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Finally got a chance to play all the way through this one. The script is definitely better than it was, so good job on that. However, it still could use some improvement to make things a bit clearer. Here are a few of the things that I found that could be improved for clarity.

Noora never mentioned that her father was in jail, just that he left. The MC was the first one to mention that he was in jail, so that didn't make much sense to me since the MC didn't know anything about her father.

When Noora is in the restroom at the cafe she mentions that she has cystitis. I had to look that word up, because I have never heard it before, and English is my native language. It would have been better to say bladder infection or urinary-tract-infection instead, so the player knows what the dev means. Those are the more common terms for that condition.

During all the conversations with Noora it is never mentioned that the MC has ever even met her mother, let alone that he knows her very well. So, when she just jumps into bed with him it was very confusing. It might be better to mention earlier in the story that they already know each other.

It appears from the character models used that the MC and his father are both white, so giving them Japanese names seems a bit strange. That one isn't really a big deal, just seems a little strange.


Those are the things that jumped out to me the most. Overall, this one is looking pretty good. The renders look really good and the story seems interesting. I'm looking forward to the next update.
Alex5280 - Thank you for your feedback. I just joined his team within the past week and this will help me to understand how others are seeing the game and how I may help to improve the English within the script for the developer.
 
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RoadWulf

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Hello RoadWulf. I just recently joined this writer's team and would like to help him better his script. Would you please give me some ideas about areas of the script that you feel could be improved so I may review them and see how I can improve the script in the future. We thank you for the comment and look forward to improving this game.
When I get time I'll go through the script and give you ideas as to how I would reword things. With the holiday, give me a few days.
 

WuzzyFuzzy

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Code:
    if ep1_shay_help_p == "no":
        scene ep1_noora_keira12
        $ renpy.music.queue('sounds/sfx/ep1/ringtone.ogg', channel='sfx_loop', loop=True, tight=True)
        $ renpy.music.set_volume(0.2, channel='sfx_loop')
        "PHONE IS RINGING" (multiple=2)
        noora "No, you relax... {w}...or pick up your phone..." (multiple=2)
        stop music fadeout 3
        scene ep1_noora_keira11
        noora "I'll make the coffee, then we'll talk."
        mc "Okay, I'm waiting."
        play music "sounds/music/ep1/escaforever.ogg" fadein 20
        $ renpy.music.set_volume(0.2, channel='music')
        scene ep1_noora_keira13
        mc "Hm..."
        stop sfx_loop
If one is taking this route the phone starts ringing and never stops. Adding "stop sfx_loop" takes care of the problem.
 

Sh0gvn

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New Game & New Year! - Status Update #9

It really seems incredible when we think about where we have come. A full year ago, we published a week-long project for
your enjoyment. We got good and bad reviews but now, here we are, feeling stronger and knowing it is impossible to give up!



As we said before;
Yes, the UNEXPECTED we originally published wasn't PERFECT and that original release will never be. However, we have listened to your comments and have begun reworking UNEXPECTED from the beginning and have started releasing the reworked version. We are working to make it the best we can with improved story, graphics, and more. We look forward to you comments about the first part of the reworked UNEXPECTED as we strive to make it the best we can. Recent reviews have indicated that we are getting better and we hope that you will agree and we hope that you will realize this in future updates.
We want to say somethings about the future of UNEXPECTED;

Our first project, UNEXPECTED, is special and very precious for us, and it will stay like that. We want to tell you the exact story. We hope that you will continue to support us as we work hard to complete this project properly. Over the next year, we hope to have a series of new updates to the reworked version of our first project to be the best possible final version. And we're looking forward to carry out much better projects as we improve ourselves in time!



We had a plan that we talked about before (when we had less followers) but haven't been actualized. A new game... in a universe we created in UNEXPECTED. We've thought about this several times, but couldn't decide. We weren't sure we could succeed it. We went through it many times, we made plans. We evaluated every possible positive and negative cases. And we saw this: This is what we are, we want that. This is our job.

- What more can we do? Aren't we happy?
We are happy as a clam!
- So then, why don't we make it?! Are we frightened, can't we make it?
Yes we'll make it and no, we're not frightened and WE WILL MAKE IT!
Then it's time to officially announce it to you too!

And don't even worry. We will advance our projects in a planned and programmed manner. UNEXPECTED will not be affected by this.

New Game: PERSEVERANCE


The story of a young girl in the same universe as UNEXPECTED, where you play the main character as a woman...



Our young girl, who left the dormitory when she turned 18, regains her freedom and embarks on experiencing what the world is like. Will she be able to face up to difficulties she encounters within this period and preserve her determination? Will she be able to cope with corruption? Or will she lose herself there and turn into a corrupted person?

The estimated major update intervals for our UNEXPECTED and PERSEVERANCE games will be as follows.
UNEXPECTED: 60-75 days.
PERSEVERANCE: 30-40 days.
These are estimated intervals for the future updates. You know there is an epidemic in the world that may may cause an update to be delayed. But we will work hard to ensure that future updates will be released on this schedule. And I can't finish without mentioning that we redesigning the UI in our games. We will also adapt the design we worked on for the new PERSEVERANCE game for UNEXPECTED. And we will put to use a single design.



We do not plan to create a new patreon page for PERSEVERANCE. We will continue from here. And everyone who supports us will benefit from both contents!

Now, as for the UNEXPECTED update status, I need to start from here;

UNEXPECTED Xmas Edition would also be an update to be included in the game in the future. Then we decided that we will include these Xmas Edition scenes and animations in the original version after a few updates. So that we will quickly release one of the minor updates. Let's spend a week or two for the next update instead of Xmas Edition. Thus, we can publish the new episode faster. Since we're new developers and don't have a huge audience, we decided that our main focus needs to be the original version. This decision may upset many of you but don't worry. We are not deleting the scenes, we will add them to the original version and publish these hot scenes with you in the original version of our game. We will not make any changes in its content and make sure the storyline doesn't spoil. It will be the best for everyone, trust us!

In the status update of next week, we will publish with you the progress we have made for the second version. Before I forget, we will post at least one update status per month for our new game, PERSEVERANCE. For UNEXPECTED, we'll be posting about four status update up to the time of publication.



And... Lastly, dear followers;

A new year... A new path... A new start... and a preparation for the next great year!

We hope you have a much better year than this year. Spend your time with your loved ones next to you and enjoy it!
Leave the past year of your life filled with worry behind and start the new year with happiness, joy, and smiles. Remember, each new year brings new challenges and obstacles in life. We wish you courage, hope, and faith to overcome anything you may encounter and much happiness in this new year like hot chocolates, cinnamon cookies, the smell of earth after the rain... and for many happy and peaceful years to come! ^^

We are very thankful to all of you for making this last year great! Hope to see you again in 2022 ^^
 

ShiroOkami2

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Renders are great, for fans of the lip gloss, these chars are rocking.....tho my guy, you have to separate character thought from actual convo distinctively. atm it is to similar and once i get into reading it is hard to separate the 2
 

ShiroOkami2

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UNEXPECTED - Can really say that again .Fankie thro me for a loop and other UNEXPECTED shit turned me off...pussy like mc (maybe if there was hope of improvement) is a no for me. from here this vn got nothing better than future ntr going for it such a waste
 

billa86

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Sep 14, 2021
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so this game has some great animations and models and would be amazing but it needs to get someone to get that translation down pat because the story is incomprehensible.
other than that awesome job
 

Lovv99

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so this game has some great animations and models and would be amazing but it needs to get someone to get that translation down pat because the story is incomprehensible.
other than that awesome job
Im sorry, do you also have low fps during the animations?
 

Bedlamh

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I noticed that an incest patch is planned. Does anyone know if this means this is one of the "originally supposed to be incest" AVN's or if it's literally just a completely optional not story focused type of incest? Thanks for answering!
 

Belzeebub$

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UNEXPECTED [v1.0.1] Walkthrough Mod
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Note: The Mod can help you sometimes, but make your own choices and see the amazing story that the Dev's gave us.

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Please take a note and please do the modifications needed. If you do not select the underlined options in coffeeshop, the option to step in will not be available. Thanks for the mod.
 

PandaSuky

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So for i to get the "step in" option i had to drink the gorilla. But does that changes something later if i step in? did i lose another content?
 

Belzeebub$

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So for i to get the "step in" option i had to drink the gorilla. But does that changes something later if i step in? did i lose another content?
No, but you will miss content later where there is a "check on her" with noore if you do not choose aroused drink. I think JL has to do something about the script where we will get all contents irrespective of what drink we select.
 
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