VN Ren'Py Abandoned Secret Boss: New Neighbours [v0.2] [PaperBoyProductions]

[Trasher2018]

OK, i think the whole premise of the game is great. but there is just too many things that rub me the wrong way for me to say this looks like a good game..

first of all, you are a damm CEO but you are a bumbleing fool who people can just manipulate and you get the stutter when you talk to a woman, how on earth can you ever have been a CEO of anything. i could understand if the story was, you had a vary rare disease for all your life, untill recently you have been completly isolated from the world and social contact with anyone but your closest family, or something like that.. but thats not the story. not only that any person with just a little bit of leadership skills would emidiatly fire the "boss" for her manipulative, treathening and abusive behavior that shit is like venom in a company and a former CEO would recognize that and take actions, not just go along with her..

so all in all,we have a former CEO who lets people manipulate him,gets flustered around women and accepts an abusive "boss".. either change the prestory or change his behavior this shit is just cringe level bad..

other than that as i said, the premise for the game is good and its very early days, so it can easily be turned around..

Yeah - I mean he is what? 28? And had founded a the old company ... So probably he is more a high level nerd. I guess he finished college young and/or started the company during college - so he was focused on that. Its mentioned that he neglected his social life ... But I agree he reacts more like someone with minor autism or something like that.

I think the dev could try to implement different arcs for the MC in his behavior. I think with some planning you could achieve that without adding to many renders - its primarily a writing thing.

Or maybe just add some background to why he is so insecure with women or why he has this Samaritan fetish ^^ - I mean .. why did he gave that douche bag 1 Mio. extra? We should believe that he is at least good on the business side of thing, so why add 1 Mio. to a business that is 4 Mio. overpriced already. Or you can use that scene for a choice - to give him 1 mio. more or not and let that have some impact later on.

All that boss lady stuff - from what we have seen she is not abusive - Lotti seems to like her and the boss bitch seems to be nice in general, but she acts out on her mood (traffic, canceled date, ungrateful employee). But because the MC acts like he does I dont think that he can see through that and should at least think about firing her. Could also lead to some good choices for the player.

 

[MuffinManWantsPregnancy]

OK, i think the whole premise of the game is great. but there is just too many things that rub me the wrong way for me to say this looks like a good game..

first of all, you are a damm CEO but you are a bumbleing fool who people can just manipulate and you get the stutter when you talk to a woman, how on earth can you ever have been a CEO of anything. i could understand if the story was, you had a vary rare disease for all your life, untill recently you have been completly isolated from the world and social contact with anyone but your closest family, or something like that.. but thats not the story. not only that any person with just a little bit of leadership skills would emidiatly fire the "boss" for her manipulative, treathening and abusive behavior that shit is like venom in a company and a former CEO would recognize that and take actions, not just go along with her..

so all in all,we have a former CEO who lets people manipulate him,gets flustered around women and accepts an abusive "boss".. either change the prestory or change his behavior this shit is just cringe level bad..

other than that as i said, the premise for the game is good and its very early days, so it can easily be turned around..

Not to mention the fact, he literally witnesses straight-up sexual harassment in the workplace. I was hoping in this update that would be fleshed out more, maybe get some revenge, and plan to lure the pig out and destroy him. But nope. MC CEO just shakes hands with the guy and it's never brought up again. I liked the update for the most part, especially after playing the first release, but damn that shit made me mad. Like, I see the corruption tag and would understand if playing as a "bad guy" MC, however, I made choices that I believe fall along the "good guy" route. And all of your other points are pretty spot on. I really like the premise of the game as well and really hope there's some clarification on some things that still don't make a lot of sense in the next update.

 

[Shen10]

All that boss lady stuff - from what we have seen she is not abusive - Lotti seems to like her and the boss bitch seems to be nice in general, but she acts out on her mood (traffic, canceled date, ungrateful employee). But because the MC acts like he does I dont think that he can see through that and should at least think about firing her. Could also lead to some good choices for the player.

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[somebodynobody]

OK, i think the whole premise of the game is great. but there is just too many things that rub me the wrong way for me to say this looks like a good game..

first of all, you are a damm CEO but you are a bumbleing fool who people can just manipulate and you get the stutter when you talk to a woman, how on earth can you ever have been a CEO of anything. i could understand if the story was, you had a vary rare disease for all your life, untill recently you have been completly isolated from the world and social contact with anyone but your closest family, or something like that.. but thats not the story. not only that any person with just a little bit of leadership skills would emidiatly fire the "boss" for her manipulative, treathening and abusive behavior that shit is like venom in a company and a former CEO would recognize that and take actions, not just go along with her..

so all in all,we have a former CEO who lets people manipulate him,gets flustered around women and accepts an abusive "boss".. either change the prestory or change his behavior this shit is just cringe level bad..

other than that as i said, the premise for the game is good and its very early days, so it can easily be turned around..

It is slightly worse than just that. Depending on choices you get more backstory. Like his best friend in the company Martin trying to bang everyone in his section, and convince the CEO to hire a girl he thinks is hot and try to bang her.

Also Martin supposedly interviewed Anna before MC did, and during the interview tried to have her get naked, which MC was told by a different friend in the company. For a CEO who cares about his company, knowing this behavior and Martin literally telling the MC he is trying to bang every lady in the company, that is absolute bad press and harmful for a company.

The MC having an odd selection of skills, he went from a Pharma CEO to a fashion magazine middle worker, who does graphic design. When did Pharma CEOs learn graphic design to a level adequate for a magazine?

At the moment I agree with the board, he made a bad bet on a drug, he had no other good reads we know of, he seems to give money away, he acts like he cares about the company by hiring Anna, but on the other hand has a friend who would tank a non fortune 500. Then he doesn't evaluate the new company he would purchase, buys it overvalued, pays an extra million over the value, for a company that in current economy would be losing money since magazines aren't big business now.

I can not see how he is competent at all.

 

[Trasher2018]

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Yeah - to but because we know that she knows that this is a bluff (and the MC knows he is not in any danger) his reaction to her reasonable I think. Because she is nice to Lotti ...

And you need some person to produce some kind of conflict for the story ... and that shouldnt be only males.

As someone said - I have a bigger problem with the MCs reaction to that fat dude when he witness his harassment against Lotti. If the dev would have gave me a choice at that point to fire him, I whould have picked that for sure.

I think the dev struggles with his premise, that the MC is in power behind the scenes. And that he has plans for that fat douche.

 

[sergesan]

Yeah - to but because we know that she knows that this is a bluff (and the MC knows he is not in any danger) his reaction to her reasonable I think. Because she is nice to Lotti ...

And you need some person to produce some kind of conflict for the story ... and that shouldnt be only males.

As someone said - I have a bigger problem with the MCs reaction to that fat dude when he witness his harassment against Lotti. If the dev would have gave me a choice at that point to fire him, I whould have picked that for sure.

I think the dev struggles with his premise, that the MC is in power behind the scenes. And that he has plans for that fat douche.

i think also the same..if i would buy a company and before my eyes is this fat douche pestering the girls from my company-- a quick phonecall later i get his ass busted...but nothing happend- thats really disapointing--if this goes to the NTR road then please say so earlyer so i can quit the game...the story goes a little "bumpy"!? but i hope you go the right way and giveus the chance to dump this fat idiot or the likes and maybe make a path for a cool harem story...that would be awesome...not all of us like to share or humilate ones girls....good luck on your way

 

[PaperboyP]

i think also the same..if i would buy a company and before my eyes is this fat douche pestering the girls from my company-- a quick phonecall later i get his ass busted...but nothing happend- thats really disapointing--if this goes to the NTR road then please say so earlyer so i can quit the game...the story goes a little "bumpy"!? but i hope you go the right way and giveus the chance to dump this fat idiot or the likes and maybe make a path for a cool harem story...that would be awesome...not all of us like to share or humilate ones girls....good luck on your way

I am not a big fan of NTR myself, but I will definitely make it an option just to accommodate other peoples taste. And as for what George did to Lottie or on the way he acts, don’t worry it's not like there won't be any consequences to his actions but it will be an option to get his ass out or depending on how I will approach the story as I have several ideas. By the way, I spent a month or two editing Charlotte to make her look like Eva Green the actress so I care about her a lot haha.

 

[PaperboyP]

So far I am into it. Way better since the first release. I am curious though, I noticed the Corruption tag. I am personally not into Corruption but have also noticed a lot of choices that don't revolve around it. Like it's optional. I guess what I am trying to ask is if corruption will be a focused topic as the story progresses or if it's completely optional? Can't wait to see what the next update brings.

It is certainly will be an option. I like corruption, and at the same time I like romance. So I will implement them not just for me but for you guys, as well.

 

[PaperboyP]

Fun game. Not that much content - alot exposition and build up ... and even without any lewd stuff I do think that the stuff with Katrina is a bit fast paced. Oh ... and the scene with Anna, there is a bug before that, because the MC says he want to visit Venus and Gary ... and I were confused.

Not all girls girls are that hot (imho) and I only like Lotti, Katrina, Anna and boss bitch. Venus doesnt look like her younger sister .. more like her older one or her mother? And the receptionist is quite meh ... I dont mind her, you should have girls like her, as long as I can avoid them when I want that.

I hope we can avoid girls and are not forced into them. I guess the story demands that I have to endure Venus ...but I hope we can dip into Anna behind her hubbys back (or in front of him for the folks who like that ... ^^)

I think I was tired from studying when I wrote the Venus and Gary line lol. It is definitely supposed to be Anna and Gary. I am just surprised it was not my girlfriend’s name or some random chick's name ahaha.

 

[PaperboyP]

Great update but kinda sucks for me that I like Anna the best...

I spent months editing Anna to look like Mindi Mink the Pornstar, if you know her work. So I’m going to make the most out of it haha. And about the MC’s relationship with her, let's just say that I have several possible pathways for her .

 

[EvilMonkey]

Okay, so I've just started this game but let me try and get this straight. The MC is a 27 year old CEO of a pharmaceutical firm who gets asked to step down after losing $1 million investment (plus some groundless rumours) but then goes and buys a company and throws in an extra million on the purchase price? Couldn't he have just avoided the whole issue of having to leave his old job by paying back the lost million? Also his old PA (?) turns up on his doorstep, tells him she knows he's loaded and asks if he will date her sister and give her niece a job? Gold digging by proxy?

I don't hold high hopes for this game really if I've got so many issues with the premise and I'm hardly through the introduction yet.

 

[Deleted member 1571716]

Eh. Don't like the new rewrite at the start. The MC acts like he's a confused little bitch. I liked it better when we had the choice to tell that fucker off. If I still had the original release, I would just add it back.

Don't let this turn into another confused lil bitch boy game. Seems like everyone is doing that now.

 

[Deleted member 1571716]

I did have the original.

 

[Mormont]

That's one fast-moving MC at the end there to make that catch. I've enjoyed this so far the signs look good it's not one of those typical cliche games you always see appealing to the certain fetish crowd. I hope to see more updates in the near future.

 

[MuffinManWantsPregnancy]

That's one fast-moving MC at the end there to make that catch. I've enjoyed this so far the signs look good it's not one of those typical cliche games you always see appealing to the certain fetish crowd. I hope to see more updates in the near future.

Haha, thought it was a Flash origin story for a moment.

 

[leon02457]

Best game ever can't wait to see next update

 

[Deleted member 2282431]

I spent months editing Anna to look like Mindi Mink the Pornstar, if you know her work. So I’m going to make the most out of it haha. And about the MC’s relationship with her, let's just say that I have several possible pathways for her .

There is nothing hotter than Mindi's Mom+Aunt+GF(or Sis) Virtual Sex Videos! Even though I'm probably old enough to be HER Dad

 

[T-N]

Sounds like the dev has alot of work ahead of him, like bring some reality to the game. think i'll wait and see what you guys say a few updates down the road.

 

[MrFriendly]

Okay, just finished the game and:
1) It would be nice if, when someone shows up at the MC's door, the Player has some clue who they are. Maybe an upfront character gallery to introduce Martin and Anna?
2) the Ha Ha Ha/he he feels like the MC is the Joker - so damn annoying - just say "laughing" or "laughs" please.
3) Why the fuck is the MC such a push over? "Sure I'll go on a date with your sister", "Sure I'll hire your niece to clean my empty apartment" (how does he refer to that empty space as a "mess"?), "Sure, I'll pay an obscene amount of money for an old media business" (He paid 6 million dollars for a magazine company with 5 employees - not including himself. So 1 million for each employee and a bonus)
He never really asserts himself in any conversation and is always hesitant when speaking. For someone that lead a company he isn't very good at speaking to people.
Having us hear everyone else's thoughts about the MC makes him come off as an even bigger idiot. I'd prefer to never know what other characters are thinking.
Can't the MC just tell Redfield to fire the Harvey Weinsten of a Managing Editor and hire a new photographer instead of just "uh, sure, I guess" taking the photography job when Bianca orders him to do it? After Redfield is introduced in the beginning he doesn't show up, same with the Managing Editor.

Overall the renders look okay, none of the female characters are really attractive and all of them suffer from "MC is instantly the hottest man in the world even though he is a dumbass" aka porn game logic.

Beyond the above the player needs to be given more choices as to how conversations should go and be able to say "No" a few times so they feel they have the illusion of choice.

I honestly was excited to start this game since I hadn't come across it before but it was just disappointing.

 

[swipeymcdane]

I am not a big fan of NTR myself, but I will definitely make it an option just to accommodate other peoples taste. And as for what George did to Lottie or on the way he acts, don’t worry it's not like there won't be any consequences to his actions but it will be an option to get his ass out or depending on how I will approach the story as I have several ideas. By the way, I spent a month or two editing Charlotte to make her look like Eva Green the actress so I care about her a lot haha.

Man I’m really digging this game! I’m a huge fan of curvy (and thick ) MILFs in general but these model’s uniqueness make them very sexy. Hope you’re an ass man like myself and will give a lot of attention to theirs hehe. Hoping for some sexy POV doggy scenes!

I especially love your style as you mentioned that this character is based on that actress and another one on MindiMink - super hot MILF. Are the other characters based on real people as well? Would love to know! My favs are def Anna, her sister and the juicy-booty daughter as well hehe. Ginormous fan of booty shorts here!

I want to wait for another update but I’m pretty positive I’m going to subscribe to your Patreon. Def need more of your work ASAP. I’m a student as well so I know what it’s like. But hopefully you can make a small living off this someday, from what I can tell you’re talented and deserve it! Quick tip/suggestion though in regards to the Patreon tiers: Usually when I sub on someone’s Patreon for the $10 tier the description states that you also get ‘previews’ or other small freebies such as side-stuff you work on or bonus pictures. This might help you get more people to subscribe as I’ve seen the $10 be the most popular in other Patreons. I know you say previews for other games are in the $30 tier but something more enticing for the $10 tier is needed as well IMO. Regardless, good luck and most importantly have fun with it/don’t ever lose the magic

P.S. not sure if you’re a fan or not but maybe you can treat us to some MILF wincest in the future if you know what I mean. Maybe in this game or another! Idk but I know this forum would appreciate it lmao.