VN Ren'Py Somewhere I Belong [v0.1.0.0] [Mr Baker]

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Demoness_Kiss

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Raziel_8 said:
Hm, the renders look nice and a zombie apocalypse is always welcome.

But the story makes little sense to me.
Starting with a bank robbery...why ?
What use has money and gold in the apocalypse ? Food, water, medicine, weapons, ammo and gasoline sure, but what what is the point of money, it has no worth beside the paper it's made of, so not even good for trading.

Then we have Anais, which apparently is on a visit in the city. (she also has clearly a screw loose)
Did i misread something ? The whole point of only a few cities remaining and outside of the walls it is extremly dangerous. And she makes a casual visit as if it is the most normal thing in the world ??

Mobile phones are working, again how does this work if there are only a handful of cities remaining ?

The MC has a job interview, for a company in the capital because of the good money they pay...
He isn't suited because he lacks a working visa...seriously, in a zombie apocalypse...
How is that of any concern if most of humanity is dead, how would they even verify that...or were documents on the high priority list as they did evacuations in a zombie outbreak ?

Then there is the description

What's the point of being rich in the apocalypse ? It's not like you could buy a lot of things or live a happy and carefree life.

Does his home town or surrounding cities still exist, ? Because otherwise i don't see much point of taking the risk.
And how would money solve the problem of getting back in his home countr ? Is long-distance travel via ship or plane still working, despite only a handful of cities surviving ?
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Snusen said:
The renders are good but good god the writing is weird. No one irl goes around saying W T F or p l s. Dev really need to remove shortening of words. Makes the writing just feel like it was done by a high schooler.

Story is interesting. Although killing off 2 people instantly at the start of the story does not really bring the emotional value that i feel that the dev is trying to show. Like why should i care about those two? I get that its a motive for the MC but just feels like a cheap way to make the MC have a reason to be depressed.
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Fun Shaundi said:
I won't say anything that most haven't said already, but still...!

PROS:

- Beautiful renders. Seriously, the quality is better than I expected.
- Gorgeous girls so far, no weird facial expressions that make them look like the Joker, they all look so natural.
- Male characters who aren't the MC are look nice. So many games make the mistake of dropping the ball and just make them look like spawns of Satan, I personally appreciate when they look human and realistically good looking.
- MC is handsome as hell. Yep, some don't care about this, but I strongly believe if you're going to show a MC's face, he should be pleasant to look at. Guy looks perfect.
- Animations are good.
- Zombies. What else do I have to say? A good Zombie VN is always welcomed.
- The premise of the story seems to have so much potential.

Weak Points:

- As it was already pointed out: Grammar. There's lack of capitalization at the beginning of the sentences, lack on punctuation, lack of question marks in some dialogues with questions, abbreviations that cheapen the writing ('Sr' instead of 'Sir', 'Pls' instead of 'please'. 'Cmon' is okay, but it should still be written as 'C'mon', like 'singing' can be shortened as ' singin' ').
- The structure of some sentences reveal that English isn't the dev's native language. Some games get abandoned when people struggle to read coherent sentences, so it's crucial dev corrects this and/or gets some help from someone who speaks it fluently.
- Some of the dialogue could get some work. Instead of MC shouting 'no man not you pls', dev shouldn't be afraid to add something extra 'I can't believe this is happening! Not you man, can't be you, please!'.

Dev already added a note where they explain the game will be polished, cause its still in its early stages.They have to take in consideration that they're going to compete with VNs that not only look as gorgeous as theirs, but with VNs that also have good grammar and natural and easy to follow dialogue.
I really wish them the best, and I'll be crossing my fingers for this one.
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Hello. Sex content forced or optional? Will it be possible to choose just one girl and stick with her through entire game?
 
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"...it doesn't matter if you are good or evil, that's up to you,..."

I hope we can be really evil but we would need more/other tags for that.
 
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ikhanot said:
Sex scenes with speed options usually means the dev does not know how to write sex talk.
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Not sure if I´ve ever seen a game here without a skip option and would probably not play it if it doesn´t have one.
In terms of writing I would give it the benefit of the doubt because it´s version 0.01 and is barely a demo.

ikhanot said:
Most characters don't look south american.
Couldn't give a shit about diversity but come on, show some authenticity.
Great Renders but kinda that's it, for me.
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There are many white people in South America but I think your criticism is fair and I would like to see more Black, Latina Women in this game.
 
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Demoness_Kiss

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ikhanot said:
Game wants to be like Dying Light but mixed with porn. :unsure:
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I mean...that's fair but in Dying Light the situation was much more dire and "survivalistic" like felt like the situation was much worse

AGAIN HERE WE HAVE PEOPLE CONCERNED ABOUT MONEY, RESIDENT-VISAS AND OTHER BUROCRACY STUFF!
(sorry for bolded, underlined and caps, it's for the sake of emphasis)

Allan Wolf said:
for the satisfaction of the incestuous crowd (I'm part of it) I hope there is incest in other updates
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I'm part of that crowd but i'm okay with it ONLY if it makes sense...considering this first release? i'm scared because nothing makes sense

like among the things we already talked about: MC lives with his door unlocked? I mean Anais enters the house wearing only a night-gown just like that, with a glass of milk in her hand...and she says that recently came back in town...even tho towns and cities are quarantined behind walls...so how did she do it? and where was she to be so chill to walk from where she is living now to MC's place...just like that?

Keep in mind that i like Anais(or whatever her name is, yes i'm bad with names, sorry) aside that game "of sexy peek-a-boo" while she is naked which is absolute cringe
 
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vogelbeest

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Not really sure robbing a bank for the money is a smart move during a global zombie apocalypse.... Unless your biggest fear is running out of toilet paper of course.... Gold maybe, but if it's a dystopian tragedy like this, food and medicine and anything that improves your chances of survival (weapons, ammo, protective clothing, first aid products, etc.) is what you should be after....
Society collapsing also means the monetary system collapses...

But looking good so far, will follow it with interest and good luck!
 
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