Well...
I just read this from beginning to temporary end, and I gotta say I loved it... until about 5-10 minutes ago.
Until then I had nothing to complain about. Though I question the Squash stuff... What's up with that? Sure it's a realistic way for the MC to waste time, but it seems unnecessarily much time is spent explaining what a tier list is, twice.
Anyway, the last way too many minutes were spent talking to Cody and Cadence, who were trying to introduce the stupidest secret society in all of fiction, as far as I know.
As much as I like this game, this kinda breaks my suspension of disbelief, which tends to ruin everything. Are we really to believe that a secret organization taking itself seriously enough to set up snipers for a meeting like this, is founded on the idea the "free love" principle? Maybe I'm once again underestimating how ridiculous people can get when it comes to love/sex, but this is just unbelievable.
Also, it's just so incredibly unnecessary to have such an element in the story in the first place. How many games are there on this site where the MC gets into way more morally problematic relationships than it would be for this game's MC to form a threeway relationship with his married landlady and her daughter? I don't care to count, but I would assert it's a lot. (Hell, Sisterly Lust is basically that, except the landlady has three daughters instead. And that's if you don't use the incest patch, which in that case is intended.) And none of them needed a secret society backing them, most of them didn't need much of a justification at all.
My point is, the Complex Society this game is named after is an unneeded element and a potential turnoff. Its existence in the story only needlessly complicates things, not to mention it has us sit through a really long conversation that just makes me fear for the MC the longer it goes on. After that conversation, my first instinct was to never talk to Cody again and to never walk by his house again either.
I hope I don't come across as some jerk who just likes to complain. I'm not. Usually when something turns me away from a game, I just quietly move on to something else, occasionally leaving a comment with constructive criticism. But this is a game I had lots of fun with until the element it was named after was introduced, so I felt the need to say something. I just can't think of anything constructive to say. I can't very well tell you to take CS out of CS, can I? ... I'm gonna stop now.
I'm gutted it's the MC's mate.
