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At least he didnt eat themThat’s true, but in both those stories or at least the ones I’ve read. The Gods/a God made them go mad, the MC didn’t go mad and kill his own GF and child….maybe the Father went mad instead…?
At least he didnt eat themThat’s true, but in both those stories or at least the ones I’ve read. The Gods/a God made them go mad, the MC didn’t go mad and kill his own GF and child….maybe the Father went mad instead…?
MC doing it
no, thank youpeople growing wings
werewolves
vampires(turning people into vampires)
myths wearing disguise and turning into human and original form.
need i go on?
Back in Ch 3. I was going to have the MC send Alvara away, but my girlfriend enjoys her original plot and made me keep her on(A few people here took her side as well. ) So I am going with the original plot, and in the original plot, she loves the MC, and the MC cares for her since she has been closer to him than his family.
I have to ask, why do you like her so much? I really am curious.When it comes to Alvara, maybe more than a "few" people here took your girlfriends side. I would have been so disappointed if you had chosen to send her away because she is my absolute favorite.
I absolutely love this sexy amazonian goddess. No question, she would be my high priestess. Hopefully, you'll give her more prominence within the story. If not, your girlfriend needs to get to work knocking some sense into you again.
The way my VN is set up as a hidden world, it could exist in almost any everyday-VN on this site, I think. Personally, I don’t mind it, but I don’t know if Braindrop wants to go that far. The reason I mentioned him and his game in my Christmas? Short-Story was because I, him and several other Devs are in Rob’s Discord.Does WVM and Reluctant Archon exist in the same universe? Are we gonna see a collaboration or something?
She will have more prominence as we approach her sub-plot, so I should be spared my girlfriend’s wrath. .I absolutely love this sexy amazonian goddess. No question, she would be my high priestess. Hopefully, you'll give her more prominence within the story. If not, your girlfriend needs to get to work knocking some sense into you again
Why is the secret world secret? If Gods get their power for their followings as it was established in the last chapter, wouldn't they want mortals to know they exist? Clearly others supernatural creatures are also not afraid of humans, so why do the hide?The way my VN is set up as a hidden world, it could exist in almost any everyday-VN on this site, I think.
I probably won’t be including Dwarves as I have another story on my mind, set in a fantasy realm that will have dwarves, some dragon race, and maybe, undead…Will there be other races of fantasy setting such as dwarves or pixies or pixies? This kinda reminds me of an Italian horror comic, Dylan Dog; a paranormal detective that sets in a current era that filled with fantasy creatures.
Sure, I’ll explain it. However, there will be spoilers, so read at your own risk.I have already written that I love this game so much but just in case: Zivairs fantastic work! Love it so much!!!
I have a question that you may not want to answer but I still would like to ask it. It is not trying to be annoying, it is more about how to solve for a potential problem from a literary point of view.
Maybe it is just my understanding, but MC seems too powerful. Not only he can kill gods, he can even revive the dead. The problem I see by making him this powerful is that at some point all problems could be solved by sheer force. "You threaten me or the ones I love? I kill you. You kill my lover? I bring her back from the dead. I don't like you, I bind you to my bidding."
I am not saying it is in MC character to do so, but he has already done some of those stuff.
It is clear what I am trying to ask? Like I said, it may be completely irrelevant, but it is something that I keep coming back when I read this novel.
On another question:
Why is the secret world secret? If Gods get their power for their followings as it was established in the last chapter, wouldn't they want mortals to know they exist? Clearly others supernatural creatures are also not afraid of humans, so why do the hide?
In other secret world setting World of Darkness vampire the masquerade, the argument is kind of like "we are week under the sun, so if humanity knows of our existence we are screwed". But it is not clear to me why everything is your setting is hidden.
Sorry for the annoying questions
MC seems too powerful
Oh, Draconian. Nice. Hopefully you'll feature Oberon and Titania for the fairies. And I love the Orc is your friend trope. Orcs are usually misunderstood, that's why I love having an Orc companion in Skyrim.I probably won’t be including Dwarves as I have another story on my mind, set in a fantasy realm that will have dwarves, some dragon race, and maybe, undead…
Fairies are in the VN, I only mentioned them and have not show them yet.
I've always had a thing for these sexy female warrior-types that kick ass, but is still feminine. Alvara follows this archetype, she's able to beat the crap out of everybody else, yet is very feminine when around the mc.I have to ask, why do you like her so much? I really am curious.
i have to thank the gods for your GF putting some reason into your head and convincing you to let Alvara stay, if you had sent her away most of us would have a reaction similar to this...Back in Ch 3. I was going to have the MC send Alvara away, but my girlfriend enjoys her original plot and made me keep her on(A few people here took her side as well. ) So I am going with the original plot, and in the original plot, she loves the MC, and the MC cares for her since she has been closer to him than his family.
Zivairs
I've been wondering, some of the transitional scenes seem to go by really fast, and automatically without having to click the mouse button to move on to the next scene. Is this design by choice?
I find it a bit difficult to take in, and appreciate some of the scenes because it goes by so quickly. Have you considered slowing down the transition a bit, or perhaps just using the mouse to click on to the next scene?
I have provided 5 examples in the link below. Scenes 1 to 4 has these quick transitions that I mentioned. In contrast, I think that scene 5 is good, it's not too fast, and it looks like an animated action sequence.
I would put the files directly here, but apparently it's too big for this site. You'll have to download it from zippyshare, it's only 22.09 MB. I promise there's no virus, just video clips.
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