VN Ren'Py Abandoned A.O.A. Academy [Ch.5 Gold] [TLGGAMES]

[Wicked Garden]

I don't think the writing is the problem, the decision making, however, is. Reading through the comments and I agree with one about this mafia arc being an endgame type of storyline. It's just too soon for this type of content, it looks comical seeing a guy who barely knows these girls wanting to risk life life for them. Let us build bonds and relationships first.

This. If the story itself dropped hints as to what's to come slowly the Mafia plot would've felt better structured to me, if we kept the same pace prior to this arc and saw the mafia plot develop more and more after each update I wouldn't have minded. My problem is a sheltered farm kid was giving too much to deal with, too soon. The decision to just jump right in a violent storyline such as this one, so soon should've been considered more. The MC apparently has a savior complex, I was more concerned with the safety of him than anything. If I knew and cared about people for a certain amount of time, then yes, risking my life for them would seem like a no brainer for me. But to know them for only days? Weeks?

That said, I don't think the writing is bad at all, bad writing gets thrown around a lot but there's a difference to me. If the Mafia arc was total shit and didn't make sense, sure. But from what I've played it's been well executed. Players are just exhausted from it and want it to end if anything.

 

[AchedCroissant]

looks comical seeing a guy who barely knows these girls wanting to risk life life for them.

And without having sex it makes less sense

 

[Canto Forte]

We have a real mob assassin who refuses to assasinate for the safety of our girls.
She just would not stop the mob killers.
There is no reason for it.
Then we go to competing mob boss for protesction.
By that point, the contenders should have been dead by our assassin.
She does nothing.

This. If the story itself dropped hints as to what's to come slowly the Mafia plot would've felt better structured to me, if we kept the same pace prior to this arc and saw the mafia plot develop more and more after each update I wouldn't have minded. My problem is a sheltered farm kid was giving too much to deal with, too soon. The decision to just jump right in a violent storyline such as this one, so soon should've been considered more. The MC apparently has a savior complex, I was more concerned with the safety of him than anything. If I knew and cared about people for a certain amount of time, then yes, risking my life for them would seem like a no brainer for me. But to know them for only days? Weeks?

That said, I don't think the writing is bad at all, bad writing gets thrown around a lot but there's a difference to me. If the Mafia arc was total shit and didn't make sense, sure. But from what I've played it's been well executed. Players are just exhausted from it and want it to end if anything.

And without having sex it makes less sense

Awesome female mob assassin with a throbbing revenge agenda would not revenge on her tormentors.
This is so weak for a mob game/movie/series/premise.
Violence in revenge is the mob modus operandi.

 

[Zarathos4]

Have you ever heard of the mentality of cowards?
which ones do you prefer?

Then there's the ones who cant take a joke.

 

[Fiufia]

Then there's the ones who cant take a joke.

I just asked what you prefer MC simp or MC coward. what are you talking

 

[Canto Forte]

MC can dish it out - exhibited during Adam office scene.
MC can take all the hits - exhibited all over the bruised previews of game of hurt coming up.
Still waiting on the assassins to ... you know .. assassin like in kill bill and we are good.

 

[Wicked Garden]

MC can dish it out - exhibited during Adam office scene.
MC can take all the hits - exhibited all over the bruised previews of game of hurt coming up.
Still waiting on the assassins to ... you know .. assassin like in kill bill and we are good.

I'm just waiting to punch Adam in the mouth, Jessica and her father probably have something planned for that weasel also.

 

[Mrs. Joyce Harding]

This. If the story itself dropped hints as to what's to come slowly the Mafia plot would've felt better structured to me, if we kept the same pace prior to this arc and saw the mafia plot develop more and more after each update I wouldn't have minded. My problem is a sheltered farm kid was giving too much to deal with, too soon. The decision to just jump right in a violent storyline such as this one, so soon should've been considered more. The MC apparently has a savior complex, I was more concerned with the safety of him than anything. If I knew and cared about people for a certain amount of time, then yes, risking my life for them would seem like a no brainer for me. But to know them for only days? Weeks?

That said, I don't think the writing is bad at all, bad writing gets thrown around a lot but there's a difference to me. If the Mafia arc was total shit and didn't make sense, sure. But from what I've played it's been well executed. Players are just exhausted from it and want it to end if anything.

Me being one of them.

 

[umbrela]

that's a good one, guys.
it's like from "came for 18+, stayed for story"
nice characters and very beatufil ost, i'm truly thinking of become a patron for this dev.

 

[StingerWolf]

Would be nice to beat up Mr. Arsehole. Currently the MC looks like beat up crap. Should be the other way around. In BADIK I sometimes even feel sorry for Tybalt. But this jerk here...Would so fulfilling to beat the crap out of him...

 

[umbrela]

Would be nice to beat up Mr. Arsehole. Currently the MC looks like beat up crap. Should be the other way around. In BADIK I sometimes even feel sorry for Tybalt. But this jerk here...Would so fulfilling to beat the crap out of him...

no sorry to Tybalt by me. he is stupid moron, but this dick - truly different league.

 

[StingerWolf]

no sorry to Tybalt by me. he is stupid moron, but this dick - truly different league.

Agree. In a bad way different. But still compare him to this game's jerk, and he seems rather pitiable. He won't walk through corpses...

 

[Deleted member 4654353]

Agree. In a bad way different. But still compare him to this game's jerk, and he seems rather pitiable. He won't walk through corpses...

Tybalt is less an antagonist than a comic relief. Makes me thing all the male students here are complety underused. What's the point of the buff guy ? He hasn't said or done anything relevant for 4 episodes.

 

[umbrela]

Tybalt is less an antagonist than a comic relief. Makes me thing all the male students here are complety underused. What's the point of the buff guy ? He hasn't said or done anything relevant for 4 episodes.

his twist made me dead, tbh. that was the thing, what I didn't expect at all

 

[StingerWolf]

Tybalt is less an antagonist than a comic relief. Makes me thing all the male students here are complety underused. What's the point of the buff guy ? He hasn't said or done anything relevant for 4 episodes.

I agree. Of course it doesn't mean that he will not be used more in the future. On the other hand, the detective and the mobsters got plenty screen time. We should face it, that despite it's start, this might not really be a college game like many thought...

 

[StingerWolf]

And no, I am not really convinced that bringing in the mob story in the main story line has been a smart move.

 

[Raziel_8]

And no, I am not really convinced that bringing in the mob story in the main story line has been a smart move.

Well u are not alone there, at least it's way to soon in the story for the mob and the psychopath which wants Jenny and MC dead, for no real reason besids having fun... It's not really something u can just put aside and have a happy college life on the side

 

[umbrela]

I agree with the two gentlemen up

 

[StingerWolf]

Well u are not alone there, at least it's way to soon in the story for the mob and the psychopath which wants Jenny and MC dead, for no real reason besids having fun... It's not really something u can just put aside and have a happy college life on the side

Well u are not alone there, at least it's way to soon in the story for the mob and the psychopath which wants Jenny and MC dead, for no real reason besids having fun... It's not really something u can just put aside and have a happy college life on the side

Exactly my thoughts. I am rather curious, how the dev will correct this slip up, because it is one. I really like this game, the characters etc. it would be bad for it to fail.

 

[Dr.Brule]

It seems in these vn's is there always has to be an antagonist(s) sometimes they are well written into the story other times they feel shoe horned in (like the mob in this one). It still a fun one with some of the story still enjoyable.