VN Ren'Py Abandoned Old Friends and Public Transport [v0.0025] [Oppai Auteur]

[omynsfw]

Is MC like 5"1 or are all the women like 6"2? at least miranda seem WMBA levels of height

 

[Oppai Auteur]

Is MC like 5"1 or are all the women like 6"2? at least miranda seem WMBA levels of height

A mix of both

 

[zachagersnal]

It is just my humble opinion. However, could you try to reduce the ass of both the mom and daughter? it looks gross the more i look at it.

 

[Oppai Auteur]

It is just my humble opinion. However, could you try to reduce the ass of both the mom and daughter? it looks gross the more i look at it.

Already mentioned in the thread early on, I wont be altering the models at any point, I like how they look now

 

[Oppai Auteur]

Hey guys, looking for some feedback on the current content.

I was in the middle of typing up the script for Day 6 when I realised something. Now that we've hit the point were every release from now will have some form of adult content, I need some opinions on that kind content. 0.0004 had the handjob or blowjob, plus the oral with Katie and a little Sarah masturbation, and I want to know how that stuff looked to you?

Good? Bad? Something in between? Too dark? Bad camera angles? Bad posing?

I know some of you will jump right in with 'Add animations!!' but that just isn't possible with current resources and skill level so I'm just looking for more general feedback on how that stuff looked. By that, I mean things like lighting and camera angles, not feedback like 'add more sex' or such and such, more adult content is coming but I want to make sure its quality content

My render skills are decent now, and the response to the writing and characterisation has been pretty positive, so I want the porn to have the same response.

So lets hear it, how is the current adult content for you so far and what do think could be changed?

 

[Amedore]

Don't add animations. Some good renders for a scene are WAY better than the same two seconds of animation in loop, IMO.

And, again IMO, imagination, variety, and as much fetishes as possible (optional the harder ones) is a good thing in this kind of game. Flee from vanilla situations and scenes. The umpteenth render of a blowjob or a couple (even a lesbian one) having sex seen in an erotic or porn game, even technically well done, doesn't make the difference. Characters that people can bond with, good writing, (both dialogues and description of the scenes - Good Girl Gone Bad is the best example, IMO) and fetishes (as taboo as possible; incest is popular for a reason in this kind of games )makes the difference.

Anyway, this game looks not bad at all right now, and I'm sure will be a great learning tool.

PD. I have seeing the blowjob renders again, and the problem (again, IMO) is the female character wears too much makeup that makes her look a bit like a clown. :closedtongue:

 

[Ignatz]

And now for the dissenting opinion. Heh.

I don't feel a game needs to jam a bunch of fetishes into it in order for it to be compelling. One of the most popular new games out there, Acting Lessons, wows people with great characters, beautiful art and an immersive story. Done well, sexual interactions of less extreme nature can still be as engaging and erotic as a bunch of fetishes implanted to "be different".

As for your scenes, specifically. I do agree with Amedore that Katie is heavily made up. I get that is probably part of her shtick, kinda Goth/rebel/break the mold, but it does sometimes look a bit more like Kabuki makeup rather than a style statement.

Physicality-wise, I think your one-off work has helped you in the posing of the sexual scenes. I don't have any noticeable issues with their eroticism. I'd have to do a more detailed "study" to give artistic feedback, which makes me a little queasy, since it's your vision, not mine.

 

[Amedore]

And now for the dissenting opinion. Heh.

I don't feel a game needs to jam a bunch of fetishes into it in order for it to be compelling. One of the most popular new games out there, Acting Lessons, wows people with great characters, beautiful art and an immersive story. Done well, sexual interactions of less extreme nature can still be as engaging and erotic as a bunch of fetishes implanted to "be different".

I haven't played "Acting Lessons" (the black bold guy with the little mustache in the banner gives me the creeps), but some of the tags are "exhibitionism", "footjob", "cheating", "group sex", "creampie", "MFF"... Those, are fetishes, I think. And, if you look the most popular games of this forum ( DMD, DoD, Summertime Saga, Man of the House, Good Girl Gone Bad...) are about fetishes; especially incest, probably because it's such a big taboo.

Anyway, fetishes alone, just because, I agree doesn't add to a game, and it's not what I´m asking for. I started talking about imagination and variety, and also I have talked about good writing, characters people can bond with... Problem is, the writing must be really exceptional to make erotic the render number one million of a blowjob viewed in a porn game. It's easier if you add some extra kink.

PD. The 3D models of this game are different from most of the games. That helps, for sure, although such exaggerated proportions are not my thing (I prefer realism), at least female characters are not siliconed pornstars and perfect top-models, as most of the games.

 

[Ignatz]

Heh. We're cool. If you're defining fetishes as broadly as cheating and MFF, then, sure, have at 'em!

 

[Mescalino]

I haven't played "Acting Lessons" (the black bold guy with the little mustache in the banner gives me the creeps), but some of the tags are "exhibitionism", "footjob", "cheating", "group sex", "creampie", "MFF"... Those, are fetishes, I think. And, if you look the most popular games of this forum ( DMD, DoD, Summertime Saga, Man of the House, Good Girl Gone Bad...) are about fetishes; especially incest, probably because it's such a big taboo.

Anyway, fetishes alone, just because, I agree doesn't add to a game, and it's not what I´m asking for. I started talking about imagination and variety, and also I have talked about good writing, characters people can bond with... Problem is, the writing must be really exceptional to make erotic the render number one million of a blowjob viewed in a porn game. It's easier if you add some extra kink.

PD. The 3D models of this game are different from most of the games. That helps, for sure, although such exaggerated proportions are not my thing (I prefer realism), at least female characters are not siliconed pornstars and perfect top-models, as most of the games.

I couldn't agree more. Sure its fun to see a game like chubby city but i also think that a lot of these games just blow up the breast size dial for the sake of big boobs. This is a test render of the mother of the main character from the novel i am working on:

She has in my opinion realistic breast who are large but didn't go overboard.

Story and character development are far more important then cramping in as many fetishes as possible and blowing up all the boobs. In fact there are so many incest games out there i abandoned the project i was working on for a new one with no incest and verry little fetishes/taboos. Also the whole patreon debacle didn't help much.

 

[Amedore]

Heh. We're cool. If you're defining fetishes as broadly as cheating and MFF, then, sure, have at 'em!

Of course we are cool, we are just talking. Fetish is something unusual that turn-on some people, and some people don't. Exhibitionism or group sex are fetish, of course. About "Cheating", is an especially controversial fetish. Some people love it, and some other (as myself) doesn't find it erotic at all. I find it more "extreme" as fetish than "watersports" for example.

 

[Oppai Auteur]

Don't add animations. Some good renders for a scene are WAY better than the same two seconds of animation in loop, IMO.

And, again IMO, imagination, variety, and as much fetishes as possible (optional the harder ones) is a good thing in this kind of game. Flee from vanilla situations and scenes. The umpteenth render of a blowjob or a couple (even a lesbian one) having sex seen in an erotic or porn game, even technically well done, doesn't make the difference. Characters that people can bond with, good writing, (both dialogues and description of the scenes - Good Girl Gone Bad is the best example, IMO) and fetishes (as taboo as possible; incest is popular for a reason in this kind of games )makes the difference.

Anyway, this game looks not bad at all right now, and I'm sure will be a great learning tool.

PD. I have seeing the blowjob renders again, and the problem (again, IMO) is the female character wears too much makeup that makes her look a bit like a clown. :closedtongue:

I'm not really looking to jam a tone of fetishes into this game, it doesn't really fit the story I'm putting forward, to use an example, incest. The character has a mom in game who has a model but there wont be any incest because it doesn't fit with the context of the game, if I included it, it would just be for the sake of it. The content would have no heart to it because I wouldn't care about it.

I think more vanilla content can be just as entertaining when presented in the right context

When it comes to Kaite as Ignatz mentioned she is meant to have a punk like look and attitude. I can understand if that's not your thing but that wasn't really the feedback I was asking for. When looking at the blowjob scene I was asking for feedback more on the presentation of it, not Katie's own look, that is more of a personal preference kind of thing

And now for the dissenting opinion. Heh.

I don't feel a game needs to jam a bunch of fetishes into it in order for it to be compelling. One of the most popular new games out there, Acting Lessons, wows people with great characters, beautiful art and an immersive story. Done well, sexual interactions of less extreme nature can still be as engaging and erotic as a bunch of fetishes implanted to "be different".

As for your scenes, specifically. I do agree with Amedore that Katie is heavily made up. I get that is probably part of her shtick, kinda Goth/rebel/break the mold, but it does sometimes look a bit more like Kabuki makeup rather than a style statement.

Physicality-wise, I think your one-off work has helped you in the posing of the sexual scenes. I don't have any noticeable issues with their eroticism. I'd have to do a more detailed "study" to give artistic feedback, which makes me a little queasy, since it's your vision, not mine.

I get not wanting to over analyse someone else's vision, but this game isn't finished so the vision isn't set in stone, we are still on the rough sketch, things can still be harmlessly changed. There is no harm in pointing out something like the scene isn't clear from this camera angle, or you don't have enough renders here so the scene flows awkwardly. That kind of response is fine to me, stuff like redo this entire scene this exact way is taking it to far, but just pointing things out is harmless. I'm not going to destroy my vision just because I got a paragraph of feedback lol

I haven't played "Acting Lessons" (the black bold guy with the little mustache in the banner gives me the creeps), but some of the tags are "exhibitionism", "footjob", "cheating", "group sex", "creampie", "MFF"... Those, are fetishes, I think. And, if you look the most popular games of this forum ( DMD, DoD, Summertime Saga, Man of the House, Good Girl Gone Bad...) are about fetishes; especially incest, probably because it's such a big taboo.

Anyway, fetishes alone, just because, I agree doesn't add to a game, and it's not what I´m asking for. I started talking about imagination and variety, and also I have talked about good writing, characters people can bond with... Problem is, the writing must be really exceptional to make erotic the render number one million of a blowjob viewed in a porn game. It's easier if you add some extra kink.

PD. The 3D models of this game are different from most of the games. That helps, for sure, although such exaggerated proportions are not my thing (I prefer realism), at least female characters are not siliconed pornstars and perfect top-models, as most of the games.

If you want to be that broad in the definition of fetishes I guess me having MILF's and Interracial content is already some form of fetish content, they are the things that get the most responses on here. I get being more vanilla adds the extra challenge but I want to do what I think is best for the story, even if that means making things harder for myself

The idea of the models being different from most games is something I worked pretty hard on, so its nice to have that acknowledged, well except for the MC, but who gives a fuck about the men anyway lol I get the exaggerated breasts and asses thing is not for everyone, in some cases its over done, but I think I've done enough to were people recognise them as mine, as opposed to seeing the same female model for 20th time

 

[Oppai Auteur]

I couldn't agree more. Sure its fun to see a game like chubby city but i also think that a lot of these games just blow up the breast size dial for the sake of big boobs. This is a test render of the mother of the main character from the novel i am working on:
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She has in my opinion realistic breast who are large but didn't go overboard.

Story and character development are far more important then cramping in as many fetishes as possible and blowing up all the boobs. In fact there are so many incest games out there i abandoned the project i was working on for a new one with no incest and verry little fetishes/taboos. Also the whole patreon debacle didn't help much.

Each game is its own case I suppose, the reason for the breasts and asses in this game is because I like it, not for mass appeal. It is also the reason I have a toned character like Sarah, or a shorter one like Katie, things I also like. The girl you posted is nice to.

Its best to just to concentrate on your own project rather than others, so what if tones of people are doing that fetish or body type, if its what you really want in your vision of the project, go for it, who cares if its over done? Something well executed with real effort should not be excluded or abandoned just because so many others have done a poor job if it

 

[Mescalino]

Each game is its own case I suppose, the reason for the breasts and asses in this game is because I like it, not for mass appeal. It is also the reason I have a toned character like Sarah, or a shorter one like Katie, things I also like. The girl you posted is nice to.

Its best to just to concentrate on your own project rather than others, so what if tones of people are doing that fetish or body type, if its what you really want in your vision of the project, go for it, who cares if its over done? Something well executed with real effort should not be excluded or abandoned just because so many others have done a poor job if it

Just to clarify it was not meant as an "attack" to your game. I actualy enjoyed it.

True, but i abandoned it for more reasons then just the over done one. I still have that sroy script and stuff so maybe at some point i will. But given my current situation i am unsure if i can really push myself into a full out story over 15-20 chapters. Also Patreon isn't helping much. So i decided to shelf it for now and focus on a smaller project. I think it will be around 5 to 6 chapters. The downside is that i have to speed up certain situation for the sake of the story but given they are not major taboos like incest i can get away with it. There are way to many incomplete abandoned projects so i thought if i do something small i can finish it. If people really like it it will not be impossible to add a new chapter of 5 to 6 episodes. I have a 40 hour job and a social life so its going to be hard to do a monthly update but keeping it the story small i think it will be ok.

 

[Oppai Auteur]

Just to clarify it was not meant as an "attack" to your game. I actualy enjoyed it.

True, but i abandoned it for more reasons then just the over done one. I still have that sroy script and stuff so maybe at some point i will. But given my current situation i am unsure if i can really push myself into a full out story over 15-20 chapters. Also Patreon isn't helping much. So i decided to shelf it for now and focus on a smaller project. I think it will be around 5 to 6 chapters. The downside is that i have to speed up certain situation for the sake of the story but given they are not major taboos like incest i can get away with it. There are way to many incomplete abandoned projects so i thought if i do something small i can finish it. If people really like it it will not be impossible to add a new chapter of 5 to 6 episodes. I have a 40 hour job and a social life so its going to be hard to do a monthly update but keeping it the story small i think it will be ok.

I didn't consider it an attack in anyway, sorry if I came off like that, it was just a general comment on the situation as a whole. Happy to here you like the game

Maybe in your own situation it would be best to remove Patreon from the equation altogether? I know we are clearly in different situations but I'd just like to put forward by own perspective and situation. Like yourself I work, only 20 hours so not as much as you, but it eats into my time, this is also my first project, so right from the start I made the decision to not have a Patreon, due to me being unproven dev. Not having the Patreon removed the need to satisfy paying supporters and meet a set release date, so that's a lot of stress taken off. Doing it this way means I can build an audience who know full well how my work comes across,the quality of it and my work rate, it also mean I myself can test my own limits without harsh blowback over money. Can I meet a monthly deadline? Or do I need more time for each release? It also means I'm less limited creatively. I know if you go to Patreon you have rules, but by that time I feel I would have a better understanding of what would work for me personally, some stuff is banned but by the time I consider Patreon i might have learned what is banned isnt my thing to begin with, it gives a clearer understanding rather than worrying about Patreon itself

 

[Amedore]

I think more vanilla content can be just as entertaining when presented in the right context

The game has lost a good amount of interest for me, I´m afraid.

About the feedback of the blowjob scene... well, is a blowjob scene. I confess I skipped it fast in the game and only catched my attention for a moment because of the cyanotic lips of the girl and the Cleopatra-racoon eyes :closedeyesmile::closedeyesmile::closedeyesmile:, but since the images can be seen in the "images" folder, I have seen it again in order of giving the feedback you ask.

Technically, as a 3D render, if that's what you are asking about, is OK. You can see clearly that it is a blowjob. Not too dark or weird camera positions or poses. As good as 90% of any other blowjob scene in any other porn game.

Anyway, some of the characters I have seen in the other tread look great, faces over all. That really aroused my interest. I'm a sucker for good and realistic mature women in games If only the bodies were a bit more realistic in its proportions, and varied...

 

[Mescalino]

I didn't consider it an attack in anyway, sorry if I came off like that, it was just a general comment on the situation as a whole. Happy to here you like the game

Maybe in your own situation it would be best to remove Patreon from the equation altogether? I know we are clearly in different situations but I'd just like to put forward by own perspective and situation. Like yourself I work, only 20 hours so not as much as you, but it eats into my time, this is also my first project, so right from the start I made the decision to not have a Patreon, due to me being unproven dev. Not having the Patreon removed the need to satisfy paying supporters and meet a set release date, so that's a lot of stress taken off. Doing it this way means I can build an audience who know full well how my work comes across,the quality of it and my work rate, it also mean I myself can test my own limits without harsh blowback over money. Can I meet a monthly deadline? Or do I need more time for each release? It also means I'm less limited creatively. I know if you go to Patreon you have rules, but by that time I feel I would have a better understanding of what would work for me personally, some stuff is banned but by the time I consider Patreon i might have learned what is banned isnt my thing to begin with, it gives a clearer understanding rather than worrying about Patreon itself

For this exact reason i will not be using patreon either, i just dont wan't to deal with that crap.. I don't want to have to rush things for teh sake of a deadline. It simply takes as long as it takes. That being said i try to update as much/quickly as possible but i dont want deadlines. Example, next weekend teh youngest son of my girlfriend is comming here for a sleep over so that will be a huge chunk of time i cant spend on this project. This alone will make a monthly update next to impossible.

Anyway, some of the characters I have seen in the other tread look great, faces over all. That really aroused my interest. I'm a sucker for good and realistic mature women in games If only the bodies were a bit more realistic in its proportions, and varied...

Hope you meant the character i posted

 

[Oppai Auteur]

The game has lost a good amount of interest for me, I´m afraid.

About the feedback of the blowjob scene... well, is a blowjob scene. I confess I skipped it fast in the game and only catched my attention for a moment because of the cyanotic lips of the girl and the Cleopatra-racoon eyes :closedeyesmile::closedeyesmile::closedeyesmile:, but since the images can be seen in the "images" folder, I have seen it again in order of giving the feedback you ask.

Technically, as a 3D render, if that's what you are asking about, is OK. You can see clearly that it is a blowjob. Not too dark or weird camera positions or poses. As good as 90% of any other blowjob scene in any other porn game.

Anyway, some of the characters I have seen in the other tread look great, faces over all. That really aroused my interest. I'm a sucker for good and realistic mature women in games If only the bodies were a bit more realistic in its proportions, and varied...

Sorry to hear the game doesn't really appeal to you

As long as it looks like a decent blowjob that's a good start, my skills will improve with time as long as I've got the basics down

I am rather proud of the other girls on the art thread, mature seems to be my strong suit lol There might be more variety in the future, but I just cant deny my preference for the bigger assets

 

[Amedore]

Hope you meant the character i posted

Yeah, your character is pretty hot too.

IMO, small imperfections is what makes really hot a character, and adds personality. The face is great. Pretty but not the classic doll, and the body... great too. But maybe she's too perfect for a woman that it's suppose has given birth... Maybe a bit (just a bit) more belly, waist and hips, as a real mom in his late 20's or early 30's would have... If it's suppose she's kind of a "MILF-next-door" character, of course.

But, actually, I don't know nothing about DAZ3D, Poser, 3D models, etc. Maybe the original models have that kind of perfect bodies and can't be modified the way I say.

 

[blacksage]

Just recently found the game and is really good lo.ol