This VN have too many unnecessary subplots, many characters, many scenes where the MC is not involved, the script is a disaster, and I think that's where the problem lies, I don't think there is a script as such, i think the author comes up with something at the moment and inserts it into the "story".
Be honest, do any of you know where the story is going, what are the motivations of the MC, what does he paint in it?, i like the visual section, the females design, the ambientation, It irritates me to see so much visual potential accompanied by such a poor narrative, for example, if you are interested in Jenny and Valerie, from the end of chapter 2, you don't interact with them in a relevant way, what is the point of having so many "options", if you are not going anywhere with them.
I don't want to sound like a "hater", I really see potential in this VN, but I think it's drowning in its own plot design errors, i will choose as a positive example chapter 2 of this VN, simplified and focused on the MC and the girls, everything began to fall apart with the plot of the drug traffickers, a mess, from the third chapter, the protagonist is more anonymous, he interacts less and less, his decisions are ephemeral, please a little more coherence, I'm just saying that.
It's simple and I think I speak for a significant portion of people, when you play this VN you want to be with the girls, know their problems, help them, be that kind of fantasy knight, and be in the middle of a coherent plot that integrates you in the organic way, example, that the main story is based on Jenny, the university and what happened to her in her childhood.
In short, you have to include the MC, you have to give prominence to your protagonist, relevance, importance, personality, the story has to have a goal, the MC has to have a goal that goes hand in hand with the story, I am in favor of the dramas, the "slow burn", etc, but it must have coherence, so that it works for me personally, and here things are more and more diffuse and cumbersome.
I'm going to take an example that everyone hates, "Being a DIK", let's be honest, the story of that VN is not the best in the world, it is quite basic and sometimes very cringy, but it has rhythm, coherence, meaning and a clear objective, the MC has options, decisions, and gives the illusion that you're going to get somewhere.
