VN Ren'Py Abandoned The Lust of Sissy Boy [v13.0 Public] [SycoXart]

[Sherka]

Okay, the game looks promising, I can see the inspiration in GGGB and if it's half as good as GGGB, it would have been worth it.
The only thing that made me feel werid, are the character designs, the bodies are not so bad, but the faces don't look good at all, Dev, if you can't draw realistic faces, you can make them with an aesthetic cartoon, or like anime, or in some other way.
The game has potential, it is just a matter of making the characters more striking to attract more attention

 

[SyxoXart]

Hopefully we'll see chastity, orgasm denial, ruined orgasms, and self-cum eating!

I will think on the topics. But Thanks for the topics, I'll keep them in my mind while writing script

 

[SyxoXart]

I see incest and milf and no female domination. Does this mean Ash's mom will be lovingly helping with their transition? Sissy gurl being gently pegged by Mother Dearest would be fantastic.

You opened a new concept in my mind thanks for the help!!!!

 

[SyxoXart]

I see incest and milf and no female domination. Does this mean Ash's mom will be lovingly helping with their transition? Sissy gurl being gently pegged by Mother Dearest would be fantastic.

You opened a new concept in my mind thanks for the help

do you know how to use daz studio? you can make some great stuff on there pretty easily.

I've been doing daz for about a year now, and I'm sure you can do something great!
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No dear i dont anything about daz

 

[SyxoXart]

Okay, the game looks promising, I can see the inspiration in GGGB and if it's half as good as GGGB, it would have been worth it.
The only thing that made me feel werid, are the character designs, the bodies are not so bad, but the faces don't look good at all, Dev, if you can't draw realistic faces, you can make them with an aesthetic cartoon, or like anime, or in some other way.

Okay, the game looks promising, I can see the inspiration in GGGB and if it's half as good as GGGB, it would have been worth it.
The only thing that made me feel werid, are the character designs, the bodies are not so bad, but the faces don't look good at all, Dev, if you can't draw realistic faces, you can make them with an aesthetic cartoon, or like anime, or in some other way.
The game has potential, it is just a matter of making the characters more striking to attract more attention

The game has potential, it is just a matter of making the characters more striking to attract more attention

Yes sir you said it correct, but the problem is I'm a beginner in the world of art so it was tough for me to creat that you have seen in game but i promise you that in the next version, it will be fixed any how

 

[demidemon]

will do as you said, but when I will think of stealing

chloe's room in game

chloe's room concept art:

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will do? i thought you are already doing that?

 

[SyxoXart]

chloe's room

i thought you are already doing that?

For now, I'm not creating environment

 

[Tau_Iota]

thanks... at least someone is positive

I think it's interesting that you're using the Good Girl Gone Bad format. It wouldn't be my first choice, but the simplicity of the player understanding where Ash is at is good. I would try and fancy it up a bit, make it more you and your intended direction with your VN. Like as an example, if you plan multiple routes and one is for Ash to be less promiscuous you could change Good to Chaste, since the Bad in GGGB really meant that you could do illegal things like sell drugs and Good obviously meant you wouldn't/couldn't. Idk, I'm a sucker for good HUDs, idk if this would be considered a HUD but still. Love those. Make it something visually very appealing, as no matter what else is on the screen that's going to be there as well.

I do think that the artwork could do with a review, because... they're not great. I'm not trying to be mean, but in a visual novel... visuals are important. Shieldstronger is right that you can make beautiful people in Daz, but it can be time consuming and might be hard on your computer. If you're determined to make it drawn, then by all means! But I'd practice that a lot, because right now they're a bit off-putting.

All-in-all, I hope to see your project blow up! Too many people abandon their games after some time, which is a real shame. Don't take my words as insults, I say them with the intention for you to make your game as great as it can be! I'll include my own drawing as reference so you can make fun of me.

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[hyde8]

I don't know why so many users on this site bully new creators, even more so if they make LGBT content. Why comment when something is not your cup of tea?
Sure you tell that the artist is now super experienced but the foundations are def there so that'll def get way better with practice.
It's just a teaser so I can't give any helpful criticism except keep going and have fun this is a good start!

 

[Incest games fan]

Any mom-son content?

 

[demidemon]

I don't know why so many users on this site bully new creators, even more so if they make LGBT content. Why comment when something is not your cup of tea?
Sure you tell that the artist is now super experienced but the foundations are def there so that'll def get way better with practice.
It's just a teaser so I can't give any helpful criticism except keep going and have fun this is a good start!

pretty sure many users are positive on Secretary, Shattered and other good LGBT games
seems like most negative comments in this thread aren't shitting on the LGBT part but the arts
And the reason could be that since the game is still in early development, the devs can find a way to fix the art? find someone to work together? do 3D arts? or using pornstar photo for now until they find a better artist?

 

[SyxoXart]

I think it's interesting that you're using the Good Girl Gone Bad format. It wouldn't be my first choice, but the simplicity of the player understanding where Ash is at is good. I would try and fancy it up a bit, make it more you and your intended direction with your VN. Like as an example, if you plan multiple routes and one is for Ash to be less promiscuous you could change Good to Chaste, since the Bad in GGGB really meant that you could do illegal things like sell drugs and Good obviously meant you wouldn't/couldn't. Idk, I'm a sucker for good HUDs, idk if this would be considered a HUD but still. Love those. Make it something visually very appealing, as no matter what else is on the screen that's going to be there as well.

I do think that the artwork could do with a review, because... they're not great. I'm not trying to be mean, but in a visual novel... visuals are important. Shieldstronger is right that you can make beautiful people in Daz, but it can be time consuming and might be hard on your computer. If you're determined to make it drawn, then by all means! But I'd practice that a lot, because right now they're a bit off-putting.

All-in-all, I hope to see your project blow up! Too many people abandon their games after some time, which is a real shame. Don't take my words as insults, I say them with the intention for you to make your game as great as it can be! I'll include my own drawing as reference so you can make fun of me.

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I know sir, my art is not good at this because I'm just a learner, but i have decide to make them better in next update and I'll do it any how!

And for the story- i dont have enough example to processed on with, for that i have to hire the writer to write a good/erotic story for me, and I'm searching for a writer,
I will try to fix everything on the next update and thank you for writing, your words really pushed me to continue the game

 

[SyxoXart]

Any mom-son content?

Not in next update but in other update!!

 

[SyxoXart]

pretty sure many users are positive on Secretary, Shattered and other good LGBT games
seems like most negative comments in this thread aren't shitting on the LGBT part but the arts
And the reason could be that since the game is still in early development, the devs can find a way to fix the art? find someone to work together? do 3D arts? or using pornstar photo for now until they find a better artist?

Yes sir you said it correct i know that the art was not good, I'm just a beginner at art world but i will be going to fix them on next update anyhow

 

[luffydono]

Cool ! sissy theme game ! look promising , very few sissy game (my favorite genre) hope for the best

 

[Omega Deose]

a new sissy game? wel they get abandoned pretty fast

 

[Leumas9969]

Am I missing something here? Three branch question and one of them was the age check, one to deliver a basket for mother, and the third tell friend you met the neighbor. As soon as MC meets thug, kneels in alley the 'game' restarts

 

[Euclita]

This game is nice. I look foward for next update.

 

[LexiTV]

This version of the game has no real content at all. It's more like a tiny visual novel.
Why even release this? The background art is all stolen and the actual art is very mediocre. I have nothing against using "stolen" art even if you make money using Patreon. But this is actually a huge weakness because it makes your own characters look like doodles a 4 year old drew.
Sound/BGM? There is none!
Also my English as a non native speaker is bad, but even I can see the awful writing quality.
Story? Beyond ridiculous. The clothing you start with is just a joke. If a guy actually wears something like that he would get laughed at every corner. He hides his feminine side from his parents? As if... they would just need 1 look to see what is going on.

Currently I do not recommend this game at all and I also see no real potential here for a turnaround.

I hate giving such a negative review but I will predict this will get dropped or abandoned in another few months.

 

[MaskOfMirth]

I don't know why so many users on this site bully new creators, even more so if they make LGBT content. Why comment when something is not your cup of tea?
Sure you tell that the artist is now super experienced but the foundations are def there so that'll def get way better with practice.
It's just a teaser so I can't give any helpful criticism except keep going and have fun this is a good start!

Bullying LGBT creators...if you actually read most of the reviews then you might have noticed that most of the criticism for this game are about the art, and have nothing to do with LGBT. Your comment just seems like you're fishing.