VN Ren'Py Completed A Reflection In Your Eyes [Final] [StateOfMind]

[FookU2]

Is the blonde supposed to look cross-eyed? That would make sense with the title, I guess. lol just checking

 

[S.O.M.]

Is the blonde supposed to look cross-eyed? That would make sense with the title, I guess. lol just checking

Maybe I should change the main pic

 

[FaceCrap]

It started out somewhat ok, but the farther I got into it the less I got to like it... the fact that models are completely separated from the background and overlayed instead of actually part of the scene totally breaks the immersion for me... also many times the dialogue refers to a character being in a scene and all you get is the scene background and the referred to character nowhere to be seen.

Apart from that, what's this getting forced to playthrough with just one of the 5 characters you meet about? (sister, teacher and the 3 other girls in your class)? Not only do none of the other characters appear in those separate playthroughs, it also feels totally disconnected from the first part where you get to interact with all of them... it feels like totally separated stories (apart from the fact you know how the MC ended up there)

Sadly this made me decide to not continue with this game... being forced to pick one of the 5 girls I could live with as long as the others would still be a part of that storyline and if models actually would be part of the scenes instead of just overlayed on top.

 

[OVERLORD24]

Is save from episode 2 OK??!!??

 

[S.O.M.]

Is save from episode 2 OK??!!??

For ep6 - yes

 

[S.O.M.]

Chapter 3 is out for

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I will release it here at Saturday.
Also, I will need to fix OP because of very much changes in game (first of all I need to fix download links to help people understand what to download).

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[lionarslan]

I get that dev writes from the heart not from the mind. But that text is hella confusing, to tell it's really mild. MC announces that college is 10 minutes walk (in my walk speed it's something less than 1km, real walking distance, I will wait for a bus longer than that), he walks in college, meet couple of girls on the way then his teacher inside college and it's said that sun is already set and MC goes for the bus. It's 1 or 2 minutes drive (don't count the waiting time), but he's still goes for the bus. And MC's sister is irritated then, food is getting cold. She prepared it 10 minutes ago and his brother is not ready to eat it (you can calculate all the timings, numbers are there). The next day MC and his sister goes right to the bus. To drive for for 1 or 2 minutes. Instead of walking for 10 minutes. And bus is always where people need it, it never late.
Next one, MC's parents. Father is scientist that explore not-so-ordinary historical facts. The next sentence about him: "The father is spineless and weak-willed". OK, I can imagine a man that never met any scientists. But I cannot imagine a man knows not even one cliche about scientists. If a man makes science his field of application he's at least not spineless or weak-willed. 'Cause such man can never prove anything even remotely scientific. There's no scientist without will.
And that contradictions goes on and on. I see dev writing's has a style, it's pleasant to read, but troubles with logic and common sense kill all the pleasure. I read only for day one but I needed to make a break after that, too many things made my eyes hurt.
And yeah, someone before me already said about too much repeating in text. I won't repeat it, he's right about it. But without repeating it's really poor text with self-explanatory sentences.
And couple of sentences about MC. It's good that MC is not a clean state, he has some kind of personality. It's really bad his personality is of a sorry whiner.
S.O.M., I like your creation in general but please use someone attentive as beta-reader, your text is full of logical mistakes that you can correct easily.

 

[underoath27]

So, no harem tag? Do you plan to add later or not? S.O.M.

 

[S.O.M.]

I get that dev writes from the heart not from the mind. But that text is hella confusing, to tell it's really mild. MC announces that college is 10 minutes walk (in my walk speed it's something less than 1km, real walking distance, I will wait for a bus longer than that), he walks in college, meet couple of girls on the way then his teacher inside college and it's said that sun is already set and MC goes for the bus. It's 1 or 2 minutes drive (don't count the waiting time), but he's still goes for the bus. And MC's sister is irritated then, food is getting cold. She prepared it 10 minutes ago and his brother is not ready to eat it (you can calculate all the timings, numbers are there). The next day MC and his sister goes right to the bus. To drive for for 1 or 2 minutes. Instead of walking for 10 minutes. And bus is always where people need it, it never late.
Next one, MC's parents. Father is scientist that explore not-so-ordinary historical facts. The next sentence about him: "The father is spineless and weak-willed". OK, I can imagine a man that never met any scientists. But I cannot imagine a man knows not even one cliche about scientists. If a man makes science his field of application he's at least not spineless or weak-willed. 'Cause such man can never prove anything even remotely scientific. There's no scientist without will.
And that contradictions goes on and on. I see dev writing's has a style, it's pleasant to read, but troubles with logic and common sense kill all the pleasure. I read only for day one but I needed to make a break after that, too many things made my eyes hurt.
And yeah, someone before me already said about too much repeating in text. I won't repeat it, he's right about it. But without repeating it's really poor text with self-explanatory sentences.
And couple of sentences about MC. It's good that MC is not a clean state, he has some kind of personality. It's really bad his personality is of a sorry whiner.
S.O.M., I like your creation in general but please use someone attentive as beta-reader, your text is full of logical mistakes that you can correct easily.

Hey! Thanks for your words! I absolutely agree with you! I have very much problems with logic in this game. Today i will release new version as a new file, you should try it, maybe the story will be more interesting in this parts Also, one of my patrons helping me with proofreading. He fixed old eps and new chapters. But i will release changes for ep 1-6 later, like a big patch.
Maybe the problem with my text is that im a russian and very often I find it difficult to explain my thoughts on english. But now, proofreader helping me with english and I learned some new words and sentences from him, this is cool.

So, no harem tag? Do you plan to add later or not? S.O.M.

I have a group sex in plans, for sure. But harem, I can promise nothing.

 

[YogSothoth1982]

I have a group sex in plans, for sure. But harem, I can promise nothing.

I guess if you add it one day I'll give the game a try.

Until then, thanks for the game and good luck.

 

[DarkSithLord47]

So do i need to download and play the prologue first or the latest update?

 

[S.O.M.]

So do i need to download and play the prologue first or the latest update?

The prologue not necessary. But you can play it for Ellie's content. Just use walkthrough mod that I build in game.

 

[fishbrain]

So was everything up to now considered the prologue and Ch3 is standalone or am I missing something? Even if we have to replay it's early enough that isn't much of an inconvenience, plus I've only really played Bella's content aside from Ellie and I'm happy to roll through that again! Frequency of updates remains great!!

 

[Boehser Onkel]

The prologue not necessary. But you can play it for Ellie's content. Just use walkthrough mod that I build in game.

thats a .... interesting move to split the game

 

[S.O.M.]

So was everything up to now considered the prologue and Ch3 is standalone or am I missing something? Even if we have to replay it's early enough that isn't much of an inconvenience, plus I've only really played Bella's content aside from Ellie and I'm happy to roll through that again! Frequency of updates remains great!!

Yeah, old eps was a prologue. As I said early (I think it was in discord for patrons), Ellie is a main LI in the game. All the plot about her, Hera and Zale. Now Im working only on this characters. Another girls will be in dlc (if after finishing this game patrons will want a continuation of other girls story). Many reasons indicated that all the girls, except for Ellie, almost are not interesting to anyone. And I will be honest, I only enjoy creating events for Ellie, Hera and Zale. Starting from this chapter, you will play the game that I originally intended.

 

[Boehser Onkel]

S.O.M.

 

[Look-see]

Ellie & Zale love points mean they'll hook up with each other?

aside from that yeah ima agree with others who say having to choose between ellie and the other girls sucks. even worse that it doesnt matter cause the girls from prologue dont even show up in the new stuff so it's like. whats the point?

either way. i tried the game, saw that a harem wasnt gonna happen and now ima move on.

 

[Boehser Onkel]

Ellie & Zale love points mean they'll hook up with each other?

aside from that yeah ima agree with others who say having to choose between ellie and the other girls sucks. even worse that it doesnt matter cause the girls from prologue dont even show up in the new stuff so it's like. whats the point?

either way. i tried the game, saw that a harem wasnt gonna happen and now ima move on.

yeah - i will miss bella ....

 

[Misosoc]

What happened? I thought there were 6 chapters to this game? Now I see chapter 3? Is this into a remake stage?

 

[S.O.M.]

Because in an incest game the incest character will always be the favorite character.

You say it's not necessary to play the prologue that's weird why make it when it is not important. That makes me think that there was no real plan where to go with the story of the game.

Stil no harem tag so no reason for me to try.

Ellie's story was planned this way from start. And I have all chapters' plot in my notes.

S.O.M.

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Thank you!

Ellie & Zale love points mean they'll hook up with each other?

aside from that yeah ima agree with others who say having to choose between ellie and the other girls sucks. even worse that it doesnt matter cause the girls from prologue dont even show up in the new stuff so it's like. whats the point?

either way. i tried the game, saw that a harem wasnt gonna happen and now ima move on.

This is ntr in future (you can see it in the code). NTR for some paths (especially if you fucked up with your choices)

I played this game for the planned harem tag , now we are forced to choose one girl and no harem in future . Seems like you have to play the game with multiple saves in order to view all the scenes which I don't like . This game is clearly not for me , so I gonna move on . Good luck with your game dev .

I didnt promised the harem.