VN Ren'Py WVM [S2 Ch. 1 Ep. 13 B3] [Braindrop]

[ProofreadingRUS]

Hmm, I'm actually a little conflicted on this update in terms of the plot. Everything seemed too neat and easy, Jaime was way too enthusiastic to just jump straight into a poly relationship. Especially since the MC had the option to cheat on her repeatedly, and even if he did there's basically no punishment for it. Now, I know it's a porn game and I'm probably thinking too hard about it, and it can be frustrating to have games where it seems like it encourages you to go after many girls and then not have a harem end available.

But that said, it still bothers me that Jaime talks about how the MC is "such a good guy" when in some runs, he's been cheating on her at every opportunity. I almost think you should be given the opportunity to confess, not just about Shauna but also about the others too.

It's like one of those cheesy romantic stories.
I rather share him then lose him deals.
She poored her heart out even before he popped her cherry.
Which would have been more romantic in a more romantic atmosphere.
Now she knows what's she's in for the next time that happens.
She better by some crotches the next time. Better safe then sorry.
This turned out to be a better Harem path then I thought with the secresy ot of the way.
Now he's free to choose from as many candidates as he wants.
Looks like the whole cheerleading squad and just about anyone he comes across.
I just hope that Charles stops trying to mess up his life with all that useless bribery.
He's up to something. Like he wants to have the mc under his control but doesn't know how.
Luckily I avoided his gifts. That's just not the way to build a Harem.
I hope there is always a way to avoid that guy. He may prove to be too dangerous in the end. He's like a walking scandal waiting to happen.

 

[BigLurker]

I am just here to drop a 10/10.

The girls man, the girls. If this game keeps the feeling good show on, it will be one of my favorite and quality games I played. Most games try too hard to be creative and come up with a depressing story. Keep it up!

 

[Gwinb777]

I just don't trust that Charles at all I was thinking perhaps he does it to have a bit of leverage over the MC if there is ever a time that he needs to use it against us the MC, especially with the Coach Harper situation.

Nope, that was just too obviously a setup, and honestly the girl wasn't even close to my type anyway. Charles needs to do his homework better.

I don't trust him either, I'm just curious about what is gonna happen; I'll have no problems to reload that save and choose differently.

 

[negative1]

Holy shit this game has a great open relationship twist?! Start of next month you are getting another patreon! The relationship the MC and Jasmine have hits very close for me and I love it! The only difference is I have never cheated on my wife, we started out deciding since she likes girls too so we should share them, THEN we started opening our relationship to other women.

Not going to lie I was ignoring most of the plot and not playing all that serious since I figured this shit was all going to spin out of control and I would dump the game when that started to happen. Then you hit me with that twist of her wanting to share you with other women, and suddenly not only was I pulled into the game I now gave a shit about the plot!

 

[UnoriginalUserName]

we started out deciding since she likes girls too so we should share them, THEN we started opening our relationship to other women.

 

[Pitrik]

Another wonderful update, more and more happy to have become a patron!


Also If Jamie decided that she is ok that the mc can bang other girls I decided to don't do that because my main save will be always Her + Shauna ( and maybe the adoptive mom if she will be an option)

For the rest of girls I have the harem save

 

[rockthehell]

I love the twist with Jamie in this one. Most of VN like "Where The Heart", "Where it all began" etc, make you either choose one girl and miss more then 50% of content in new updates, or go for all girls and fill like cheating asshole. I love that this one is different.

 

[B-52reloaded]

Is there a walkthrough or is one intended to be?

 

[Rycharde's Realm]

I just started your game yestereve and it looks great. Love the MC's GF's freckles and her quirky grins. His best friend is one sharp woman. Did not pick up she was a transwoman till she talked about her transitioning.

 

[ProofreadingRUS]

I am seeing this sign in some games now.
Like they are trying to say good bye to DMD in some way.
Eveybody is going to miss that game. Not a good move on the devs part to end it.
I hope he reconsiders before it's too late. One of the best games ever.
If you dont think so maybe youu should play it.

 

[ProofreadingRUS]

Is there a walkthrough or is one intended to be?

There should be one in later versions.
Cause there is no way of knowing the repercussion of his decicions without it.
Unless you want to go through all that and find out.

 

[gh0stmaster]

Really one of best games. Congratulation for creator.

 

[UnoriginalUserName]

I am seeing this sign in some games now.
Like they are trying to say good bye to DMD in some way.
Eveybody is going to miss that game. Not a good move on the devs part to end it.
I hope he reconsiders before it's too late. One of the best games ever.

I was actually wondering why she suddenly did the pose, but I guess it makes sense if it's an homage, especially since it's in the park.

As for DmD ending, at this point the MC has done basically everything short of a bukkake train scene with Fivehead (D), so all that's really left if for the yandere loli-barista to stab everyone.

Besides, MrDots probably wants to focus on Melody and wrap that up as well.

 

[r4diance]

i hope this game sees longevity, i want story to go far and far, and to see basketball team rise also, not just conquer all girls

 

[ProofreadingRUS]

Everything about that game is great.
But I'm really starting to think he should fire the writer.
There are some or a lot like these where I don't understand what he's saying.
If you need someone who can look over the script before release let me know.
I'm already doing it for 2 people. It makes the game more enjoyable.
I'll be more then glad to help.

 

[I'm Not Thea Lundgren!]

Everything about that game is great.
But I'm really starting to think he should fire the writer.
There are some or a lot like these where I don't understand what he's saying.
If you need someone who can look over the script before release let me know.
I'm already doing it for 2 people. It makes the game more enjoyable.
I'll be more then glad to help.

So fire himself? It's a one-man show! He does everything himself.

BTW That sentence makes perfect sense in that context.

 

[thestickman]

Nerfed the dick?
Are you talking about Eve or the mc.
That would be a tragic mistake to mess around with the mcs assets.

I meant the mc; I play with Shauna as a female, so I don't know what any of that looks like. (By Eve I assume you mean Shauna. Eve is the Summertime Saga (potential) trans.)
The mc's dick became smaller sometime during day 2. It's still ginormous, but it's not as funny as it was in the beginning.

Everything about that game is great.
But I'm really starting to think he should fire the writer.
There are some or a lot like these where I don't understand what he's saying.
If you need someone who can look over the script before release let me know.
I'm already doing it for 2 people. It makes the game more enjoyable.
I'll be more then glad to help.

That line makes perfect sense. It could be written a bit better, but it's fine. She says that it felt like the mc was gone for a week, and he's replying that "you mean it felt like time passed slowly when I was not here" way.

 

[ProofreadingRUS]

I was actually wondering why she suddenly did the pose, but I guess it makes sense if it's an homage, especially since it's in the park.

As for DmD ending, at this point the MC has done basically everything short of a bukkake train scene with Fivehead (D), so all that's really left if for the yandere loli-barista to stab everyone.

Besides, MrDots probably wants to focus on Melody and wrap that up as well.

Melody?
I thought that game was over with.
There are no more keys left in that mini piano on the top right corner.
There is room for improvement in both games but it is what it is.
No convincing the man to take better action.
I thought there was a mention of him working on a new game.
Hope it doesn't dissappoint if he plans to make it a bit more tamed then DMD and Melody.

 

[ProofreadingRUS]

So fire himself? It's a one-man show! He does everything himself.

BTW That sentence makes perfect sense in that context.

Instead of b..... you should help out or dont.
Also it figures you would say that...ha ha

 

[Braindrop]

Everything about that game is great.
But I'm really starting to think he should fire the writer.
There are some or a lot like these where I don't understand what he's saying.
If you need someone who can look over the script before release let me know.
I'm already doing it for 2 people. It makes the game more enjoyable.
I'll be more then glad to help.

I definitely could have structured that a bit better, but it still reads fine to me.
How does one exactly fire themselves?
As for proofreaders, that's not exactly something I can have with my update schedule sadly. I work pretty much non stop and cram as much in as I can in my weekly releases. I don't have the time to package it all up and send it to someone to read through.
Every bit of day 3 was done by me in 28 days, the posing, rendering, script, everything. So a few poorly structured sentences hopefully gets a pass from most players.