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My guess would be that means either no "violent rape," which could mean sleeping pills, blackmail, etc, or (more likely for this game, I'd say) "only rape-roleplay."
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This is true. I recently heard that it is considered amateurish to use bold and italics to add tone to character dialogue. My lengthy rebuttal amounted to mostly, "the hell with that! Come on, read a comic book!" At any rate, my suggestions I'm preparing add a lot of commas. Like, a whole lot. You may want to consider personal style choice when you see my notes. The only things I would press on are:Beware of commas. Even when technically grammatically correct, heavy use of commas leads to stunted and awkward text. I attempt to avoid them except when absolutely necessary to create a deliberate pause or prevent ambiguity. I may not always succeed.
I'd far rather write something that's pleasing to read than something that's technically correct.
1. Cases of personal address, regardless of form, "Hello, Jane. Yes, mom. Sure, hon."
2. Joining complete sentences with a conjunction, "I will do that, and I will do this."
3. Lists of three or more. People often forget the last comma before the "and," but I feel it's important.
After that, clarity is king.
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Dear DEV Love the game so far But when david is thinking it says Ayleen name insted its anoying just thought id let you now so you can fix it for next update thank you in advance
I think I might love you. If only the other devs had the same way of thinking, we wouldn't end up with so many good games being left abandoned...
By the way, this game's great! I can see a huge potential for its future, definitely keeping an eye on this. Bravo!
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When David is imagining what it might be like to dom Nina, and he imagines an even bigger penis than he already has, the dialogue made me laugh.
Nina: I think I need to feel reeeeally sorry.
David: Don't worry, you will.
:: giant penis comes into view ::
Nina: ... oh, shit.
Personally, I don't take issue with the ridiculous penis's in these games, but I do think it would be hilarious to spend an entire two or three updates building a relationship with a girl, then have her see one of these Bigdick McGiantcocks pop out, and she just screams bloody murder, slaps and kicks wildly, runs out of the house naked, and you never see her character again. Just imagine all the B&M from her fans, ha ha ha ha! I might be mean sometimes...
Nina: I think I need to feel reeeeally sorry.
David: Don't worry, you will.
:: giant penis comes into view ::
Nina: ... oh, shit.
Personally, I don't take issue with the ridiculous penis's in these games, but I do think it would be hilarious to spend an entire two or three updates building a relationship with a girl, then have her see one of these Bigdick McGiantcocks pop out, and she just screams bloody murder, slaps and kicks wildly, runs out of the house naked, and you never see her character again. Just imagine all the B&M from her fans, ha ha ha ha! I might be mean sometimes...
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Yea the game is alright and the charachters are those that i not seen before, but jezus can people stop using those rocket dicks...
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I love we get to cum on Ayleen.
Oh, I swear (What he means)
Oh, I swear (What he means)
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Both work for me, but it has to be one or the other, not waffling between them. Being loving to some characters and abusive to others feels worse to me than being abusive to everyone. I have no idea why. In Parental Love, the lying and going behind Emily's back actually bothered me more than the other questionable stuff. On the other hand, Raptus seems interesting. And there's my previous post on this thread.
Maybe I just like consistency?
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I totally agree, especially with ... "household" ... games. There's SO much spy cameras, sleeping pills, blackmail, sometimes in both directions! Now, if one girl was like Nina, and wanted that, but another one wanted to get spoiled or reverse the roles, than I'm cool with giving each person what they want. Like you say, though, consent all around.
And also ...
THANK you, for that.
I hate it when no one makes the obvious joke. I feel like Roger Rabbit trying not scream "TWO BITS!"
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Another horse cock game.... Mc looks he is about 35-40 years old... Aunt can't be more an round 20... So he have a lot work to do....
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i am surprised. this is so far a GREAT game. not one i would have set in my tags, but i am so glad i found it. however, thoughts, like others before have stated, beware Patreon with this content. i can't suggest who else to make $ with but look! also please make Ninas breasts bigger, maybe a full 'B' cup and her hips a little wider, so she is NOT so child like. she is cute but it would be safer to have her a little more 'womanly'... keep going with this, it is a nice change from other 'games' out there. Good Work.
People saying Ayleen looks 20 is another example of perception differences. I paid particular attention to her face in the update and she looks early to mid 30s to me. As experience has shown that you can't so easily judge a person's real age based on appearance it doesn't at all stretch belief that she could be closer to 40 than 30.
