VN Ren'Py Completed New Earth [Ch.2 Final] [MiZtyl]

[Virulenz]

Holy shit...this may be the first game who leads me into tyranny O_O

 

[bluees]

MiZtyl there is one thing that I think I could point out. If, in the dream/memory sequences are that of the MC then, you might want to consider changing the name, Andrea, to Andreas. That is, if the memory is that of a male. Andrea is a female name while Andreas is a male's.

Andrea name can be both male or female. chill it's a name in a game, it could be also puppy-poo-poo

 

[Gamer_01]

There are a lot of male Andrea.

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Huh, I suppose I'm going to have to add that to my growing list of "Regional Name Preferences". I guess, being an American, this is one of those things I never seem to encounter. Thanks for the information.

 

[bluees]

Huh, I suppose I'm going to have to add that to my growing list of "Regional Name Preferences". I guess, being an American, this is one of those things I never seem to encounter. Thanks for the information.

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[Gamer_01]

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"Outside of Italy, the name is generally considered a female name." (I'm quoting from the link you gave.) I hope you can see my slight confusion. I merely thought that it could be a mistranslation or typo.

 

[bluees]

"Outside of Italy, the name is generally considered a female name." (I'm quoting from the link you gave.) I hope you can see my slight confusion. I merely thought that it could be a mistranslation or typo.

If you read the article the name is so much more controversial and there are a lot of country that uses it as a male name as there are that use it as a female. I was pleased by this magnificent revelation for something totally ordinary like a name.

 

[XJ347]

1/ The player can name the main character.
2/ Play carefully before discussing about the apocalypse, orphanage, EJ... I don't have time to provide the information which are already inside the game.
3/ The animations are 15-30 frames for each animations depends on far sight or near sight. There's no 3 frame animation.
4/ Justin hasn't fucked Veronica yet. I guess people only look at the images and wank without reading the texts.
5/ Forever no incest. No point of discussion.
6/ Enough with the 'not enough human', 'must have animals'... I do what I can do with a limited funds and time.

You seem super defensive. If you want me to stop talking to you about your product I will. I am actually trying to help you understand issues I see in the game.

Let me answer your responses.

1. I'm saying player named characters lead to boring stories. So it is a warning sign of boring generic things to come. Note some people like blank slates, so this is an opinion that you can ignore easily. I even said that it's not guaranteed to be boring as I expect.
2. My point about orphanages is that to live at one you are underage, but clearly they look old. If you mean this group used to live together in an orphanage, then say that. It is confusing how you wrote it. Note from a story purpose there is no reason these people need to know each other. Veronica and the main character could have won tickets and not know these people.
3. I said they are not 3 frame animations, but they look odd because only a few objects move in the animation. In a blowjob, the other persons head moves but that is it. Generally so does the man, even when trying to hold still you sway a little. While the animations are fluid with 15 frames, they look artificial because of how so much is static in the animation. I know animations are hard, and it's ok to keep them this way, but they aren't amazing and I am not going to lie to you to make you feel better.
4. I read everything until Jacob knocks you out. At that point I lost interest in the game. It seems like you are setting up cuck, maybe NTR but either way I don't care. If you are in charge and a subordinate knocks you out, you really need to retaliate. The fact we never got an option to be a leader makes me feel like there is a lack of player agency. So the writing no longer matters because the choices don't feel like they matter. Note I like well written NTR and Cuck but I don't think this was successful.
5. I don't care if there is incest or not. Personally Incest is a gimmick of poor writing, and games that use incest are generally bad. I was just saying, the in game excuse that incest causes birth defects is only partially acurate. It allows harmful resessive traits to becomes dominate, watch a youtube video on it. So yes Incest is bad, but for slightly different reasons. Note with 6 people incest will happen a couple generations down the line... What will the AI do then LOL.
6. I am not saying you have to show animals or insects. I am saying that you don't have complex plant life without other forms of life. I recommend just removing the comments about there not being animal life. Just because there are alien animals or alien insects, doesn't mean you have to show them in game. Adding in a comment about there being no animal life makes the reader go huh that makes no sense.

I like your concept and I think it can work. Saying that, the script needs improvement, the 3rd male needs hair, and you need to give the player choices that feel authentic. Seriously you need to work on the script to make things make sense.

I wish you well on your project.

 

[pmyourladyparts]

Here's my little review of the game so far (0.4). The game seems pretty, okay. Like average overall I guess. I mainly like it cause I'll play anything with the general theme of attaining power. I only played the tyrant/harem route. The porn scenes are all pretty short and somewhat unsatisfying. The animations seem serviceable enough, they just need the writing to support them. The premise and the way characters act are weird.

Like how at the start it seemed like everyone aside from (MC, GF, and Victim) seemed perfectly fine with the black dude's crime of implied almost rape. I didn't really get that scene at all. MC is says punishment is needed, then AI and black dude just go "Well because the asian girl successfully ran away and prevented the rape then no punishment is needed" and everyone is apparently just cool with that lol. I definitely thought that was going to be the set up to quickly give a reason to start ostracizing the black dude on the way to the harem route, but apparently almost rape is no big deal among this group of people.

The bubbling backstory of all the people there having their memories wiped and being sent into space seems...boring and unneeded. It doesn't feel like it really adds to anything at all unless at the end of it something dumb is revealed like "surprise, actually you're all related and it's retroactive incest" lol.

You're girlfriend is a total bitch in a way that doesn't even make sense (in the harem route) lol. She gives you blue balls and then says "You gotta earn it." The fuck does that even mean in the context of the situation they're in lol. It's not like they're working jobs for money and the dude can go out and buy her a nice present or even take her out on a nice date or some shit lol. They're out here on a seemingly barren planet just trying to survive. Like seriously what could she possibly mean by saying "You have to earn it".

Also the number of prompts you get to basically chicken out of the Tyrant/Harem route for your bitch girlfriend really dampers the attempt to create a "tyrant" image of the MC lol. This was particularly bad in the scene where the red head girl tries to enter your room.

Do you want to let her in? Do you let her sit on the bed? Do you take off her panties? Do you give her oral?

It was so silly lol. I feel like you only really need the one choice in that situation and then you can write the scenario more smoothly after a choice since it would be obvious how the player is choosing to portray the MC. Instead even though I was making the decision to be the "tyrant" it felt like my MC was a total wimp the whole time anyway.

Also this is just my preference, but I feel like a much better ending to the red head encounter being interrupted by your girlfriend blue balling you would have been to finish off on the red head. She was clearly in the mood for it. Felt super lame for the MC to automatically go "Buh my bitch girlfriend might come back even though she just left and clearly has no intention of coming back since she left me like this" lol.

The more enjoyable branching path decisions are probably the two that relate to branching from harem to sharing. It was more enjoyable to make the choice to have the MC actively think about and deny sharing the ladies in order to keep on the tyrant path. How could one not enjoy picking a ridiculous option of "The only one who gets to have sex is meeeeeeeeeee" lol.

Also just in general, the AI seemingly acting as the boss, yet the MC is designated as "Captain" is just weird. It's a weird dynamic where it does feel like basically the AI is completely in charge, but it also feels confusing as to why the AI is in charge.

 

[MiZtyl]

1. I'm saying player named characters lead to boring stories. So it is a warning sign of boring generic things to come. Note some people like blank slates, so this is an opinion that you can ignore easily. I even said that it's not guaranteed to be boring as I expect.
2. My point about orphanages is that to live at one you are underage, but clearly they look old. If you mean this group used to live together in an orphanage, then say that. It is confusing how you wrote it. Note from a story purpose there is no reason these people need to know each other. Veronica and the main character could have won tickets and not know these people.
3. I said they are not 3 frame animations, but they look odd because only a few objects move in the animation. In a blowjob, the other persons head moves but that is it. Generally so does the man, even when trying to hold still you sway a little. While the animations are fluid with 15 frames, they look artificial because of how so much is static in the animation. I know animations are hard, and it's ok to keep them this way, but they aren't amazing and I am not going to lie to you to make you feel better.
4. I read everything until Jacob knocks you out. At that point I lost interest in the game. It seems like you are setting up cuck, maybe NTR but either way I don't care. If you are in charge and a subordinate knocks you out, you really need to retaliate. The fact we never got an option to be a leader makes me feel like there is a lack of player agency. So the writing no longer matters because the choices don't feel like they matter. Note I like well written NTR and Cuck but I don't think this was successful.
5. I don't care if there is incest or not. Personally Incest is a gimmick of poor writing, and games that use incest are generally bad. I was just saying, the in game excuse that incest causes birth defects is only partially acurate. It allows harmful resessive traits to becomes dominate, watch a youtube video on it. So yes Incest is bad, but for slightly different reasons. Note with 6 people incest will happen a couple generations down the line... What will the AI do then LOL.
6. I am not saying you have to show animals or insects. I am saying that you don't have complex plant life without other forms of life. I recommend just removing the comments about there not being animal life. Just because there are alien animals or alien insects, doesn't mean you have to show them in game. Adding in a comment about there being no animal life makes the reader go huh that makes no sense.

1. That is your feeling. I won't comment on that because a lot of guys want to name the character.
2. This is the difference between you and my supporters: they're eagerly waiting to know about the truth of the story. Because at the start of the game, it was about an orphanage. But they're smart to understand that it's not simple that way after they see how EJ behaves and they see about those dreams.
3. I develop with the limited funds and time I have.
4. There's no Jacob in the game. And if Justin knocked you up, you walked into the NTR route. And that's your fault that you didn't choose to walk into the Harem route. For more details, you can check the walkthrough.
5. If you don't care about incest, all of your comments about incest are useless.
6. Again, that's the difference between you and my supporters. They understand I can only do it this way with the limited funds and time I have.

Here's my little review of the game so far (0.4). The game seems pretty, okay. Like average overall I guess. I mainly like it cause I'll play anything with the general theme of attaining power. I only played the tyrant/harem route. The porn scenes are all pretty short and somewhat unsatisfying. The animations seem serviceable enough, they just need the writing to support them. The premise and the way characters act are weird.

Like how at the start it seemed like everyone aside from (MC, GF, and Victim) seemed perfectly fine with the black dude's crime of implied almost rape. I didn't really get that scene at all. MC is says punishment is needed, then AI and black dude just go "Well because the asian girl successfully ran away and prevented the rape then no punishment is needed" and everyone is apparently just cool with that lol. I definitely thought that was going to be the set up to quickly give a reason to start ostracizing the black dude on the way to the harem route, but apparently almost rape is no big deal among this group of people.

The bubbling backstory of all the people there having their memories wiped and being sent into space seems...boring and unneeded. It doesn't feel like it really adds to anything at all unless at the end of it something dumb is revealed like "surprise, actually you're all related and it's retroactive incest" lol.

You're girlfriend is a total bitch in a way that doesn't even make sense (in the harem route) lol. She gives you blue balls and then says "You gotta earn it." The fuck does that even mean in the context of the situation they're in lol. It's not like they're working jobs for money and the dude can go out and buy her a nice present or even take her out on a nice date or some shit lol. They're out here on a seemingly barren planet just trying to survive. Like seriously what could she possibly mean by saying "You have to earn it".

Also the number of prompts you get to basically chicken out of the Tyrant/Harem route for your bitch girlfriend really dampers the attempt to create a "tyrant" image of the MC lol. This was particularly bad in the scene where the red head girl tries to enter your room.

Do you want to let her in? Do you let her sit on the bed? Do you take off her panties? Do you give her oral?

It was so silly lol. I feel like you only really need the one choice in that situation and then you can write the scenario more smoothly after a choice since it would be obvious how the player is choosing to portray the MC. Instead even though I was making the decision to be the "tyrant" it felt like my MC was a total wimp the whole time anyway.

Also this is just my preference, but I feel like a much better ending to the red head encounter being interrupted by your girlfriend blue balling you would have been to finish off on the red head. She was clearly in the mood for it. Felt super lame for the MC to automatically go "Buh my bitch girlfriend might come back even though she just left and clearly has no intention of coming back since she left me like this" lol.

The more enjoyable branching path decisions are probably the two that relate to branching from harem to sharing. It was more enjoyable to make the choice to have the MC actively think about and deny sharing the ladies in order to keep on the tyrant path. How could one not enjoy picking a ridiculous option of "The only one who gets to have sex is meeeeeeeeeee" lol.

Also just in general, the AI seemingly acting as the boss, yet the MC is designated as "Captain" is just weird. It's a weird dynamic where it does feel like basically the AI is completely in charge, but it also feels confusing as to why the AI is in charge.

1. There's nothing implication about rape at the start of the game between Justin and Priscilla.
2. The backstory about having their memories wiped is boring and unneeded is your own feeling. That's the difference between you and my supporters. They feel interesting about EJ and the truth before the story started.
3. For the rest of what you wrote, those are your feelings. I won't comment on them.

But after this comment, I won't spend time to answer people who want to change the game into the way they want anymore. What they want is so much different from me and my supporters. And my supporters help me with my funds to continue this game. I have the responsibility to continue to do what they like. I won't change anything that I don't like and my supporters don't like just to satisfy some random guys.

 

[Paapi]

You seem super defensive. If you want me to stop talking to you about your product I will. I am actually trying to help you understand issues I see in the game.

Let me answer your responses.

1. I'm saying player named characters lead to boring stories. So it is a warning sign of boring generic things to come. Note some people like blank slates, so this is an opinion that you can ignore easily. I even said that it's not guaranteed to be boring as I expect.
2. My point about orphanages is that to live at one you are underage, but clearly they look old. If you mean this group used to live together in an orphanage, then say that. It is confusing how you wrote it. Note from a story purpose there is no reason these people need to know each other. Veronica and the main character could have won tickets and not know these people.
3. I said they are not 3 frame animations, but they look odd because only a few objects move in the animation. In a blowjob, the other persons head moves but that is it. Generally so does the man, even when trying to hold still you sway a little. While the animations are fluid with 15 frames, they look artificial because of how so much is static in the animation. I know animations are hard, and it's ok to keep them this way, but they aren't amazing and I am not going to lie to you to make you feel better.
4. I read everything until Jacob knocks you out. At that point I lost interest in the game. It seems like you are setting up cuck, maybe NTR but either way I don't care. If you are in charge and a subordinate knocks you out, you really need to retaliate. The fact we never got an option to be a leader makes me feel like there is a lack of player agency. So the writing no longer matters because the choices don't feel like they matter. Note I like well written NTR and Cuck but I don't think this was successful.
5. I don't care if there is incest or not. Personally Incest is a gimmick of poor writing, and games that use incest are generally bad. I was just saying, the in game excuse that incest causes birth defects is only partially acurate. It allows harmful resessive traits to becomes dominate, watch a youtube video on it. So yes Incest is bad, but for slightly different reasons. Note with 6 people incest will happen a couple generations down the line... What will the AI do then LOL.
6. I am not saying you have to show animals or insects. I am saying that you don't have complex plant life without other forms of life. I recommend just removing the comments about there not being animal life. Just because there are alien animals or alien insects, doesn't mean you have to show them in game. Adding in a comment about there being no animal life makes the reader go huh that makes no sense.

I like your concept and I think it can work. Saying that, the script needs improvement, the 3rd male needs hair, and you need to give the player choices that feel authentic. Seriously you need to work on the script to make things make sense.

I wish you well on your project.

(4). I am one of the ntr haters.
u didn't "train" in gym. Use gym , increase muscle & beat the hell out of justin. Harem route is very entertaining.

Developer. i Agreed with your previous comment.!!

 

[pmyourladyparts]

But after this comment, I won't spend time to answer people who want to change the game into the way they want anymore. What they want is so much different from me and my supporters. And my supporters help me with my funds to continue this game. I have the responsibility to continue to do what they like. I won't change anything that I don't like and my supporters don't like just to satisfy some random guys.

You don't owe me anything lol. Just left a comment to share my thoughts. Keep on doing whatever you like.

 

[MiZtyl]

You don't owe me anything lol. Just left a comment to share my thoughts. Keep on doing whatever you like.

Thank you for your kind reaction.

Oh, by the way, I also want to send a message to XJ347 here: Even if you wanted to give a bad review after I denied your feelings, please remember that there's no Jacob in the game. His name is Justin. Best regards.

 

[Rommel887]

How do you get the scene where Justin and Veronica are bathing together in the Anarchy route? I got the dream about Justin fucking her but not the bathing scene. At the end of episode where you can check each routes scenes, it is after the dream scene, is that correct that it should be after the dream scene?

 

[DarkKaiba666]

I am really enjoying your game and happy that you know how to make good NTR where the MC is very aware of what's going on lol. None of this dumb MC nonsense. You have it really be on the player's perspective and I enjoy being a blank slate to decide for yourself what choices to make. Looking forward to future development man. I'm a fan.

 

[Kjazz]

How to get that scene where veronica is giving blowjob to justin under the influence of that flower in front of mc .....

 

[Kjazz]

You should use the walk-through.

Bro where we get walkthrough as its nt updated since 0.2v here in this site....

 

[MiZtyl]

Bro where we get walkthrough as its nt updated since 0.2v here in this site....

WT 0.3:

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[Kjazz]

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Thnks for replying buddy but i think i should hv to wait for the version 0.4v became free in order to get the walkthrough

 

[dumbass55]

Are there only 3 absolute paths or are there divergence within those paths (like still keeping Veronica to yourself if you go down the democracy route)?

 

[MiZtyl]

Are there only 3 absolute paths or are there divergence within those paths (like still keeping Veronica to yourself if you go down the democracy route)?

There are sub-routes, especially in the democracy route, where you can choose which girl you want to share and which girl you don't want to share. The walk-through can't be too specific so it will only focus to share all the girls in the democracy route.