excluded it from the adjustment mod. But it's a recommendation to use it to compliment playing this title.

Regards

(Also, once the UMM folder has been installed, run your RenPy title's exe and press your P key to bring up the music player settings.)

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Update: (English translation file edited up position 5083 (about 75% done)

 

[DeD95]

I think that all the comments like this are just a meme right now, and are used as a trigger to start insulting the game (why don't you better learn another language), all the comments like these is why I'm thinking on dropping english support on upcoming versions, also I'm never tried to aim the english market, where they who came to my games.
My english isn't as bad as the one on the game, but using a online translator is the only option I have right now (and my supporters never complained because most of them wheren't from the US).
Also is funny how the vast majority of guys here complain with the translation as they where my bosses, but they never gived me any money.
So I'm going to tell you the same I've said to nezron, you want a better english? here is the file, help me with that:

After that he claimed that he isn't the best english at grammar, and I should find another guy to do that.


The hair thing isn't new to me, other guys on ********** told me that, but the change may happen on chapter II, I need to ask on TG what hair looks better, and also make test to see the VRAM usage, I have another character with shaved head that use Macario skin (the guy called Marcus from PNBR) here is the one of the hairs I'm testing:
View attachment 4316461 View attachment 4316478


Thanks for the feedback, I'll see what I can improve on upcoming versions; I'll give more context on some of the issues you mention:
About the dark images, is maybe due the new monitors that tend to show better blacks, but in the way a lot of manufacturers use cheap chinese panels, and have poor contrast on them, and are more similar to phone screens; So on the v0.8 I've changed the lighting for dark scenes, and gradually I'll remake the previous ones too, you can see it below:
View attachment 4316516 View attachment 4316517 View attachment 4316518
Also, the menus that aren't translater are fixed along with the quick menu ones ("guardar" instead of "save"), but I forgot if I've applied the fix on the v0.7 or was just on the v0.8
View attachment 4316485 View attachment 4316486 View attachment 4316487
The official game tags are these:
View attachment 4316526
Remember that I don't own the threads, so the tags you see here aren't added by me, specially the loli one that has been discused earlier, I don't have much assets on the first game version, so I've worked with the ones I had, also the story happen on a fictionate world, but isn't US based as the majority of games are (is based on Latam), so if you see a short character doesn't mean that is a "loli", could be from México, Bolivia or Tatooine (I think is called Perú now).
I'm not a coder, so I've left the music and sounds for the end (when the game is completed), to not break something on the code that likely I won't be able to fix by myself.
Lastly the choices on the sex scenes, my hardware is very limited so I can't make many things right now, I've make some tests on the game below, before implementing it to others (yes the one that features Stacy & her Mom):
View attachment 4316588 View attachment 4316589 View attachment 4316590 View attachment 4316591 View attachment 4316592 View attachment 4316593 View attachment 4316594 View attachment 4316595 View attachment 4316596 View attachment 4316597 View attachment 4316598 View attachment 4316599
Is on a early state (just the v0.1 done), and only the first "bad path" is completed, when the game has archivements I will call this one "the horny boy" and the other one "the mothersucker", it was available on Patreon before it my account was deleted, and based on the feedback this was my "best" game with difference, the curiosity is that this game turned on the "Derketo's Lewd Housemates" (originally Marcos was this guy), and I think this is my biggest mistake.


I don't have Patreon or SubcribeStar, what are you talking about?, I know that I put much effort on the development, and try to improve on every update, but as many here didn't follow the development logs, just talk nonesenses.

Anyway, I hope that the majority of users enjoyed my "0/5 stars" games, I hope the next development year is better, because I'm done with this one (I've told I don't deserve all the hate, but since is december the losers need a piñata to have fun on their miserable lifes), see you next year!.

YO Dev i was not "attacking" you BTW! and I saw the patreon Subsciption(i was unaware it was taken down ok), all I was trying to say is it would be nice to add Pullout options and give players choice in sex scenes and finish options as Xo Mo was discribing in his fair and truthfull assesment.

ok I get the "hardware is limited" as you say but still it would be nice try and add my friend! your game aint bad! never said it was! I was just giving my 2 cents as alot of games are doing this now a days and thats it.

 

[sigvar]

Hmmm, methinks dev response to criticism elucidates the potential for positive future rectification of said issues. Bye.