'change my mind' éh?
Well, man's not hot, for starters.
P.S. The ongoing goal mentioned in the main characters section(on that dank ass windows 95 'puter) is an incomplete sentence. It states "the company you work" where it should say 'the company you work for'.
And Ava's says "Ava's is" which is a little bit double.
Both dolls also have the stated goal of "Rise [stat]" which should probably be 'raise'.
"spend time with her on your appartment" Didn't know we had access to the roof!
The "the one left behind" section is missing parentheses around the source of the quote, gotta stay consistent! Speaking of consistency, Akiko's quote misses the closing parenthesis.
Becky's quote states "we'll met several more times" should be 'meet'. Spectre's section has the opposite problem, "I've meet this woman" which should be met. It also says "I bet she'll play a key role in my life for now", the 'for now' is a bit redundant.
Tryin' to activate preg for Mimi let to "YOu are their creator you who knows." with excessive capitalization included. Btw, how much of the 'sweet home abalama' thing is prothetical? (The scene also has a good few misspellings but it's just a preview so it doesn't really matter yet)
For some reason Mimi has the 'make her fat' option but it doesn't say 'coming soon' and the button isn't interactable. I also don't get why bimbo stuff is under strength and weight instead of body or mental but whatever, also a little surprised(though it was a welcome one) that it would be daddy stuff. Wouldn't mind a specific mental one for ddlg though.
Ava also has a few options like petplay that don't mention being unavailable though their buttons don't work. It might also be nice to add 'preview' to options like the preg stuff.
The twins enty, before you buy them, says Rina "takes good care of her younger sister (just a younger)." I assume it's supposed to explain that Rina is only older by minutes but 'just a younger' doesn't really mean much.
"Their personalily, needless to say, will sync well with your previous dolls, as Ava and Mimi." The 'as' is kinda unnescessary.
"Rina will be friends fast with Ava" Should probably be 'fast friends'.
And Himeko says "Hope you like [player.name]" which seems a bit odd.