Well, the writing definitely needs some work. Proper spelling, punctuation, commas, some exclamation marks etc. Currently it just feels kind of hollow, like two robots imitating humans speaking to each other. The dialogue is devoid of emotion which doesn't allow for any immersion.
I don't mind the models, I actually quite like them.
The concept of daughters meeting their dad after many years is very easy to build on, and then the youngest straight up changes in the same room on the first day in years they meet. Really?
If I want a game with a similar premise, I would just play 'Single Again' or 'Radiant'. This one is not for me.