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Fair enough, static images are better than shitty 1-second loops.
I could totally get behind that idea lol!I know I said it before but Miracle has such a perfect face for a vampire character. Everytime she open her mouth right you can see her fangs!
Make her eye colors something more vibrant and strong and only thing she would be missing would be the right clothes. Also, her sweet looks would be an amazing contrast to the idea she is a twelve hundred years old blood sucking monster.
Any plans on doing something supernatural like that? I know the superhero game is coming, but I doubt vampire Miracle would appear there.
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I think if you actually read what SW said, you have your answer. Just because it seems fast, you are missing that she (Paris) has had these feelings for 10 years. Miracle is just flat out in love with dad and Sabrina, and Sasha is completely and totally a bad ass, but deep down is a daddy's girl.Of course. As I mentioned this was pure out of good will. I even understand that it may not be a fair critique, as I see this is supposed to be light reading.
Given your comments, I understand your claim about the characters and it was how I was analyzing them. I am just trying to explain why I felt a drop in the novel. I did not make the comment the first time as I did not understand what was going on. But after feeling the same way the second time and specially with the comparison with Sasha, I think I did.
It may be that I am too strong a supporter for slow burn for pure love stories as this one. You know, in pure love stories, once you get the girl there is not much to tell.
Up to the "Paris lets fuck" scene, I have no complains. But the relationship with her I felt went too fast.
The one with Miracle is a way smaller complain, more like given her innocence and curiosity I felt much more teasing could have been made, specially by playing the whole writing deal with her and Sabrina.
Sasha, on the other hand, is absolutely perfect. That is really a super natural transition from daughter to daddy's girl.
Again, don't even take my comments for this story. More like general things to see for when you move on. Specially if you decide to write a story with a more serious mindset that a light, family story.
On the topic of renders. Loved all of them that I have seen so far, except one from Miracle.
Her expression here felt really off
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I'll give more feedback later when I have time to finish reading. Again, all pure good will.
No no, I understand all that. But you missed MY point. My point wasn't whether this is or not the way. I explicitly said that I understood this is a light novel that goes as far as breaking the 4th wall. That does not invalidate what I said.I think if you actually read what SW said, you have your answer. Just because it seems fast, you are missing that she (Paris) has had these feelings for 10 years. Miracle is just flat out in love with dad and Sabrina, and Sasha is completely and totally a bad ass, but deep down is a daddy's girl.
The MC is surrounded by so many female hormones and Sabrina has had a crush, but is not as deeply invested as the girls that he raised, yet.,. Which is why she is the only one without full sex at the moment. She will and I am sure it will be great.
The other thing is that the sheer effort for a solo writer to produce this is HUGE. Having wasted chapters providing unnecessary clutter so you can pace it how you want is not a luxury that most hardware and human willpower can accommodate.
Your comments are strangely familiar like a guy on steam trying to dictate to SW how to write HIS story. I am not attacking you. Just noting you are on a path that will lead to a lot of hostility from SW fans. Fair Warning
Fair enough.No no, I understand all that. But you missed MY point. My point wasn't whether this is or not the way. I explicitly said that I understood this is a light novel that goes as far as breaking the 4th wall. That does not invalidate what I said.
For something to be taboo, it has to feel taboo to the characters. That is the selling point of incest stories. The forbidden fruit. But for something to be forbidden, eating must be wrong. It must feel wrong. The minute all is good, there is no forbidden fruit.
That was the point essentially.
And I would never say "change it cause I don't like it". I said several times it was simply constructive criticism. I even said that not to think about it too much for this novel, but more in general.
If I take the time to comment on something is because I care and wish the best to the developer. Otherwise, why waste time?Fair enough.
SW has gotten some unfair shit slung his way, and I feel kind of protective of him and his work. In the CONTEXT of what he is writing, there is lots wrong. Only Paris is totally balls deep at the moment, and that is only if you do something that ensures a certain outcome.
The rest are pushing boundaries. Sasha is going to work for a big time writer who is in a long term incestuous relationship with her father. That is definitely pushing boundaries. The play will probably figure heavily in this as well. Sit back and enjoy the ride. Over analyzing it will make you crazy. SS his other work is very deeply incest related as well. And I love those characters, but frankly I am less inclined to love MC that are 18-20 years old and like the 40 year old dad one, though I do love the milfy mom and step mom
I won't do anything supernatural within the story, but maybe I should do a Halloween themed wallpaper?I know I said it before but Miracle has such a perfect face for a vampire character. Everytime she open her mouth right you can see her fangs!
Make her eye colors something more vibrant and strong and only thing she would be missing would be the right clothes. Also, her sweet looks would be an amazing contrast to the idea she is a twelve hundred years old blood sucking monster.
Any plans on doing something supernatural like that? I know the superhero game is coming, but I doubt vampire Miracle would appear there.
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Haha, I feel really protected having you around, man. I really appreciate it, though Ayhsel has been totally fair in his criticism and not just attacking me or complaining. So I appreciate him and he actually does like the game, so it's totally fine.Fair enough.
SW has gotten some unfair shit slung his way, and I feel kind of protective of him and his work. In the CONTEXT of what he is writing, there is lots wrong. Only Paris is totally balls deep at the moment, and that is only if you do something that ensures a certain outcome.
The rest are pushing boundaries. Sasha is going to work for a big time writer who is in a long term incestuous relationship with her father. That is definitely pushing boundaries. The play will probably figure heavily in this as well. Sit back and enjoy the ride. Over analyzing it will make you crazy. SS his other work is very deeply incest related as well. And I love those characters, but frankly I am less inclined to love MC that are 18-20 years old and like the 40 year old dad one, though I do love the milfy mom and step mom
It's a father and his 3 daughters? simple reallyHow is this inc though?
I totally understand. Having characters switch up on you a year into a story can be jarring, but I really do think people will fall in love with the new models just like they did with the originals as I continue the story, and have a lot of good stuff coming, and very soon.Based on the screenshots alone, I do think that the revamp isnt a good thing. Paris looks better, Sasha looks worse, Sabrina looks worse and Miracle is 50/50 in my eyes. Of course I will still be playing this game, I do play it for the story after all.
I get why the dev wanted the game to look more like him, and I cannot blame him for it. Im just hoping that the game actually will reach its end, and we will infact see everything the dev has planned for us.
I know critique might be overwhelming for some devs, but SuperWriter let me assure you. The story still holds its own, and all of us are pleased to see it continue, even if some people have lashed out with the models being redone.
It is more of a potato potato thing, which people will get used to eventually. The story is what captured us, and we all would love to see it continue as soon as possible.
I do think so. Also, I would support you on Patreon if your Patreon wouldnt be so ass. 5 Euros a month for only SS, PP or your new game instead of them all.I totally understand. Having characters switch up on you a year into a story can be jarring, but I really do think people will fall in love with the new models just like they did with the originals as I continue the story, and have a lot of good stuff coming, and very soon.
Thanks for the support!
Lol I don't think my patreon is 'ass.' I offer you 3 games for $10 or let you choose the one you want for $5. And I update a game every 2 weeks instead of taking two or three or four months like a lot of developers.I do think so. Also, I would support you on Patreon if your Patreon wouldnt be so ass. 5 Euros a month for only SS, PP or your new game instead of them all.
While it is somewhat admiring that you are working on three projects at the same time, you are also working on three projects at the same time, and If I pledge to PP or SS, which both are really good, Im missing out on something.
Id rather have the basic 1/2/5/10 etc euro pledges for ALL the games, instead of having to choose.
Lol I don't think my patreon is 'ass.' I offer you 3 games for $10 or let you choose the one you want for $5. And I update a game every 2 weeks instead of taking two or three or four months like a lot of developers.
No support = no games. I work EVERY DAY.
you work hard for your money and I certainly work hard for mine =]
I would suggest you speak for yourself only...regarding what is and isn't on the line..and what is and isn't an acceptable time-frame to wait for an update.Im aware you work hard for it, Im not questioning it. The problem I have is the update cycle, having to wait 6 weeks for PP or SS, since both you and I are very aware that you could do it sooner. I would love if you would focus on a game first, lets say PP. After PP is done, you would move onto SS etc.
As you are aware, an hour every six weeks for one game is somewhat on the line. I am passionate about your games, I really am. I dont want to offend you, Im not attacking you personally. I just hate this model of several games running at the same time, having to wait that one update I really want.
Like you said, you do have 10bucks a month for all three games, but to be honest. I would love for PP to be finished, then SS continuing the work and then the next game leading on from there.