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I'm really happy with the intro to this game, can't wait to dive right in!
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Ok, you wanted fair criticism.
I have started playing an i am hating the game because of the awfull robe man narrative of events that intends to be funny but isnt at all with the girls interrupting from behind that only makes it worse.
Seriously, its not funny, breaks immersion and its giving me a lot of urges to just close the game. I will try to keep giving the game a chance but i dont know how much i can put up with this
I suggest you get rid of the black robe man and just let the game play out, it would be a much better game
I have started playing an i am hating the game because of the awfull robe man narrative of events that intends to be funny but isnt at all with the girls interrupting from behind that only makes it worse.
Seriously, its not funny, breaks immersion and its giving me a lot of urges to just close the game. I will try to keep giving the game a chance but i dont know how much i can put up with this
I suggest you get rid of the black robe man and just let the game play out, it would be a much better game
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Not unless is avoidable and HEAVILY telegraphed on how to avoid itwould love NTR or sharing in this game
Its too much of a put off for to many peple to be unavoidable
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two thing one i got close to forgetting this game and i fucking love the story what the fuck takes so long if it was the art i understand but dude or lady please comment someting why it taking so long or a update of there a bug you working on fixing or you need help with the art or even beta tester i love the story and if i dont remember how good it was so far i can forget porn game
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It's the very first female model I ever purchased, because Redhead.
Of course she works just as well as a Blonde. 
Just discovered this game today and overall I'm enjoying it. Renders are good, writing is decent, and I like the the main storyline. A couple of criticisms however:
First, I have to agree with the opinion that the black robed dude+peanut gallery is annoying AF and wastes time that could be better spent on the main story. As does the detective watching the fake GoT show. Neither of those were funny.
Second, I hope that MC and Sarah get to actually do something (besides each other) soon because the story at this point has been MC gets hit and sits in a house surrounded by mildly attractive criminals. As I don't put my dick in crazy (and criminals qualify as crazy) my MC hasn't gotten his dick wet this entire game. Which is fine, my choice and all, but I would like to see the MC taking a more active role.
Otherwise I hope nothing happens to Sarah, though I have a feeling something will, and it seems fairly obvious that the Blackwood Bitch = Lilith OR is her sister. But maybe that's a misdirect and actually the maid is the mastermind.
Anyway, looking forward to seeing where you take us next. If you add avoidable NTR I am good with it and will be here to the end.
First, I have to agree with the opinion that the black robed dude+peanut gallery is annoying AF and wastes time that could be better spent on the main story. As does the detective watching the fake GoT show. Neither of those were funny.
Second, I hope that MC and Sarah get to actually do something (besides each other) soon because the story at this point has been MC gets hit and sits in a house surrounded by mildly attractive criminals. As I don't put my dick in crazy (and criminals qualify as crazy) my MC hasn't gotten his dick wet this entire game. Which is fine, my choice and all, but I would like to see the MC taking a more active role.
Otherwise I hope nothing happens to Sarah, though I have a feeling something will, and it seems fairly obvious that the Blackwood Bitch = Lilith OR is her sister. But maybe that's a misdirect and actually the maid is the mastermind.
Anyway, looking forward to seeing where you take us next. If you add avoidable NTR I am good with it and will be here to the end.
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I'm sorry that i have to make more criticism.
I love the art, i love the general story, but the writing is... not good.
Aside from the already mentioned black robe situation, which needs to be deleted ASAP. we have the next situation.
Your sister (which two people already told you how caring you are from her, for very little things, like buying candy for her) doesnt know where you are for 24 hours, you cant contact her, you know she will be extremely worried about you... and you do nothing except sit in a couch, casually dinner, and then go to sleep peacefully or fuck an unknown female and then going to sleep peacefully?
The MC isnt a caring brother, is a fucking asshole.... He shows no real worry about his sister, a real caring brother wouldnt be able to have an erection or sleep peacefully in this situation, it would break the door and ran to try to find her sister as soon as the two women start sleeping. A brother that doesnt even know his sister phone number.....
In the context of this story, to have such an asshole as the MC and even people telling him how caring he is for her sister for very stupid things its a huge turnoff.
Its a pity because i really like the game outside of this very bad story writing situations.
Sarah is the only one that is behaving in a reasonable and believable way
I love the art, i love the general story, but the writing is... not good.
Aside from the already mentioned black robe situation, which needs to be deleted ASAP. we have the next situation.
Your sister (which two people already told you how caring you are from her, for very little things, like buying candy for her) doesnt know where you are for 24 hours, you cant contact her, you know she will be extremely worried about you... and you do nothing except sit in a couch, casually dinner, and then go to sleep peacefully or fuck an unknown female and then going to sleep peacefully?
The MC isnt a caring brother, is a fucking asshole.... He shows no real worry about his sister, a real caring brother wouldnt be able to have an erection or sleep peacefully in this situation, it would break the door and ran to try to find her sister as soon as the two women start sleeping. A brother that doesnt even know his sister phone number.....
In the context of this story, to have such an asshole as the MC and even people telling him how caring he is for her sister for very stupid things its a huge turnoff.
Its a pity because i really like the game outside of this very bad story writing situations.
Sarah is the only one that is behaving in a reasonable and believable way
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agreed. the entire time ive been playing im here like does this dude give a shit about his sister? casually hanging out with two chicks because they gave him some bs and he automatically believes them.
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deviants strike yet again. its not enough that every game of late is ruined by it? i see the tag i dont even enter and no supporting eitherwould love NTR or sharing in this game
Did u bother looking at game tags and future game tags? No? i didn't think so. Just trying to force your deviant way in?
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I wouldn't like to see any NTR either. What I would like to see is a pause or message that says that is the end of this update, instead of crash ending the game before I can save.
Edit - BTW, I like the story.
Edit - BTW, I like the story.
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What you said reminded me what some people say about good and bad movies. In the good movies (books, comic, etc) the MC is active and doing something for the plot. In the bad movies, the plot drags the MC; so the MC is passive.
This VN is in the prologue it seems. Where is the call to the MC? He is stil siting in his but. xP
(sorry for the engrish)
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The comedy attempts are just awfull.
The black robe guys needs to be shot in the head, now, and the worse is that he keeps appearing. The joke attempt with the TV series that Diana tried to watch was just as bad as the black robe ones. Comedy is clearly not the developer strength.
MC is written so poorly that i am feeling sorry, he is an asshole that doesnt care about his sister at all and is just sitting doing nothing without worries, except flirting with the girls that are keeping him from finding his sister.
Sarah and Diana are the only characters in this game that are decently written. I honoestly cant understand how those two characters are decently written while everyone else in the game just does stupid shit.
Anyway, in summary, black robe scenes need to be deletgged, all of them, none can be salvaged.
MC story direction need to change ASAP and he needs to start participating in the story instead of just being there to the sex scenes
Anna and Malady need to do something too, they literally did nothing since the first scenes in the game.
I wish i could like this game, because its the game style i love and the renders are good, but i just couldnt enjoy it with all that stuff.
The black robe guys needs to be shot in the head, now, and the worse is that he keeps appearing. The joke attempt with the TV series that Diana tried to watch was just as bad as the black robe ones. Comedy is clearly not the developer strength.
MC is written so poorly that i am feeling sorry, he is an asshole that doesnt care about his sister at all and is just sitting doing nothing without worries, except flirting with the girls that are keeping him from finding his sister.
Sarah and Diana are the only characters in this game that are decently written. I honoestly cant understand how those two characters are decently written while everyone else in the game just does stupid shit.
Anyway, in summary, black robe scenes need to be deletgged, all of them, none can be salvaged.
MC story direction need to change ASAP and he needs to start participating in the story instead of just being there to the sex scenes
Anna and Malady need to do something too, they literally did nothing since the first scenes in the game.
I wish i could like this game, because its the game style i love and the renders are good, but i just couldnt enjoy it with all that stuff.
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There seems to be a scene in the game that doesn't seem to be patching correctly when using the incest patch. The specific scene when she talks with the lady cop in her bathrobe, it still continues to say "room..." instead of "broth.." I've tried looking through the patch & Chapter 2 script and I can't tell why it doesn't work as they look fine from what I can tell.
Question is the incestuous acts avoidable seems from certain comments Dev does not force you to do anything if you didn't choose to just hoping. I was so addicted to Haley's Story because at first glance you could've avoided her until the Dev forced the MC/Player I've not touched that game for atleast 6 to 8 updates ever since they started touching each other in the bed was the last time I played Dev gave impression that you could've avoided Haley but in the end no maghow terrible I treated her she wants me even more and I'm forced into a relationship with her.
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Any kind of criticism or feedback in general actually! And thank you for your multiple detailed posts written over multiple hours. As someone who comes from a completely different background and is new to the whole "creative" scene, seeing that kind of passion is simply amazing! I feel that, if nothing else, you deserve at least a detailed reply in return.
I completely understand that you might feel like the main character lacks agency. He might seem to be too compliant (trust me, he was even worse before some adjustments in the dialogue) from a perspective of an invested observer. And from that perspective, it's easy to envision ourselves as this flawless hero swooping in to save the day. However, I ask of you to put yourself in his shoes, and the shoes of his accidental compatriots.
He is not a hardened agent of mayhem, capable of incredible feats (not yet, at least). Despite his appearances, he's just a working stiff who cares about his sis. He's still a civilian and he's being assured by the people who appear to be more experienced and competent than him that they can take care of the situation.
I think it's entirely plausible he'd back down and not risk a confrontation with someone who apparently decked 3 guys in 3 seconds (while he has very little brawling experience) and someone who is helping him deal with his issue while having the same expertise needed to deal with said issue (which he himself, again, lacks).
This at least makes sense to me, but feel free to point out if you disagree with my reasoning.
I'm new and inexperienced at rendering, using my PC for many different things, and this update had 570 renders, which is ~200 renders per month (almost 3 months of development time). I think I'm doing decently enough for an interesting hobby pursued with limited resources, but feel free to disagree. (re-reading this, it might seem I sound condescending, but I assure you that is not my intention!)
First, dully noted! I get that it's a mixed bag, and not in everybody's taste so I'll keep that in mind for future releases! Btw, he was already toned down in the second chapter, I'm guessing that wasn't enough?
Second, MC will get to do something in the third episode. He might even get to do someone, but seeing how you'd like to avoid banging criminals in the most corrupted city in existence, I am not sure you'll be satisfied with your options.
Also, I feel like I should point out that this game plays out more like a classic novel than a visual novel, meaning that MC is undoubtedly the main character, but he's not the sole focus, there are multiple point of view characters.
MC will get off his but in next chapter! Forgive him, for he had to get accustomed to his new situation. As you said so yourself, it's still prologue, so please give him time to sew his cape before asking him to start saving people from burning buildings.
They are. Alternatively, you could play without a patch. I think that, for now at least, the story makes as much sense, but feel free to share your disagreements if you have any.
I'll look into it! Thanks for pointing it out.
A question for everyone who can't play a game unless it has only one protagonist:
I'll implement in the next release an option to skip Sarah's choices whenever they come up. Would that be a satisfying resolution to your issue? Let me know.
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Please create the game that pleases YOU. Of course constructive criticism should be considered, but ultimately, it is your game; your ideas; your 'baby'. I assume you know where you want to take this game. Don't let anyone dissuade you from that. If you see someone's idea that appeals to you, by all means implement it. But consider that any change that you make to satisfy one group of players is likely to piss off another group. And if you have reservations about a change, consider that if you don't like what you are doing, and enjoy doing it, the game will surely fail.Any kind of criticism or feedback in general actually! And thank you for your multiple detailed posts written over multiple hours. As someone who comes from a completely different background and is new to the whole "creative" scene, seeing that kind of passion is simply amazing! I feel that, if nothing else, you deserve at least a detailed reply in return.
I completely understand that you might feel like the main character lacks agency. He might seem to be too compliant (trust me, he was even worse before some adjustments in the dialogue) from a perspective of an invested observer. And from that perspective, it's easy to envision ourselves as this flawless hero swooping in to save the day. However, I ask of you to put yourself in his shoes, and the shoes of his accidental compatriots.
He is not a hardened agent of mayhem, capable of incredible feats (not yet, at least). Despite his appearances, he's just a working stiff who cares about his sis. He's still a civilian and he's being assured by the people who appear to be more experienced and competent than him that they can take care of the situation.
I think it's entirely plausible he'd back down and not risk a confrontation with someone who apparently decked 3 guys in 3 seconds (while he has very little brawling experience) and someone who is helping him deal with his issue while having the same expertise needed to deal with said issue (which he himself, again, lacks).
This at least makes sense to me, but feel free to point out if you disagree with my reasoning.
I'm new and inexperienced at rendering, using my PC for many different things, and this update had 570 renders, which is ~200 renders per month (almost 3 months of development time). I think I'm doing decently enough for an interesting hobby pursued with limited resources, but feel free to disagree. (re-reading this, it might seem I sound condescending, but I assure you that is not my intention!)
First, dully noted! I get that it's a mixed bag, and not in everybody's taste so I'll keep that in mind for future releases! Btw, he was already toned down in the second chapter, I'm guessing that wasn't enough?
Second, MC will get to do something in the third episode. He might even get to do someone, but seeing how you'd like to avoid banging criminals in the most corrupted city in existence, I am not sure you'll be satisfied with your options.
Also, I feel like I should point out that this game plays out more like a classic novel than a visual novel, meaning that MC is undoubtedly the main character, but he's not the sole focus, there are multiple point of view characters.
MC will get off his but in next chapter! Forgive him, for he had to get accustomed to his new situation. As you said so yourself, it's still prologue, so please give him time to sew his cape before asking him to start saving people from burning buildings.
They are. Alternatively, you could play without a patch. I think that, for now at least, the story makes as much sense, but feel free to share your disagreements if you have any.
I'll look into it! Thanks for pointing it out.
A question for everyone who can't play a game unless it has only one protagonist:
I'll implement in the next release an option to skip Sarah's choices whenever they come up. Would that be a satisfying resolution to your issue? Let me know.