VN Ren'Py Abandoned 53x – Homecoming [v0.2.8.1] [Agent 53X]

[Deleted member #2743735]

MC is hilarious, someone gives him a hug: whooosh!..sorry , my dick again tore through my pants. Common' man, show some self control.
Models are great, visuals pretty decent, but writing is way too "chopped" ( rushing from one scene to another) and stiff. This seems like one of those soon-to-be-Abandoned, if patreon numbers doesn't take off. And there are way too many similar VNs for that to happen at this point: you either need really good renders or interesting story/writing ( or rarely, both).

LOL well since I am not a real writer and if I am honest my renders are a bit plain I have a feeling the Patreon numbers will never take off. The Patreon numbers are not why I spent the last year learning Daz3d or Ren Py coding it was to learn something new and to get a story out of my head. I am glad you like the models, Daz3d has some very good content.

Thank you for your honesty and I hope I get better at writing, not for Patreon but for the story I want to tell.

 

[Deleted member #2743735]

Hm, this is actually solid writing. I like clever and street wise MC.

He is 19year old.
At my 19 i had my dick up just by touching a girl , so it was up 60% of the day , wheres the problem ? and if we go into kissing mode it was gasping for air or break the hole in pants, whats more, every girl loved it.
Pleasant memories all together. So , all good, let the thing live


P.S
The way MC handled Sara in night talk about future of work and family handling is really , really good! Asserting dominance as man of the house she want's him to be with intelligent planing. It ticked me right off. Nicely done

knight to queen's bishop 3

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[Deleted member #2743735]

When I saw the download size, I thought it would be a few minutes in length...I was happily surprised at how much content there is, and how good it is. Two scenes stuck out as a awkward, with the amount of dialog there was with a single static image: In the hospital with the nurse checking out the MC during the sponge bath, and the second is when he opens the box of his father's stuff.

I was also happily surprised that despite all of the female characters' comments about the MC's endowment, that he isn't suffering from elephantiasis in his nether regions.

Looking forward to more!

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[Deleted member #2743735]

Well, so far not too bad. Story seems pretty solid, CG is pretty good. Girls are pretty too. A nice no grind VN or KN.
Some Engrish needs fixing up.
I just had to stop at this one and have to post it, can't help it

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[Deleted member #2743735]

So when does the fairy that lets you see through clothes and requires sex energy show up?

Wait, don't tell all my secrets...

 

[Deleted member #2743735]

mac?

I am new to this DEV thing. I took a year to learn Daz3d and what little I can do in Ren Py. I only have a Windows computer which means I do not have a Mac/Linux so I would not really know how to test or support it. I have gotten some grief for not fully testing what I have released, which I had thought I did (did I mention I am new at this LOL). WOW there are a lot of I’s in this, but it is just me by myself.

I do not know if making the Mac or Linux version is as easy as just saving down like the Windows version, but I will ask some questions and try a test. Please understand I would not be able to support anything other than Windows but let me look into it and maybe...

 

[DanThaMan]

Thanks for your comment, I am glad you have enjoyed it.

You should think about using multi-quotes dude

 

[Deleted member #2743735]

Engrish - check
Starts with male MC in coma - check
Father missing/dead - check
MC returns to house with mom in debt + bitchy big sister + softie lil sister - check
Women acting like their family member didn't just spend months at death's door and immediately act bitchy/send him do chores - check
Male MC being a pervert with a hair trigger of a cock getting hard at just a hint of cleavage - check

I'm convinced there is a Russian AI bot somewhere, pumping these out like a factory at this point.

Hey if I could get a Russian AI to help with rendering I would love that....check

Thanks for your comment!

Love this one

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Too bad there was no candy in this update! We need more candy.

Sings "I want candy"

And by candy you mean....

Wahoo! added stats system. Thanks for listening!

Wahoo!

Umm, just found the site tonight...so did not hear...

I had the STATS page built earlier but could not get it to work for the v001 release. As you already know it is working now in v003.

Glad you like it so far.

 

[gr33nappleboy]

Is Rachel forever meant to be looking up at the ceiling or sky? Lol

 

[monksims]

I only have a Windows computer which means I do not have a Mac/Linux so I would not really know how to test or support it.

Install VirtualBox and download a Linux distro iso (Ubuntu is the most used desktop Linux currently and most game makers mention it if their game is supported in Linux) to install and run a virtual Linux system on your Windows. Before that it's good to check in the bios settings that your cpu is set to run a virtual machine. It only costs you a small amount of time and harddrive space because both VBox and Linux are free.

 

[BeefyPrime]

here is my unofficial android port of Homecoming 0.03 + Compressed

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visit my blog for more android ports

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Checked out your site.. What a piece of crap.. Pop ups galore and wont scroll...

 

[nhel]

Checked out your site.. What a piece of crap.. Pop ups galore and wont scroll...

theres a 2 pop ups in every page, after that no popups.
just dont visit my site if you dont like it.

 

[DeathAl]

An interesting game, I find the mc a little Gary Stu but it's still a good game.

 

[steelsmiter]

How big is big enough?

about 5 hours with transitions turned off.

 

[Hordragg]

Install VirtualBox and download a Linux distro iso (Ubuntu is the most used desktop Linux currently and most game makers mention it if their game is supported in Linux) to install and run a virtual Linux system on your Windows. Before that it's good to check in the bios settings that your cpu is set to run a virtual machine. It only costs you a small amount of time and harddrive space because both VBox and Linux are free.

This.

But it may be worth mentioning that a variant like lubuntu, xubuntu or ubunutu MATE may be better suited for a virtual machine as they're all using lean desktop environments (for further information see

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). And while AMD-V and VT-x should be readily available to most people nowadays (having been introduced in 2006 and 2005 respectively) it is still down to the motherboard if the features are exposed to the operating system.
Another possibility would be an alpine linux based docker container using

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but seeing as one needs to first install something like cygwin to properly use it on windows it's probably more of a hassle than anything else.

 

[andrew david irving]

Really! The MC is supposed to have has 'elite' fighting training - part of which is to have constant vigilance of their environment... do members of the seal, sas, senezh, snow leopard, ksk, or similar actually get sucker punched by a common thug in the toilet ... Hell no, no they don't.

 

[thorin0815]

@DelveArt3d

Just finished playing the game. So far I liked it, but I would suggest to reduce the business stuff by a lot and concentrate more on the ladies (it's still a PORN game ).

Why does the MC still have to do his daily tasks in the house, in my opinion these are totally unnecessary clicks and why should the MC, even though he is now involved in so many businesses, still want to clean the neighbor's pool for ridiculously little money?

You should also consider getting a friend to proofread your story elements, occasionally you forget complete words and/or the spelling is sometimes wrong.

Good luck for your game and I can't wait for the next update.

 

[Naxos]

Seriously... the step sister comes in and takes a video of him rubbing one out in the shower.

Sis: I'll release this, everyone will know what a perv you are. I own you. Otherwise I'll tell them you looked at me naked in my room.
MC: Ok whatever you say.

the fuck!

What is should be was:
Sis: I'll release this, everyone will know what a perv you are. I own you. Otherwise I'll tell them you looked at me naked in my room.
MC: No bitch, everyone will know what a perv and blackmailing cnut you are. You snuck in the shower and perved on me and recorded me. fuck you. Go ahead, post the video, let the world see my massive big dick and what a bitch you are.

If the MC is going to be a full on little bitch like that, then he should have full on embraced it at the first dinner "*tears* Hey Sara, I accecidently walked in on Alex naked when you told me to wake her this morning, I'm sorry. She caught me in the shower and filmed me jerking off and is now making me her little pussy bitch. help me please, *tears*"

The dude has done nothing wrong, nothing to be ashamed of and rolls over like the softest little pussy bitch in the world.
Fuck this better turn around fast, or this goes in the shitter.

 

[thorin0815]

The dude has done nothing wrong, nothing to be ashamed of and rolls over like the softest little pussy bitch in the world.
Fuck this better turn around fast, or this goes in the shitter.

We have a popular saying in Germany "Wer ficken will, muss freundlich sein.".

Translated: Whoever wants to fuck has to be friendly. ;-)

 

[Naxos]

Um, yep, riiiight.

He's using is elite intelligence and tactical planing to play a long game at being a little bitch to his godess.

And his elite seduction tactic is to get all embarrassed run away as soon has he gets excited.


Ok, I'm seriously going to give this the benifite of the doubt and trust he's going to turn it around and turn her into a true little sub.

Hopefully this is seriously going to get a harem tag soon too.