cold_arctus

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Lol, I can see it in the face but the chest and small butt I'd still have to say Briana. I wish I knew how to put a pic here.
Use "Upload a File" :biggrin: The image insert function is limited to specific sites, so you would need to download your picture first and use "Upload a File" ..
 
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Just played this for the first time. Overall, a great deal of content by 0.5 and high quality renders are certainly appreciated. The story also has an intriguing premise, though the dialogue kills it; women don't talk like this! I know this game isn't going for realism, but it sounds like the stuff 12-year-old virgins would write about.

Other than this major flaw, all of the characters are quite hot, though the MILFs steal the show (particularly the sexier version of Tracy from Dreams of Desire). Lots of fappable scenes so far, which makes me excited to follow this project. Another minor problem is the inability to use "Control" throughout scenes; sometimes I just want to skip the dialogue without skipping the sex scene. The fact that this game makes such great use of the Unity engine, however, kind of erases this flaw.
 

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women don't talk like this! I know this game isn't going for realism, but it sounds like the stuff 12-year-old virgins would write about.
Thank you for your feedback, and you generally kind words, I have to ask though, like we are aware that writing is our weakest point even though we made a lot of improvement, it is meant to appeal to a wider crowd, and not be too hard to read, when it comes to choice of words. People that not only has English as a primary language.


However I have to ask you, in this case how can you say that this is written by 12 year old virgins? I mean we're all people and we're definitely not virgins, we both have a lot of experience with women and no two women are exactly the same, what kind of writing do you expect? "As I approached her, the the moans started getting louder, love juice dripping out of her tunnel of love, her rose petals exposed with the sweetest fragrance... As I grabbed her shoulder she shivered in pleasure whispering, yamete kudasai, oneechan"?

Nah but seriously, I can recommend some other games that are more focused on the lovecraftian style of writing, text based games that are great but text based :)

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You definitely can't use the term "Lovecraftian" when speaking about sexual writing, but I take your gist...

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Thank you for your feedback, and you generally kind words, I have to ask though, like we are aware that writing is our weakest point even though we made a lot of improvement, it is meant to appeal to a wider crowd, and not be too hard to read, when it comes to choice of words. People that not only has English as a primary language.


However I have to ask you, in this case how can you say that this is written by 12 year old virgins? I mean we're all people and we're definitely not virgins, we both have a lot of experience with women and no two women are exactly the same, what kind of writing do you expect? "As I approached her, the the moans started getting louder, love juice dripping out of her tunnel of love, her rose petals exposed with the sweetest fragrance... As I grabbed her shoulder she shivered in pleasure whispering, yamete kudasai, oneechan"?

Nah but seriously, I can recommend some other games that are more focused on the lovecraftian style of writing, text based games that are great but text based :)

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HAHA you nailed it
 

cold_arctus

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yamete kudasai, oneechan
jeez, pls, stop before it start to spread and people come after you in full-weeb-mode, senpai! x'D:eek:penedeyewink:

in this case how can you say that this is written by 12 year old virgins?
Don't take it literal ... 12 year old even don't know the difference between clitoris, urethra and g-point. But I have to agree with RideTheLightnin. The writing for the threesome scene was a bit over the top, or "over 9000!", but humorous! In German we have the expression "Fremdschämen", so I got a moment of fremdschämen.

Fremdschämen:
 

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Are you sure you can't? XD
Heh, you can definitely use the imagery, but there's not much "sexy" about the dark ones' language skills.
 
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Thank you for your feedback, and you generally kind words, I have to ask though, like we are aware that writing is our weakest point even though we made a lot of improvement, it is meant to appeal to a wider crowd, and not be too hard to read, when it comes to choice of words. People that not only has English as a primary language.


However I have to ask you, in this case how can you say that this is written by 12 year old virgins? I mean we're all people and we're definitely not virgins, we both have a lot of experience with women and no two women are exactly the same, what kind of writing do you expect? "As I approached her, the the moans started getting louder, love juice dripping out of her tunnel of love, her rose petals exposed with the sweetest fragrance... As I grabbed her shoulder she shivered in pleasure whispering, yamete kudasai, oneechan"?

Nah but seriously, I can recommend some other games that are more focused on the lovecraftian style of writing, text based games that are great but text based :)

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I didn't say it was written by virgins, just that it sounds like it. By that statement, I meant that the dialogue demonstrates the naive attitudes that youths have about women, what they picture a woman would say, what they want a woman to say.

This game, however, is clearly meant for people over 18. Just because it's porn, doesn't mean it has to reflect the attitudes of children. I'm not saying that the dialogue needs to be elegantly written; however, it needs to be realistic within the premise you've created or else you lose much of your immersion. Keep in mind that you are writing an actual story about time travel, not just creating your generic porn scenario. If you want your game to stand out, I would work on the dialogue. That's all I'm saying.
 

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I didn't say it was written by virgins, just that it sounds like it. By that statement, I meant that the dialogue demonstrates the naive attitudes that youths have about women, what they picture a woman would say, what they want a woman to say.

This game, however, is clearly meant for people over 18. Just because it's porn, doesn't mean it has to reflect the attitudes of children. I'm not saying that the dialogue needs to be elegantly written; however, it needs to be realistic within the premise you've created or else you lose much of your immersion. Keep in mind that you are writing an actual story about time travel, not just creating your generic porn scenario. If you want your game to stand out, I would work on the dialogue. That's all I'm saying.
The improvements on dialogue is a fair assessment and we have mentioned this do many times that is our weak point, we can't get a writer right now because doubtfi ones that are aligned and easy work with are not growing on trees :)

And regarding what some women say, some of this dialogue is authentic and some not, maybe it's different between the regular game and the patch

I would love to hand over my part of the writing so I can just code etc :p
 
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any look alike porn star or persons View attachment 175424 ?
We have a running competition about this on discord for patrons, about finding a doppelganger for Nika, last month was Juliana, so far there are some good contributions :) You can win either the platinum version of next game release or a custom render of your choice that you decide what you want in, with your favorite characters doing whatever you want ;). :p
 
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We have a running competition about this on discord for patrons, about finding a doppelganger for Nika, last month was Juliana, so far there are some good contributions :) You can win either the platinum version of next game release or a custom render of your choice that you decide what you want in, with your favorite characters doing whatever you want ;). :p
wow, so who won Julianas comp?
 
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