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V.A. Laurie

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This update was definitely better than the previous one. The dialogue was much better, and now that there is dialogue after the BDSM scene, on another playthrough, the scene didn't bother me as much as it did the first time. In fact, I thought the daughter's dialogue the next day about the date was actually funny. Good job!
Thanks, uncle jay, I knew having a family member here would come in handy! Lol
 
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This update was definitely better than the previous one. The dialogue was much better, and now that there is dialogue after the BDSM scene, on another playthrough, the scene didn't bother me as much as it did the first time. In fact, I thought the daughter's dialogue the next day about the date was actually funny. Good job!
Yeah, I wasn't initially ok with the BDSM scene, and it's greater implications. But the follow up scene did lessen my concern.

I wasn't a great fan of this game up until now, but did keep an eye on it. I really enjoyed this update. I'll be keeping a closer eye on it in the future.
 

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The dev should learn how to write dialogue/thoughts that doesn't make a character seem unlikable.

For instance, if a girl looks at herself in the mirror and thinks "if he doesn't think I'm sexy I may start to question his taste in women", while constantly berating MC for being innocent and childlike, I personally as a player actually hate that girl. She's unlikable as fuck and full of herself. Unless you want the player to dislike the girl, you should write her more innocent herself and more respectful. Also, 99,999% girls don't think "I need to get fucked" and see some random dude for a dicking.

Maybe the game is written for masochists who get turned on by humiliated guys, and girls who are cocky, but it's not for me. Overall it wasn't that bad in the beginning, but the quality of the writing and characters deteriorated.
 

V.A. Laurie

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The dev should learn how to write dialogue/thoughts that doesn't make a character seem unlikable.

For instance, if a girl looks at herself in the mirror and thinks "if he doesn't think I'm sexy I may start to question his taste in women", while constantly berating MC for being innocent and childlike, I personally as a player actually hate that girl. She's unlikable as fuck and full of herself. Unless you want the player to dislike the girl, you should write her more innocent herself and more respectful. Also, 99,999% girls don't think "I need to get fucked" and see some random dude for a dicking.

Maybe the game is written for masochists who get turned on by humiliated guys, and girls who are cocky, but it's not for me. Overall it wasn't that bad in the beginning, but the quality of the writing and characters deteriorated.
Yeah! Fuck this stupid writer! How fucking DARE I!?
 

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I didn't say fuck you at all, it was constructive criticism. As I said though, maybe I'm just not the target audience, which is fine.
 
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I didn't say fuck you at all, it was constructive criticism. As I said though, maybe I'm just not the target audience, which is fine.
i'm just messing around. I see comments all the time on my games and the games of others with issues that people have that just seem more personal taste than criticism, and just wanted to be a dick for a moment. I am sorry you don't enjoy the characters, but I do think that Daughter has been the aggressor and more promiscuous character through the entire game, so everything you've seen of her is in line with that.

If you come on back for more, I hope you enjoy it. If not, I hope maybe in the future one of my games strikes your fancy. :)
 
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Also, 99,999% girls don't think "I need to get fucked" and see some random dude for a dicking.
Please, share more of your insights into what nearly all women think.

As a married bloke who has to cope with his wifes friends when they visit I can tell you you are wrong.

Women think of sex pretty much like a bloke does. Some are just more polite about it.
 

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Please, share more of your insights into what nearly all women think.

As a married bloke who has to cope with his wifes friends when they visit I can tell you you are wrong.

Women think of sex pretty much like a bloke does. Some are just more polite about it.
As much as I admire your impressive credentials when it comes to knowing what women think due to being "a married bloke who has to cope with his wifes friends when they visit", what I said was about what girls do, not what they think about. Besides, you have to realise you're just regurgitating a fashionable trope about women, right?

The girl in the game found some dude that (afaik) had never been mentioned before or since, and fucked him. How? If she hit him up on tinder or something, we would presumably be informed, because we're shown everything else. Same for chatting him up in a club. So, it seems she instead found him on something like an online market (craigslist?). Well, it's not normal behaviour for a teenage girls to buy sex from strange men, no matter what you might overhear from your wife's friends while playing erotic games in the other room.
 

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@Bloo you should really consider putting some kind of warning atleast to prevent people of some of the content in the game, heroines in relationships or ntr tag

how about sluts or whores? including the daughter and just pointing out that ntr is not entirely invalid for this game at all (there is a lot of definitions for ntr and that tag will certainly help people like me that dont like seeing the main heroines getting fucked or in any kind of sexual scene with other dudes) , though i dont see myself debating it since i wont give this game another look nor any games by those that are making this.

If you come on back for more, I hope you enjoy it. If not, I hope maybe in the future one of my games strikes your fancy.
it seems to me as if u like making games where the love interest (main heroines) get banged by others characters... afterall FF have that setting too even if is lesbian it still does count, so good luck with your projects but i think that did it for me .

and yeah no offense intended, call it personal taste
 

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As much as I admire your impressive credentials when it comes to knowing what women think due to being "a married bloke who has to cope with his wifes friends when they visit", what I said was about what girls do, not what they think about. Besides, you have to realise you're just regurgitating a fashionable trope about women, right?

The girl in the game found some dude that (afaik) had never been mentioned before or since, and fucked him. How? If she hit him up on tinder or something, we would presumably be informed, because we're shown everything else. Same for chatting him up in a club. So, it seems she instead found him on something like an online market (craigslist?). Well, it's not normal behaviour for a teenage girls to buy sex from strange men, no matter what you might overhear from your wife's friends while playing erotic games in the other room.
there are a few lines in the previous day of Daughter telling Alice that she found someone online, and there are two conversations about it in the current day's update, but it's never stated if it's Tinder, Craigslist, Back Page or what - just that she is in contact with someone. The "where online" is left up to you to decide.

how about sluts or whores? including the daughter and just pointing out that ntr is not entirely invalid for this game at all (there is a lot of definitions for ntr and that tag will certainly help people like me that dont like seeing the main heroines getting fucked or in any kind of sexual scene with other dudes) , though i dont see myself debating it since i wont give this game another look nor any games by those that are making this.


it seems to me as if u like making games where the love interest (main heroines) get banged by others characters... afterall FF have that setting too even if is lesbian it still does count, so good luck with your projects but i think that did it for me .

and yeah no offense intended, call it personal taste
no offense taken. If you read back the last few pages of comments, a lot of people feel the way you did, but if you've played that update or the new one, as I had said all along, it was something to further the plot. A few people who feel the way you do, after playing the new update, seem to understand (or at the very least dislike less) this now. To each their own, as I always say. Hopefully you give this update a shot. If not, at least give the devs I work with a shot in the future. I'm writing the story, so if that's what you dislike, that isn't on them, it's on me.

Anyway, here's wonderwall.
 
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no issues with the writing or the storyline but.......
if someone creates a headless or paperbag mod for this let me know :D
 

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no offense taken. If you read back the last few pages of comments, a lot of people feel the way you did, but if you've played that update or the new one, as I had said all along, it was something to further the plot. A few people who feel the way you do, after playing the new update, seem to understand (or at the very least dislike less) this now. To each their own, as I always say. Hopefully you give this update a shot. If not, at least give the devs I work with a shot in the future. I'm writing the story, so if that's what you dislike, that isn't on them, it's on me.
let me clarify something since you and some writers , devs think is ok to force us players seeing the love interest or heroines getting banged or in any sexual scenes with other characters is okey in their book, for me is completely wrong and i will tell you why...

for me and i think many others will agree, is the fact that seeing those girls getting it from other dudes is kind of killing any feelings of love or romantic relationship in a way that it loses all the meaning to keep engaged in the story and that particular heroine.

also take into note that the fact that is forced into the player is something that will always make people pissed off.
I am one of those that understand boths sides and thats why i like games where this is always a option, the same can be said about ntr and all that, as long they make it optional is ok, to each their own as you said
 

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let me clarify something since you and some writers , devs think is ok to force us players seeing the love interest or heroines getting banged or in any sexual scenes with other characters is okey in their book, for me is completely wrong and i will tell you why...

for me and i think many others will agree, is the fact that seeing those girls getting it from other dudes is kind of killing any feelings of love or romantic relationship in a way that it loses all the meaning to keep engaged in the story and that particular heroine.

also take into note that the fact that is forced into the player is something that will always make people pissed off.
I am one of those that understand boths sides and thats why i like games where this is always a option, the same can be said about ntr and all that, as long they make it optional is ok, to each their own as you said
Hey I understand loud and clear. I have read quite a number of comments expressing this.

Have you tried the new update?
 

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Hey I understand loud and clear. I have read quite a number of comments expressing this.

Have you tried the new update?
i did, thats why i said that, is not criticism to the game or to you, i dont really get those people being rude to writers and devs, there is always better manners to say what is in your mind and your taste in a game, what i did write was my point of how i see this game and that other game you have writed.

for me seeing the main heroine in any kind of "relationship" kills the flow and is something i find myself not fun to read or play, there are people that like vns and porn games also for theyr story. (even if is the minority lol)
 
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