Just tried this graphic novel today and since the Dev asks for feedback, here is mine
I appreciate the fact it is your fist game and you make it available to everyone here free of charge, that already set me in a good mood towards trying it out
The renders are mostly decent, sometimes a bit grainy though.
The story is unique, also a plus.
The text has very few errors, but is however very long to get through, I get it though.. it's a novel not a "game" per say
However when I reached day 4 and 5 after an hour or so, I must admit to have speed clicked through most of the text.. my brain was getting tired from the reading.
The small changes in facial expressions during dialogue gives it more life
I encountered 2, or was it 3, black images with a red text of picture missing, think someone else mentioned that in another post as well, so just confirming it. It was during the Café thing with the two gym girls, Sarah and her friend.
One huge advice though, when a girl gives a blow job she won't do a good job if the penis foreskin is covering the penis head, that looked really silly.
Also when James stood naked before us for the first time, we saw he had a large dick, shortly after when he got underwear on it showed no penis at all, no bulge or anything, so that must be some magic underwear?
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The whole anticipation I got from seeing him with a large member hanging between his legs, and the woman demanding to be let in.. I expected a bulge she would notice, but that didn't happen.. You really missed out on a great story telling opportunity there
Something like "Oh Gawd he must have a big one.. I shouldn't have these thoughts, but can't keep my eyes of it!".. am sure ya get the picture(s)
Other than that I am looking forward to see what comes next, surely appears interesting just make sure poor James get to get laid soon, blue balls aren't healthy in the long run :closedtongue: