VN Ren'Py Abandoned The Manifest: Shadows Over Manston [v2.2] [White Phantom Games]

[WantonWhimsy]

Interesting start with some unique flavor, but I thought the introduction was a) too long b) too bloody.
It was difficult to care about these unknown characters for so many pages, and the wounds they sustained were beyond deadly. I'd at least suggest a blurb saying who's who at the very beginning, instead of the cold open.

I like the cold open, but it does feel like the story is dragging a bit by the time you wake up at the hospital. I'm assuming it becomes relevant at some point, similar to finding out the dealer they were meeting was found in a nearby ditch.

 

[Papy.ion6984]

TY for this update

 

[myuhinny]

@Paprika

Just open the script up and delete out the word step and they become blood relatives

 

[Sinndallas]

This is pretty good. I like the intro a lot, felt like I was watching the first episode of a police drama or something. Keep it up, I'd give you a dollar if you had a way for me to do so. @WhitePhantom

 

[gestved]

found it interesting, will keep track

 

[annam]

The download took longer than the gameplay, nothing happens. Hopefully the next update will bring some of the good stuff.

 

[BigBabs69]

First time playing,game looks really good and has a lot of choices which i like in games.can't wait for the next update :extremelyhappy:

 

[WhitePhantom]

Has anybody else gotten the pool side scenes from the OP preview? If so, how? Any info is appreciated.

Sorry about those, they aren't in the game yet, next update will have the first pool scene.

Will fix the name in locker room for the next update

 

[Dars]

Looks really nice, keep the updates cioming

 

[myuhinny]

From the looks of it there is going to be multiple routes to go in the game.

@WhitePhantom

Both of the names there in the locker room were pretty hard to see.

 

[General F. Apper]

that was pretty good, discovered two unique paths which could intertwine. good luck on that though, might get complicated in the long run.

 

[gestved]

That's just the point... in America, most seniors are 18 by at least the latter half of the school year. Also, there are enough available credits left over during the senior year (I graduated with 3 extra credits) that nobody would be held back for failing a gym class - which is just about impossible anyway.

shouldn't have skipped leg day I guess

 

[Gomly1980]

shouldn't have skipped leg day I guess

 

[fulcrum]

on the technical site, you should investigate why the menu overlay for saving & loading lets the main menu shine through. looks like incorrect resizing (640x480 vs 800x600 or something like that)

 

[Soccergod2666]

So much potential.... and Mckenna's fine asf

 

[myuhinny]

Mckenna Is that the one that looked like she stuck her finger in the light socket?

 

[madmanO1]

the text were a bit hard to see. too dark at some points in the game

 

[WhitePhantom]

Mckenna Is that the one that looked like she stuck her finger in the light socket?

Yeah because I left the "Blow" setting on her hair up I just realised ^^
I'll re-render her scenes for the next update

 

[General F. Apper]

Yeah because I left the "Blow" setting on her hair up I just realised ^^
I'll re-render her scenes for the next update

S'alright, my only concern at the moment is do we have a chance of winning that bet regarding Amelia.

 

[WhitePhantom]

S'alright, my only concern at the moment is do we have a chance of winning that bet regarding Amelia.

Depends if you go out with them on Friday night