I'll rewrite and add some scenes in the prologue chapter along with the first chapter to make her less forceful in her approach. However, this will necessitate a full replay of the prologue chapter, which I don't think that most people would like to do.
I didn't expect people to hate her as much as they did. Maybe it's a writer's bias, or perhaps it's because I already knew her story while writing the prologue chapter.
There is an imbalance of power dynamics between the MC and Jenny, which is because she's rich and owns half of the school and the player being a normal person who comes from a farm. But the imbalance won't stay that way forever, in the next few chapters it'll shift and become a healthy relationship between Jenny and MC.
Honestly, I find it a little bit disheartening you are actually considering making changes here. It's like 3? people have expressed their subjective opinions which created a feedback loop where their viewpoints only got reinforced. Using buzz words like
"rape" "sexual harassment" "femdom" drawing a path or an image of a direction you are taking with Jenny of which I feel like it is completely inaccurate ( if given the time to develop the story further )
I feel like the biggest problem here is the readers/viewers lack of understanding her reasons, motives, intent. A small point would be the ending scene at the hospital with her "father" and Adam, how come this isn't being discussed?
Is there a power dynamic? Of course, does she hold some authority over the MC? Yes, is this at this point in time "femdom"? No
"Rape" Seriously, what game were you playing? "Sexual harassment" Probably... Are they young stupid and troubled? Yes.
Now is the above a problem? Hell no I think some are just afraid that the tone is set for this dynamic/interactions with her/for her.
While I think it's just an interesting development which will change and evolve or grow into something else entirely.
Now what I presume to be a minority have used this "tone" to lead a "discussion" which unfortunately seems more like taking over the narrative. Over the last few pages they have been very vocal about what they don't like and under the guise of constructive criticism made some ridiculous statements and a lot of speculation of where this is headed.
Now I believe the majority withholds pride & prejudice, jumping to conclusions in what we have seen so far.
Are open to the narrative that is being told by your creative freedom and can't wait to find out where this is going
and how things will develop further.
All in all I think it was an impressive first release, the character introductions were great the renders are amazing the way the stage is being set is enticing and leaves me wanting to find out more.