VN Ren'Py Abandoned Project SAGE [Act 1 v0.19d] [Paperwork]

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Overview:
The story is about an independent young girl who decides to move to another country to start a new life after losing her family. Slowly, she discovers herself, her heritage and her destiny.​

Thread Updated: 2020-02-16
Release Date: 2020-02-15
Developer: Paperwork -

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Version: v0.19d
OS: Win, Mac, Linux
Language: English
Original Game: Here
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Others: COMPRESSED* - ANDROID*

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PhotoShoot Pt 3(Side Story Game)
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- Gallery Mod - Cheat Mod - Developer's Guide - Dev Commissioned Games - CG-Rip
*This port/version was not released by the developer. Download at your own risk!

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[ponyguy]

Careful how you touch that girl. You might break her bones. XD

 

[paperwork]

I wanted the girl to be lean, Ponyguy. This is my first game but I've been lurking these forums for some time. Girls in games here are usually a bit "thick" for my taste. However, the game is for you. So if it is the general opinion about the girl, I may change the proportions in the future although I'm not willing to do it drastically

Since this is a "0.1", I'm open to all kinds of criticism. Please let me know what you think of it.

 

[BeWilder]

Loving the beach bullies' postures in screenshot one... so few assholes choreography their antagonism these days. Alas, how times change...

On the upside, that tight open shirt in screenshot three is pretty sweet. That, I seriously do like.

 

[paperwork]

You are right That was the second scene I did, it was more about moving the story then. I've been better at posing at the later scenes.
Now that you pointed it out, I should fix it.

 

[BitterFrost]

A girl that skinny would only have tits that size if they were plastic bolt-ons. Oh well, definitely not for me, I like more normal women, this one is basically anorexia level.

 

[One-Watermelon]

I`m careful with versions 0.1 but this looks promising. There is quite a bit of content in it compared to other 0.1 version out there

Still I`m also not 100% sold on the protagonist. Either she is to skinny or her boobs are to big

 

[macadam]

no offense.. but..

fucking what ? is that patreon pledge reward !

1 buck patrons get game version ... 1 MONTH .. before public !!!

watdahell dude ! lol

 

[lordukk]

@paperwork I like the genre and the idea of your game, but as others said your models need some work.

while like you, I'm not a fan of super curvy with massive boobs that's typical in renpy games nowadays; I still think that your models are a bit too far off on the opposite side of the scale. I believe its the joints that are giving the character a "barbie and ken doll" kinda feel.

I like the petite feel of the girl (if that's what you're going for) but they look kinda unnatural and unrealistic.

I'm no expert though, and i'm just stating my feedback, you should probably ask other developers here on how to improve them.

Good luck in your development, im looking forward to this one

 

[ponyguy]

I wanted the girl to be lean, Ponyguy. This is my first game but I've been lurking these forums for some time. Girls in games here are usually a bit "thick" for my taste. However, the game is for you. So if it is the general opinion about the girl, I may change the proportions in the future although I'm not willing to do it drastically

Since this is a "0.1", I'm open to all kinds of criticism. Please let me know what you think of it.

I'm just joking around. She looks very fragile though. Especially around the ankles. But weird body proportions are something I'm used to in my porn.

 

[Ibrawar]

A lot of the times when you refuse something the aftermath of those scenes will still play out like stripped clothing. Also the world is ridiculous and sounds like some horny teenager wrote it.

 

[paperwork]

This forum is great, thank you for quick responses. I'm pretty new to this so I need opinions.
Patreon is not my priority now, setting the game straight is. So I'll change the rewards.
And the girls body.....I've done maybe 20-30 scenes that are waiting to be written.

 

[paperwork]

Life of adults is boring Ibrawar I'm an adult and doing this to feel like a teenager

 

[macadam]

i see Lisa hamilton ( good point for me ^^ )
i hope that wouldnt be a trouble with roy or tecmo/tn ( i dont think it should ) , but just say.

still like the idea of an girl "petite" and not volumptous ( or whateverr they say in english XD )

 

[Deleted member 293825]

Looks promising. Added to my collection

 

[voyeurkind]

I'll give it a shot.

 

[drowsy]

Never mind the skinny-haters in this thread, follow your creative vision and let twigs-with-boobs be twigs-with-boobs.

 

[Sera Zios]

I understand some of the criticism. Boobs are great, no question, but they should fit the rest of the body. Sadly, there is rarely a developer who is bold enough to have petite girls with petite breasts like they would have in real life. Maybe some tweaking at last? You don't have to give her bee stings but does she really need DDs?

 

[Eye-switcher]

Looks really tempting, im going in

 

[goatwhisperer3]

That doesnt look like "try to implement what is missing in similar games." at all but more like "more of the same".
feel free to proof me wrong.
absolutely not hyped yet ( ' - ')