VN Ren'Py Abandoned Sculptor [v0.13.0] [Discarded Union]

[BackRunner]

I like this game. Went down the romantic route and have to say... I pretty much wanna cuddle the antagonist.
But I pretty much feel like the progress was a bit fast, especially on the third day. As someone who had some experience in getting bullied but somewhat turned the tables somewhere after a small incident, no bully would easily "chat" to their blackmailer after getting blackmailed even if you do harbor some confused feelings on the blackmailer.
Then again it is your game so do what you want it is as long as it is enjoyable and so far I really like the progress of the game. Been watching it since it was just starting up. So keep up the good workk

 

[Richard Perkins]

I like this game. Went down the romantic route and have to say... I pretty much wanna cuddle the antagonist.
But I pretty much feel like the progress was a bit fast, especially on the third day. As someone who had some experience in getting bullied but somewhat turned the tables somewhere after a small incident, no bully would easily "chat" to their blackmailer after getting blackmailed even if you do harbor some confused feelings on the blackmailer.
Then again it is your game so do what you want it is as long as it is enjoyable and so far I really like the progress of the game. Been watching it since it was just starting up. So keep up the good workk

Yea i agree, need to slow down a bit and gain some fever. Also what i said before, trans need a dick and not some adrongus (i spelled that wrong)type of lower half.......

 

[StratoSquir]

I didn't mind the chibis that-much, because the good part of the game is actually it's writing
I've already mentioned in my opinion that the visuals could weren't the priority
I especially said something along the lines of:
"if your game look like shit, you can still change it by the end of it, but bad writing from the word-go is unfixable"

So i really didn't mind the chibis at-all, even if it was a bit awkward
But let-me say this, the antagonist look fucking great now
He/She's exactly what i wanted him/her to be
God he/she has such a great-fucking design, that's exactly how i protrayed the antagonist
A really arroguant weakling grudgy-emo tomboy/girl

I don't know who's the artist, i'm not even sure if the game-dev read our comments
But i hope he never let this artist go, his style is just fucking great
All he'll need are a few more varying models of the antagonist for when he crossdress/she dress femininly,
Somes CGs for the sex scenes if he can, like that first masturbation scene
And somes background, and he's done with the visuals
Since the game is only about the antagonist, he dosn't have to make visuals for the player and random characters


keep-up the good-work, and just keep going with the writing
even if the visuals are pretty important, good writing is the only-thing that make a text-game/visual-novel actually good
somes of the best VNs have pretty lacking/weird visuals, but the writing is good-enough to carry the game just by itself
for now the writing as been constently good, just keep going with it

the only thing i can reproach to the writing, is that i find the romance a bit forced after a certain-point
i was doing a 0 love max obedience/lust route, basically what would be usually be a "slave" route on most other-games
yet after the kiss came-around, their relationship became somewhat romantic

 

[StratoSquir]

Yea i agree, need to slow down a bit and gain some fever. Also what i said before, trans need a dick and not some adrongus (i spelled that wrong)type of lower half.......

give them some time, they only just added visuals for the antagonist
i'm myself really into the trap route, but we only need to wait a bit for it to happen
i'm pretty sure they're just testing the water to see if the character-design is well received, and how it work in-game

what we do agree-on, is that the romance is a bit forced
it became a bit too romantic after the play-scene when they both kiss
but again, that can be fixed, and at worse it's not THAT bad neither, just a bit forced

 

[Heresiarch]

Not exactly, there isn't any futa/intersex (i.e: both penis and vagina) option at the moment, but being trans (i.e: penis but female identity and expression) is an option if that is close enough. Support for intersex characters is something I'd like to do, but it's just a bit more work and there hasn't been quite enough demand to justify it. Maybe something to add in later if there is demand and time for it.

I wouldn't say no to this. Beyond that, DiscardedUnion, keep up the good work! I really enjoy this thus far!

 

[Disappointed guy]

I like where this is going: Road to perfection!!

 

[DiscardedUnion]

But will the non-consensual scenario/route will be added in the future? cuz I don't mind the romance route being priority.

I'm not going to commit to doing it 100% (scope creep is an ever-present threat), but I'd certainly like to add it at some point, and it seems like there is demand.

I really liked the premise of this VN ... having the possibility of bully sissification is something I have been looking for a long time

It’s a pity that it doesn’t have an Android version yet if it’s going to have one

I am working on an Android build for the next release.

I know that it would make it almost science fiction, but would it be possible to make a male bully 100% female?

I'd probably put this behind an option so people could avoid it if they wanted to keep things more grounded, but realistically it wouldn't be hard to implement this, so probably at some point.

I'm surprised how much fun I had with something still so early in development. Usually games this early don't have a whole bunch of content involved, so it was nice to see something that kept me busy for at least an hour of reading and picking options to move forward. I look forward to replaying it with the different starting options.

Will the Protagonist have a face of his own in the future?

Will some of the more intimate or sexual scenes have unique artwork for them somewhere down the line, or will most of the actions be like it is now, restricted to text based actions?

Also, if Archie isn't a thin freckled Redhead, I will be sorely disappointed.

The plan was for the protagonist to remain faceless—just in terms assets given the range of possible set-ups for the protagonist it is a big task. It also can be a little off-putting if they don't match the image the player has (although of course a shadow could still be an option for people who wanted that).

I'm not saying it *won't* happen, but it would require a lot of artwork (and so for the Patreon to do well), and would probably happen later in development.

On unique scene artwork, 100% yes—as many scenes as possible will have unique art. Our artist is currently working on the first scene, and we'll add more over time (although the sprites will also get expanded as well).

Hmm. Some weirdness is going on. After the uniform shopping, this time I wasn't able to get the 'bully goes down on you' scene (she won't let me behind the curtien, even though I have tons of obedience/lust) but she still shows up at your house later and has the scene where she says that's 'not her' even though nothing really happened.

What does that scene require, exactly? Is it route specific, or do I just need her stats to be higher?

Sounds like a bug to me, I'll take a look. That scene has high requirements for either obedience or relationship—probably too high after the recent rebalancing. I'll take a look at adjusting those values.

 

[KekKoo]

The plan was for the protagonist to remain faceless—just in terms assets given the range of possible set-ups for the protagonist it is a big task. It also can be a little off-putting if they don't match the image the player has (although of course a shadow could still be an option for people who wanted that).

I'm not saying it *won't* happen, but it would require a lot of artwork (and so for the Patreon to do well), and would probably happen later in development.

On unique scene artwork, 100% yes—as many scenes as possible will have unique art. Our artist is currently working on the first scene, and we'll add more over time (although the sprites will also get expanded as well).

My only gripe is that I'm so tired of all these games with pure focus on the "interest" if that makes any sense. In other words, I don't care all that much for self-inserts. If I wanted to self-insert, there are a lot of games and options AT THIS CURRENT point already that fit the bill, so if there's ever a chance, I sincerely hope it's taken. I like even the protagonist to be eye-candy and have some focus too instead of just the partner/interest. This is a main offender of why I would constantly play and enjoy otome games over the usual dating sim, because sure there's still a focus on the partner, but at least the MC and partner are depicted, and even then, typically in an otome game, considering the type of game? It makes clear perfect sense then why the interest would actually suddenly appeal more.

 

[Geralt_of_Trivia]

My only gripe is that I'm so tired of all these games with pure focus on the "interest" if that makes any sense. In other words, I don't care all that much for self-inserts. If I wanted to self-insert, there are a lot of games and options AT THIS CURRENT point already that fit the bill, so if there's ever a chance, I sincerely hope it's taken. I like even the protagonist to be eye-candy and have some focus too instead of just the partner/interest. This is a main offender of why I would constantly play and enjoy otome games over the usual dating sim, because sure there's still a focus on the partner, but at least the MC and partner are depicted, and even then, typically in an otome game, considering the type of game? It makes clear perfect sense then why the interest would actually suddenly appeal more.

sounds like your game is in another castle

 

[DiscardedUnion]

My only gripe is that I'm so tired of all these games with pure focus on the "interest" if that makes any sense. In other words, I don't care all that much for self-inserts. If I wanted to self-insert, there are a lot of games and options AT THIS CURRENT point already that fit the bill, so if there's ever a chance, I sincerely hope it's taken. I like even the protagonist to be eye-candy and have some focus too instead of just the partner/interest. This is a main offender of why I would constantly play and enjoy otome games over the usual dating sim, because sure there's still a focus on the partner, but at least the MC and partner are depicted, and even then, typically in an otome game, considering the type of game? It makes clear perfect sense then why the interest would actually suddenly appeal more.

I get what you are saying, and it is a perfectly reasonable request. The issue is I've already committed to the large range of options on the protagonist, so it is just costly to do. Hopefully Sculptor is successful enough I can afford to commission that much artwork for it and then you can enjoy it when that stuff is added in, but I'm afraid I can't promise it right now.

 

[KekKoo]

I get what you are saying, and it is a perfectly reasonable request. The issue is I've already committed to the large range of options on the protagonist, so it is just costly to do. Hopefully Sculptor is successful enough I can afford to commission that much artwork for it and then you can enjoy it when that stuff is added in, but I'm afraid I can't promise it right now.

I rather it not be promised anyhow, just the consideration is enough for me. (And besides, the interest/bully can be male so that more than plenty makes up for it for me personally. )

 

[Meesteres]

I really enjoyed the game, right up my alley. However, playing as a (cis) female protagonist there was (in my opinion, idk if that was on purpose) some incorrect wording with "ejaculate" and "Master".

 

[StratoSquir]

I'm not going to commit to doing it 100% (scope creep is an ever-present threat), but I'd certainly like to add it at some point, and it seems like there is demand.

you're absolutely right, you should only focus on mostly finishing the game as it is now
making new routes/endings should be a least priority,
starting to work on a million things at the same-time is a good-way to keep your game into developemment-hell
no-one would be happy, originals-fans would lose interest,
And players who just want to see their stuff added in the game would be lose interest as soon as they get it
For now you should focus on the writing, and then adding visuals to the scenes and backgrounds imho
also, you're right, you should never make promises or commitments if you're not 100% sure you'll be able to respect them


Still, it's interesting to talk and think about possibles endings/routes tho'
you wouldn't have to make it "non-consensual", you'd only need to make it non-romantic
basically making a route in which the antag isn't romantically insterested about the protag, but only in taking taking revenge instead
It's basically the kind of story you see in most feminization/corruption-hentais

you'd get a route/ending with max lust, in which he/she'd basically be whoring him/herself for money and pleasure
you'd get a route/ending with max obedience, in which he/she'd get turned-on by degrading plays (like pet-plays, wearing a collar, ect)
and finaly a route/ending with max lust/obedience, in which he/she'd becomes the protag's bitch/slave

you'd totaly avoid any non-consensual aspect to the story, while going as far with the "feminization" aspect as possible
it would also give reward the player for paying attention to the stats imo

 

[rambool]

This was great. Feminisation of tomboy was awesome, sadly amount of similar game close to none, there isnt even such tag.
Aside from more events this game just desperately needs art - at very least more diverse sprites of main bully.
Will watch this thread for more updates, good luck to dev and thanks for the beautiful work.

 

[UserX]

It seems an interesting concept and I agree with the dude who has written his comment just above mine: the tomboy part is even more interesting since it seems to me a concept completely new in this kind of games.

 

[ChippyP]

I wasn't sure what all to expect when I saw the (lack of) art assets, but this is easily among my favorite new visual novels (not just porn games) around. Your strong writing style and the wide range of options makes it a delight to play through. Patiently looking forward to future releases.

 

[Alannnnn]

How many routes are they?
Any BDSM or submissive routes?

 

[TrappedTruth]

This is by far my new favorite game, I check up on it every day. Cant wait for more updates in the future. Keep up the already great work.

 

[elinon7]

Making the tomboy antagonist blush is absolute kino, 7/10 pacing needs work. Good job my man

 

[DiscardedUnion]

I really enjoyed the game, right up my alley. However, playing as a (cis) female protagonist there was (in my opinion, idk if that was on purpose) some incorrect wording with "ejaculate" and "Master".

Yeah, those are bugs. The ejaculate one was stupid, it was meant to be gated on the protagonist having a penis, but was actually being gated by the antagonist having a penis instead. Thanks for letting me know about it, it'll be fixed in the next release.

How many routes are they?
Any BDSM or submissive routes?

Three, Relationship, Obedience and Arousal. Obedience has some light to medium BDSM and submission content in it, other routes will also have smatterings of light stuff.

The three routes don't vary that much right now, as we get deeper into the plot there will be more specific events.