VN Ren'Py Abandoned Birthday Present [v0.96] [Spooky666]

[BarbarrossaNA]

Not going to critique the game hard per say.. consider this a interview you've passed.

Your perversion and skills have just gotten you a hobby that has a chance in the future to make you some money if you want. Figure out a story that interests you and the masses.. Work on the dialog a bit more then what you've shown us... a lot of renders are pretty decent so you seem to have that part of it covered. Combine it all and make a Patreon.

Consider this one a test.. and with the next one blow us out of the water.

 

[HaremKing041299]

God I love to play this , unfortunately I can't because I have only my Android Phone .. But still wait for this to be Ported !! And I love the Daddy/Daughter relations .. Woooo fetish yeah !!!

 

[cebs]

God I love to play this , unfortunately I can't because I have only my Android Phone .. But still wait for this to be Ported !! And I love the Daddy/Daughter relations .. Woooo fetish yeah !!!

You have it here

2: Renpy made me 4 android files. I dont know what these do, but I did upload them.
the.bp-5-armeabi-v7a-release.apk
Mega
the.bp-5-universal-release.apk
Mega
the.bp-100000005-arm64-v8a-release.apk
Mega
the.bp-800000005-x86_64-release.apk
Mega

 

[galora]

I could change to ‘teenage’ if preferred. Writing out eighteen seems to be a bit of a trope on literotica and so I included it. Other games (midlife crisis) allowed custom ages, and I had considered borrowing that code if I can figure it out. you know, for those people who have a thing for Specifically 43 year old daughters or whatever. But seems I might be too hard on the creepy train already for some.

Thanks so much for the like!

edit: should we do some poles? Remove the age? Remove the creep? I can’t believe this has been viewed 7k times already on its first day.

I agree with everyone saying you should do your own thing! Make it like you want! (though you don't seem to sure to go anywhere with it from your earlier comments)

Haha 7k this beautiful site is a hub for all the creeps that need more 3dcg than hentai and every now and then a beautiful love story with incest and a harem

Good luck with everything and though it's awesome to see a dev being so present, and open to criticism, take your time and make what u want! If you think 7k is much, work on it a bit more and checkout how it goes

 

[thanks for the demos]

I could change to ‘teenage’ if preferred. Writing out eighteen seems to be a bit of a trope on literotica and so I included it. Other games (midlife crisis) allowed custom ages, and I had considered borrowing that code if I can figure it out. you know, for those people who have a thing for Specifically 43 year old daughters or whatever. But seems I might be too hard on the creepy train already for some.

Thanks so much for the like!

edit: should we do some poles? Remove the age? Remove the creep? I can’t believe this has been viewed 7k times already on its first day.

Custom age is pretty easy. Just change the flavour text to hit whichever tone works for your story.

python:
    d_age = renpy.input("It's hard to believe that by tomorrow, my little girl will be __ years old already. (default 18)")
    if not d_age:
        d_age = 18

You can switch it up a little by cycling through [d_age]-year old, teenaged, barely legal, youthful, etc to get the point across without relying on verbatim repetition. Or don't. If it's the specific mention of 18 that gets you going, use it as much as you want

 

[Noegrets]

Custom age is pretty easy. Just change the flavour text to hit whichever tone works for your story.

python:
    d_age = renpy.input("It's hard to believe that by tomorrow, my little girl will be __ years old already. (default 18)")
    if not d_age:
        d_age = 18

You can switch it up a little by cycling through [d_age]-year old, teenaged, barely legal, youthful, etc to get the point across without relying on verbatim repetition. Or don't. If it's the specific mention of 18 that gets you going, use it as much as you want

I’ll look into adding that. Thanks.
Edit: done!

 

[Anon21]

Just a quick note for everybody living in places with no, or failed, sex education.

Porn logic isn't real. This game makes use of the typical tropes: "It isn't rape if she starts to enjoy it" and "If you keep jamming it in there she will start to enjoy it." Please distinguish real life from fantasy.

You may now resume your fapping.

 

[emmasteadman]

As probably already stated, spooky666 you can make your game ask the player what age the female in question should be, other games like Radiant I think do just that. That takes the onus off you and onto the player to decide. Something to consider for future updates.

Failing that, in the meantime people can always edit the 'script.rpy' with notepad, to ummm let's say change certain factors.

 

[cooperdk]

Planning = yes. But more in dialog (statement= I’m pregnant!) rather than animation. I am not sure I have those assets.

Sorry it’s too creepy Avaron1974. This is the corruption path. Hopefully I can make it sweeter with another fork next month. Looking for that sweet sweet input!

There are preggo assets available. I think they might even be here on F95zone...

 

[Watcher X]

"I don't consent to this"

"You don't have a choice, I consent for you".

It's just rape that then enters the Japanese hentai school of corruption where rape is okay because they enjoy it after a while.

It's your game, you do you, not asking you to change anything I just wasn't expecting creepy rape dad.

Thanks for the heads up. I was about to download it but rape isn't my thing. Really needs it in the tags.

 

[GuardianZ]

Congratulations in 9 months. Your present will arrive.

 

[Noegrets]

Version .55
Changelog:
Added a few intro pictures, few added renders to the fun times. Text edited and spell checked. made it both more and less creepy (less rapey, but come-on. She is a vulnerable teenage virgin who is also your daughter). Team Added to too!
Thanks to: galora for rendering advice, Cmann - for the script editing, and Phanex my first viewer who helped me learn how to compress the game file by 90 percent

Probably no major content updates for a few weeks, but will probably work on the script more to add in more of your suggestions. Also possible image editing from the team.

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t.b.p-55-armeabi-v7a-release:

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Will up load to other services soon.

 

[Noegrets]

There are preggo assets available. I think they might even be here on F95zone...

Thanks for the heads up!

 

[Noegrets]

As probably already stated, spooky666 you can make your game ask the player what age the female in question should be, other games like Radiant I think do just that. That takes the onus off you and onto the player to decide. Something to consider for future updates.

Failing that, in the meantime people can always edit the 'script.rpy' with notepad, to ummm let's say change certain factors.

It’s done! Save your note pad skills for sending me suggestions!

 

[Noegrets]

#Spooky666
Being open to criticism is a very laudable character trait. But, in this case I can only recommend that you don't waste your time pandering to the critics. You should see yourself as a free artist. That's what you are. Free artists follow their artistic impulses. Are you trying to win a popularity contest or maximize your profits?? Your little story has clear thematic kinks. They motivated you to make the story and keep you motivated to produce more. It's a labor of (carnal?)love. Own it. There's a tendency amongst beginner devs to have an ear that's too tuned to take in negative feedback.

But, you're also getting praise from people who like what you like. They like what you produced. Do you want to make stuff that appeals to more people at the cost of being less interesting to yourself? For no money? That sounds awful to me.

You can create all sorts of different stories in the future. I'm sure you have ideas. Let those ideas live. And don't be discouraged when you get slammed by critics. That will come. Aside from them there will always be those who are thankful for your very personal addition to the library of creations. Your creative journey should be a happy one for you! You. Try to see it as a bonus when anyone else happens to like it too! I think that will make you happier and chill.

My own take on your story, I like the incest and innocence kink. Coersion, sort of. The simplicity and naivity of the fathers approach was unique. His playful assertiveness. I laughed at the line "I consented FOR you." Just what a good father does for his beloved daughter. He took care of that for her. Silly. The atmosphere was never serious. Both loved each other at the end. The way I like it.

"Eighteen" "Eighteen" "Eighteen" You're not on Patreon. And the setting doesn't come close to violating F95's rule 7. You could have relaxed on that point. Your idea of letting the player determine the daughters age is a nice freedom for everyone. I think it would be a bonus if you could get that to work. Just has to be stated once.

Thanks for the story. Hope there are more to come. Have fun with it!

Thanks for the ideas. Hopefully you like the changes.

 

[Crazygamer43]

Op: Updated !

 

[galora]

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Guess you beat me to some of them xD

 

[Snappahead]

I've seen some fucked up shit on this site...but I think this game takes the cake. Feel kinda 'dirty' after going through that...

 

[Daxter250]

lmao i laughed my ass off when i typed in she would be 14 and at the end she says: "i'm not fourteen you know!"

 

[HaremKing041299]

You have it here

I'm not sure what to choose from .. Maybe a help , or explain how ? Thanks !!