VN Ren'Py Abandoned Squirt Game [v0.1.3] [StudentannasIn]

[ludobico]

"Squid Game"'s sequel?!

 

[drhotrod]

Why is incest a tag for this game? The MC moves into his teacher's apartment, there is no direct relationship. Also there are way too many spelling errors.

 

[Steven Ethan]

Done playing
Cons:
1) You need to change the game soundtrack that flute thingy, it's really annoying. Instead you can add club song or jazz song.
2) Multiple choices are bummer, you miss out most of the scenes. Would request you to reduce multiple choice questions.

Pros:
1) Female characters models are really great.
2) Like where the story is headed. To be honest really don't care about squid game theme. We just want better story & more fappeing scenes lol

 

[elmicho]

Hello! first of all I congratulate you for encouraging you to release your own game, that in itself is a big step, now I will give my humble opinion about the demo.

The demo lasts about 15 minutes, the duration is somewhat disappointing, but it is understood that it is a demo, besides that the game as it is understood, is based on the squid game series but does not show anything that is related to that, it would have been nice if at the end of the demo they showed something that related it as when he arrived at the bank for the student loan he saw that the interests are huge and still decide to risk, that in my opinion would have been a good end to the demo.

*PROS
- Good graphics and animations.
- The humor is not bad and I guess it will be the main attraction of this game.
- The landlady is sexy, the other characters, not so much.

Spoiler: animations

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-I like this detail, nice.
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*CONS
-The proportions, I mean, how old are the characters at the beginning? 10 years old? they look like they are in middle school, this is more noticeable when they are placed next to objects and/or adults.
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Also, shes what? 30?
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-MC is really ugly, and the 5-year time jump didn't change that, shotacon fans will be delighted tho.
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It's not decisive, but I prefer the MC attractive or faceless, and unless there is another time jump this will make me back out of wanting to play it again. The humor can help the protagonist quite a bit like in Solvalley School, the MC is uglier than beating your grandmother and stealing her money, but you still have a fondness for him because of the humor.

- The development of the story makes almost no sense.
I mean, why someone will tell you this?
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-The MC has never seen a photo of the landlady's eldest daughter but he has been living in the house for some time now?
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Also...
View attachment 1627588 The morning wood is awkward but her walking around the house in her underwear knowing there's a man there when he supposedly just moved in isn't? Maybe shes a total whore? or shes just a "take a look to the first whore in the game renders right now because you will never see her again"? I dont know.
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And that would be it, those are the good and bad things I see in this demo.
If you plan to make a game with humor where the story doesn't matter then you are on the right track (there are several like this and many are successful, in fact there are some that I like), but if you were looking to make a game with humor and with a good story you would have to fix a few things.
Anyway, best of luck my friend, I would like to know where all this will lead because the idea is very good and I think it would give a lot of play.

that's one hell of a detailed review!

haven't tried the game yet, and from what you said, i'll just wait for couple of updates and give it a try then

btw, your signature, the gifs what game are they from?

 

[carmafia]

Yes

 

[taru]

Just need to change the mc I get the joke but it doesn't really work he kind of makes me not wanna play more even though the game is fine itself. Also why would you need to re name the teacher and daughter?

 

[bobdillan]

StudentannasIn

Suggestion: clarify future tags and whether or not they are avoidable (for the ones people would want to avoid). Most notable example being NTR. (which tbh the premise kinda would imply that is quite possible). Others being sharing/swinging, and well anything you will or won't add really. (If not having certain tags like NTR, and more than MC's dick, I would suggest saying as much).

 

[qwertyuiop990!]

Short, and sweet, a decent start.
I suggest you get it proofread as the English spelling/grammar is not great at times.

 

[TinyTinny69]

MC is kinda ugly, in a cute way. Most of the girls are cute. I'll keep an eye on this one.

 

[Havik79]

Why is incest a tag for this game? The MC moves into his teacher's apartment, there is no direct relationship. Also there are way too many spelling errors.

If you want you can change their titles, so it is mum and sister.

 

[MissBumhole]

I enjoyed this more than I should. You seem to be having a lot of fun making this game. Hahaha! But seriously, get someone to proof read your work first before releasing. The grammar needs a lot of work. But overall, that was not a bad 0.1 Strong start, dude. Keep at it. I'll keep my eye out for this one.

 

[zeus04]

 

[PokeIssau]

that's one hell of a detailed review!

haven't tried the game yet, and from what you said, i'll just wait for couple of updates and give it a try then

btw, your signature, the gifs what game are they from?

Thx.
It's Sage from being a dik

 

[Talmadge]

Hey, Studentannasin, just curious, but could you share your game through Mega? Or do you not have an account with them? It is, sadly, the only way I can download games. And I'd like to try yours out. If you can't, I understand. Thanks, and good luck with this.

 

[Lordborgman]

I just finished v0.1 and I stand by what I said about the demo review, this game makes no sense, I'd rather watch a porno.
Those who have played a game with a nonsensical story like the lecuyer cult will understand.
It's a shame because I really think he has potential but somehow manages to waste it.

The animations are the typical 1-2 seconds loop but they are good, the real problem (and a big one) is the development of the story.
I attach an online gallery for those who want to see the animations only. Dont open the spoiler if you dont want to spoil yourself, duh.

Spoiler: animations

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Whats the sauce/game of your signature, specifically the one on the left?

 

[Zsvenn]

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[StudentannasIn]

So saves not working, as mine are not working from the demo version.

That's strange. They work for me. Maybe we can figure out what the problem is. Does anybody else have this problem?

 

[StudentannasIn]

Just need to change the mc I get the joke but it doesn't really work he kind of makes me not wanna play more even though the game is fine itself. Also why would you need to re name the teacher and daughter?

I understand the frustration with how the mc looks. I didn't make him look like that only for the "little squirt" joke. The basic idea for this parody is that an unattractive character ends up having a crazy adventure that revolves around sex. Also he's still a virgin at 22, so he can't look like a stud for this to be plausible.

The option to rename the 2 female characters is just in case players don't want them to be named Brenda and Amy.

 

[StudentannasIn]

I enjoyed this more than I should. You seem to be having a lot of fun making this game. Hahaha! But seriously, get someone to proof read your work first before releasing. The grammar needs a lot of work. But overall, that was not a bad 0.1 Strong start, dude. Keep at it. I'll keep my eye out for this one.

Yes! I'm really having fun making this game! My biggest problem so far is the text in general. English is not my first language so i struggle a lot with grammar and making the sentences sound right. I have nobody to help by proof reading because most of my friends don't speak english very well. I will reach out to more people for help with this. For now, if anybody wants to, they can dm me the mistakes they find and i will fix them with a small update.

Sorry for my bad english, i will try to do better

 

[StudentannasIn]

StudentannasIn

Suggestion: clarify future tags and whether or not they are avoidable (for the ones people would want to avoid). Most notable example being NTR. (which tbh the premise kinda would imply that is quite possible). Others being sharing/swinging, and well anything you will or won't add really. (If not having certain tags like NTR, and more than MC's dick, I would suggest saying as much).

You're right. So far i don't have any of those tags in the game. When i get to that part i will for sure make them avoidable. I will also add some in the moment warnings just so players know what to expect. I can't really say which of these tags will be in the future updates because i'm planning to have people vote on them when the time comes.