VN Ren'Py Abandoned Stormside [v0.23.1.4] [Atemsiel]

[MaxRichard]

Hah, thanks. Admittedly when I saw the notification that I'd got a review, I fully expected it to be 2 stars. Every other time I've got to the front page, I've immediately got a 2 star afterwards and ended up back on page 2 lol. Perhaps I'll have to wait another week for that to happen xD

A 2 star review for this game is entirely unwarranted... I wouldn't pay much mind to it, as it seems the criticism there seems to revolve around things like "MC's cum is too watery" ....

I've actually just finished playing the game. It is quite short indeed, but mostly because I was left wanting more, so please take that as a compliment.

To the extent you're looking for more meaningful constructive feedback, I feel like the Submissive and Slave routes are a bit too similar? If I were on your shoes, I would consider steering the Sub route to be more lust-based than focused on corporal punishment, leaving that to the Slave route. I, for one, don't really get off on beating the living fuck out of any of these adorable girls (including the cuntier ones), but I would love to push them to become proper sluts in a lust path (with plenty of maledom and daddy RP). Just my 2 cents

 

[datwinman]

This game is awesome. Keep up the good work!

 

[jvbatman]

Just curious to see how you envision the game playing out? The plot feels like an open world trainer but so far everything is pretty on rails as far as which girl you get to interact with when. Will it open up later and let you choose which girls to train or are you looking to keep it like a lot of visual novels where everthing progresses pretty linearly?

 

[Atemsiel]

Just curious to see how you envision the game playing out? The plot feels like an open world trainer but so far everything is pretty on rails as far as which girl you get to interact with when. Will it open up later and let you choose which girls to train or are you looking to keep it like a lot of visual novels where everthing progresses pretty linearly?

It's built as a branching story, and isn't intended to ever become a sandbox. You get your choices (relatively) early on that let you choose which of the three routes you want to put each girl on, and things go from there. Whilst the plot may feel like that of a trainer game, I wouldn't call it a trainer game in the traditional sense. It has that sort of the same things thematically, but it doesn't have the same sandboxy "Raise submission points" kinda stuff that's usually in those kinda games.

It's best treated as a branching story, and as such it takes ages to make, which is largely why there isn't a massive amount of content at the moment (At least in comparison to what there will be one day. Imo there's still quite a lot of content in the game, it's just spread across multiple routes.)

 

[SlothOnMeth]

It's built as a branching story, and isn't intended to ever become a sandbox.

Sounds like a good plan. Minimize feature creep and keep good focus. Something that a lot of devs lack.

The ghost hunting minigame doesn't really fit this idea and is kind of out of left field, I wouldn't have attempted that. But apparently a lot of people like this so somehow it still worked out and adds to the overall product.

Great models to draw people in and a good story to keep them interested. Few fap games have good story that ties everything together sensibly, I expect great things out of this project.

 

[Atemsiel]

Sounds like a good plan. Minimize feature creep and keep good focus. Something that a lot of devs lack.

The ghost hunting minigame doesn't really fit this idea and is kind of out of left field, I wouldn't have attempted that. But apparently a lot of people like this so somehow it still worked out and adds to the overall product.

Great models to draw people in and a good story to keep them interested. Few fap games have good story that ties everything together sensibly, I expect great things out of this project.

Thanks. That's kinda the idea here. It isn't meant to be some grandiose story where that's the reason people keep coming back. It's intended to be a fuckfest game (Think like Waifu Academy) except I saw no reason I couldn't give it at least some story. Writing nerds may call it shallow or cliche, but I'm not so bothered by that. As long as it actually goes somewhere instead of it just being "Fuck girls, the end" then I'm happy.

The ghost hunting bit is interesting to me because I had no idea how that was gonna be received. I was fairly sure it wasn't going to be an overall positive, but I wanted to do it anyway since I like making stuff like that. I'm mostly just glad it wasn't a project killer, and that's part of why I'm doing another one at some point (Though quite different from the first). I did get a couple of comments from people saying things like "I was on board until the ghost hunt. Uninstalled" but I feel like they would have just found something else to overreact to later on, so it's not really a huge loss.

I will say though, currently Sasha is the only girl who gets "mini-games". There's a possibility that Olivia's industry event thing will involve a short sandbox section, but I haven't decided yet. Definitely not as elaborate as the ghost hunt anyway.

 

[Birdnman993]

I'm just getting into the part of becoming a magistrate but I like the game, it's like The Headmaster but done well and without an insufferable and idiotic MC.

Also for some strange reason the girls here remind me of the ones from Eturnum but I don't know why I liked them more, I can't understand why.

 

[HSHS1111]

Don't know who did it first but Eternum, one of most popular games on here, also has these shortish "adventure" sections. Mostly with some kind of horror elements too. They can be fun but I for sure appreciate the option to "skip" it. Even if I enjoy playing through them once if you replay the game on different character paths it would get tedious.

 

[sycoDreamer]

This is by far one of my favorite games. I don't think I've come across another "trainer" style game that I've enjoyed as much as this. I love the branching paths for each girl, and am convinced I will thoroughly enjoy multiple play throughs of this game.

 

[NadaMucho]

I've just started with this title... maybe "chapter" 2? Just handed out first punishment? Anyway we all have little things we like and don't like in an AVN. They aren't major, don't cause us to play or leave a game but they stick out. One of those things, in Stormside, is the animated clock as the scene transition device.

It's really fantastic and gives this cool "TV show" vibe to it. Gives the illusion that two animated scenes are being joined. I can almost hear the transition music from the old Batman TV show. I know it's a small detail but it adds so much, for me, that I wanted to recognize. Well done you!

 

[Birdnman993]

This is really sad, very sad, that feeling when you really like something and it ends, I haven't felt that in a while, in general I liked the main girls, the humor is very great and the story is interesting.

Although the ghost part was very heavy for me and I saw it in the novel version, I don't want to imagine what it would have been like to do the free version, my favorite moments are undoubtedly Hikari's gymnastics test, the salaried man was a beautiful moment in the mood.

I chose the sub path, I like to be tough but not mean to the girls and it seems like the most optimal option, that way you keep the girls and the sponsors happy.

 

[Nemouto]

im sorry to ask, but i stuck on monday june 28 after the first cescie dream scene and chat with my dad, after that it can't do anything but stare on the girls. how to fix it?

 

[Atemsiel]

im sorry to ask, but i stuck on monday june 28 after the first cescie dream scene and chat with my dad, after that it can't do anything but stare on the girls. how to fix it?

https://f95zone.to/threads/stormside-v0-23-1-4-atemsiel.115722/post-13577603

Here ya go

 

[Tumai]

Well clicking on that link ^ out of curiosity sent me to a post that also contained this:

my general goal is to release the update towards the end of may. I don't yet know whether or not I'll be able to do it that fast.

Sooooo, seeing that this is the last day of May.... Not complaining or anything, just would like a general sense of where you are currently at with the next version.

Cheers

 

[NadaMucho]

im sorry to ask, but i stuck on monday june 28 after the first cescie dream scene and chat with my dad, after that it can't do anything but stare on the girls. how to fix it?

If you get stuck like that try clicking the X in the upper right hand window to shut the app down. You may (if this works) get a confirmation box for the shutdown which you should cancel. That should snap you back to the menu. No promises but at least it's something to try.

 

[marcodelamoret]

Hello Atemsiel

I finished translating your game into the current version.
Just in case here is the link to the post:
https://f95zone.to/threads/traduction-en-francais-french-translation.26002/post-13887818

If I may... there are a lot of duplicate lines of text...
This makes the translation a bit long to do and difficult to test for all paths
But it also makes the game interesting and replayable!
Thanks!

En FR:
Bonjour Atemsiel
J'ai fini la traduction de ton jeu en version actuelle.
Au cas ou voici le lien du post:
Si je peux me permettre.... il y a beaucoup de ligne de texte en double ... :O
Cela rends la traduction un peu longue a faire et difficile a tester pour tout les chemins
Mais cela rends aussi le jeu interessant et rejouable !
Merci!

 

[Elhemeer]

Okay, just found this game. Made it through to Riley's phone call. I'm sold.

 

[Elhemeer]

I feel like this is a weird bug, but since Atemsiel is here, I might as well mention it:

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[Atemsiel]

I feel like this is a weird bug, but since Atemsiel is here, I might as well mention it:

Spoiler: What happened:

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Yep, if this is your first playthrough then this is a bug, but this whole thing is being removed in the next update (Since most players will have save files which are unaffected by the thing this fixes) so it's kinda fine. Thanks for letting me know though. I wasn't aware it was possible for this to appear this early in the game. It's not supposed to.

Also, regarding peeking on Riley, if you're interested in what that does...

It basically just changes some dialogue in a scene you may or may not get later. At the time I was making my 0.1 version I basically had no idea what I was doing and put that in there as an option because like, all porn games let you peek on the girl, right? That's pretty much it. I didn't want something I put in without really thinking to have a long lasting effect. Riley will bring it up under select circumstances, but no positive or negativeeffect here. This game features a lot of content you may or may not get, but it's not a case of get the girl or don't. You can get the girl in multiple ways. Honestly, the only way you're not gonna get the girl is by outright trying to have nothing to do with them. It's very much a multiple playthrough kinda game (Or will be when it's done) so feel free to make many saves and explore what different choices get you. There's also a gallery unlocker at the end of the game so if you get bored of that and just wanna see all the scenes, play through once, and unlock it all at the end.


Also if the guy a few comments above who made the french translation is reading, I did see that, and thank you very much. I'll respond properly tomorrow since this next update does a bunch regarding translation, and we should probably talk

 

[Elhemeer]

Yep, if this is your first playthrough then this is a bug, but this whole thing is being removed in the next update (Since most players will have save files which are unaffected by the thing this fixes) so it's kinda fine. Thanks for letting me know though. I wasn't aware it was possible for this to appear this early in the game. It's not supposed to.

Also, regarding peeking on Riley, if you're interested in what that does...

It basically just changes some dialogue in a scene you may or may not get later. At the time I was making my 0.1 version I basically had no idea what I was doing and put that in there as an option because like, all porn games let you peek on the girl, right? That's pretty much it. I didn't want something I put in without really thinking to have a long lasting effect. Riley will bring it up under select circumstances, but no positive or negativeeffect here. This game features a lot of content you may or may not get, but it's not a case of get the girl or don't. You can get the girl in multiple ways. Honestly, the only way you're not gonna get the girl is by outright trying to have nothing to do with them. It's very much a multiple playthrough kinda game (Or will be when it's done) so feel free to make many saves and explore what different choices get you. There's also a gallery unlocker at the end of the game so if you get bored of that and just wanna see all the scenes, play through once, and unlock it all at the end.


Also if the guy a few comments above who made the french translation is reading, I did see that, and thank you very much. I'll respond properly tomorrow since this next update does a bunch regarding translation, and we should probably talk

I think what surprised me the most was that, if she doesn't catch you, she says "That's what you get for not talking ..." but if she does, she DOESN'T say "That's what you get for peeking on naked girls" ... it would have come off the same way in the same cheeky tone the way it was presented, and with everything that follows would work as a light-hearted dig and not imply any lasting effect.

Spoiler: That said, this surprised me more ...

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