Really solid writing from the beginning to the end. The pace was good, the story weren't dragged out for too long neither it was too short. The characters were all likeable, there were several choices at the end, the endings were well done also. It could use some music to add something to the environment, but as far it's concerned, it's very well put together. Except...that MC face.
There are dozens of male character assets in Daz. This one is recolored one, where the recoloring screwed with the facial features, and for some weird reason it also uses female eyelashes. You could've just,
a, find a proper black/brown colored male asset and use that
b, leave it as it was originally
because this just looks outright horrible, at some renders it's like a Ken Doll went wrong during manufacturing.