VN Ren'Py Unraveling August [v0.3.04] [AugustEsoterica]

[Deleted member 2755092]

Not getting the virus popup it just won't extract, both 7zip and unrar give similar error codes.

Install the latest version of winrar. I used to have errors during the extractions last year. It was down to winrar being too old.
I've used pixeldrain for the download as well, in case one of the host has a corrupted file, which is always a possibility as well

 

[SpyderArachnid]

I don't think she is a slut. A deviant, yes, but not a slut. I believe the word slut in this case, would have to be understood as "I'm your slut", not as a literal slut fucking more kilometers of dicks than a porn star. Personally, I don't mind a girl being deviant, as long as it's with the MC. A slut however, that's a different story.

Fair enough. That's not exactly how I meant him to come across, but it's probably on my writing skill more than anything. As for Sam being a slut, I agree that's not always an attractive quality, but I also tried to make it clear at the end of the breakfast scene she's pretty much only a slut for the MC since she's been crushing on (see: obsessed with) him for years. I figure it's important to clarify that.

Unrealistic? Sure, but I reckon you're right and most people don't want to play a game where one of the main girls has gotten around with every pole in town before the MC arrives. There's supposed to be a bit of wish fulfillment going on in these types of games, so with that in mind, Sam is as pure as the driven snow. Probably just spends a lot of time on the internet or something.

I get that, and I don't blame the writing, I think it's just more a me thing. Having played way too many of these VNs, I just started seeing the same thing I see in almost all these games. With her saying she is a slut, the way she acts in the game, and you saying she is a sexual deviant, just started throwing up a lot of red flags from previous bad experiences with VNs lol.

It just all felt too fast personally. It's been 10 years, with no contact. 10 years. Not a peep from him, and she just throws herself at him so fast. Like you said, unrealistic. She is what? 18? Last time she saw him was when she was 8 years old. And they've had no contact since then for 10 years. It would be like her seeing a slightly familiar stranger after all this time.

EDIT: Yet she is so fast to just jump on him and do the things she did after all that. I mean, if I personally saw that, I'd be out of there lol. That's crazy! A girl you knew when she was 8, haven't seen or talked to her since, is now 18, having you watch her in a bath touching herself, making out with you, stripping naked, and then wanting to jerk you off into her sleeping sister's mouth? Just whoa! roll it back there psycho. Sorry it is just too much for me.

Maybe I'm just old and I don't get these games anymore lol. It's nothing you did wrong like I said, it's just me is all.

EDIT: Forgot to spoiler, my bad.

 

[Deleted member 2755092]

Not getting the virus popup it just won't extract, both 7zip and unrar give similar error codes. View attachment 2548339

That is odd indeed. Which site did you use for the download? Did you try downloading it again? And have you tried updating winrar yet? I'll try the download site you used to check the integrity of the file, I've got nothing better to do today anyway

 

[AugustEsoterica]

In general, I have nothing against a virgin whore for mc. But the strangest last scene, i.e. a few minutes ago mc jokes that he's not a panty sniffing pervert and then the weirdest scene i've ever seen happens when he cums on a sleeping girl who seems to be sleeping and awake at the same time.

Wait, people actually choose to take advantage of poor, innocent Lily...? You sick bastards!

 

[Deleted member 2755092]

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[Deleted member 2755092]

Wait, people actually choose to take advantage of poor, innocent Lily...? You sick bastards!

Dear sir,

are you just discovering F95?

 

[SumTingWong0420]

Can we get a Highly compressed Android port pretty please bc

 

[bruce555]

There is really no choice to not be a pervert. It's all his inner thoughts. I mean, from the beginning he is already gawking at Sam constantly and flirting with her, and then talks about needing to get a hotel so he isn't walking around with a boner nonstop because he lives with girls. And the whole bathroom scene. He hasn't seen this girl for over 10 years, but is perfectly fine walking into her bathroom and staring at her taking a bath while she touches herself.

That is what I meant by the forced stuff though, how you're forced to make out with Sam. But I didn't see anything about the MC trying to get her to stop. From what I saw, he goes all in on it. Even his thoughts are all for it.

And Sam being a sexual deviant is not a good thing for most players. From what I've seen on these forums, most players don't want to be with a slut (Sam says she is a slut, and you are saying she is a sexual deviant). For me personally, that just not the kind of girl I want to be with (or have anything to do with). And since she is forced on you, it's just not going to be for me.

The game is fine otherwise, just not something I personally am fond of. Doesn't mean you need to change anything, as I'm sure there are plenty of others who enjoy what you've done here. It's just those little things that make the game not enjoyable for me personally is all. But yeah, as you said, can't please everyone lol.

I think like you too. And thanks for all your comments... they are precious and help a lot to understand if a game is right for me. And in this case it's not for me! Thanks!

 

[Fazed]

From what I've seen on these forums, most players don't want to be with a slut (Sam says she is a slut, and you are saying she is a sexual deviant).

Well, not if she is "for the streets"...but I am totally fine with having a personal slut. I don't disagree that it happened a bit too quickly and it got crazy in the end but sometimes that's just how "porn games" are.

Still I am looking forward to the explanation on this weird attachment both of the girls have to the MC. I don't know if anything would make sense other than they are actually obsessive but I've learned that I have to turn my brain off at least a little bit for some of these stories.

 

[Jethro Hatfield]

This is a good start.

I like the characters, though I feel it could have used with a bit of a slower burn. The story concept is interesting, and I find myself curiously wanting more. (In fact I even clicked the "I want more" option on the end screen.)

Overall as far as the renders go, I am a bit old school in my preferences. I think it could do without having the skewed camera angles. I found myself tilting my head to the side in an effort to straighten the image out. If you do decide to keep the angled shots like this, might I recommend toning it down a bit. I feel like it was a pretty heavy distraction that detracted from the story. So maybe not the 45 degree angle, maybe try a 25 degree tilt or something like that.

As far as the size goes, with the renders being in 4K (My monitor can't display at that level ) I would recommend only keeping the image files that are necessary for the game to run in the package. When I unzipped the archive I found a whole group of images that never appeared in the story. I am unsure if this is part of that scene you've decided to nix or not, but leaving the images in like that just bloated the download a bit. And it would certainly be something to keep in mind as you continue your development process.

Otherwise I think this a wonderful start. And I am excited to see how this continues! Keep up the good work.

 

[Bucketbot89]

Is this forced harem or are there going to be solo routes?

Spoiler: Also, is this Aerith dressed as a schoolgirl?

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[IMNC]

game won't save for some reason.

 

[justaguy44]

Ooh, freckles!

I'm sold.

Check my tag line.

 

[justaguy44]

Because not everyone is into fucking their own families I think.

Well, that's just dumb. Incest is best, 'nuff said.

 

[kros94]

Well, that's just dumb. Incest is best, 'nuff said.

amen

 

[kros94]

This is a good start.

I like the characters, though I feel it could have used with a bit of a slower burn. The story concept is interesting, and I find myself curiously wanting more. (In fact I even clicked the "I want more" option on the end screen.)

Overall as far as the renders go, I am a bit old school in my preferences. I think it could do without having the skewed camera angles. I found myself tilting my head to the side in an effort to straighten the image out. If you do decide to keep the angled shots like this, might I recommend toning it down a bit. I feel like it was a pretty heavy distraction that detracted from the story. So maybe not the 45 degree angle, maybe try a 25 degree tilt or something like that.

As far as the size goes, with the renders being in 4K (My monitor can't display at that level ) I would recommend only keeping the image files that are necessary for the game to run in the package. When I unzipped the archive I found a whole group of images that never appeared in the story. I am unsure if this is part of that scene you've decided to nix or not, but leaving the images in like that just bloated the download a bit. And it would certainly be something to keep in mind as you continue your development process.

Otherwise I think this a wonderful start. And I am excited to see how this continues! Keep up the good work.

it probably mean something to be approved by dev who made harem game full of raped love interests (MCs sisters) by father...

 

[TiffanyMonroe]

FYI, actually there is a real sex scene in the real world in eternum if you had played version 0.5

 

[TiffanyMonroe]

I don't think she is a slut. A deviant, yes, but not a slut. I believe the word slut in this case, would have to be understood as "I'm your slut", not as a literal slut fucking more kilometers of dicks than a porn star. Personally, I don't mind a girl being deviant, as long as it's with the MC. A slut however, that's a different story.

I agree only the mc should be a slut.

 

[AugustEsoterica]

the lame overused music in the scene. Serious I'm tempted to find it in the game files and replace the music with something else....actually that's a good idea. lol.

The woes of using copyright free music. I try, but effort can only take one so far...

Hell, I've spent so many hours listening to the most generic trash on the internet, I myself am tempted to just write [insert emotional/sexy/energetic/whatever music of choice here] and get on with it half the time.

 

[Fazed]

The woes of using copyright free music. I try, but effort can only take one so far...

Hell, I've spent so many hours listening to the most generic trash on the internet, I myself am tempted to just write [insert emotional music of choice here] and get on with it half the time.

There is a huge space in my heart for well done audio. At times I Honestly wish I cared less about it. It's like 1/3 of the experience for me.