- Thread starter Fallen Angel Productions
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- Aug 29, 2018
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BatmanCxnt It's one thing to not type in perfect English in a forum, but you can't do that in a script. At this point, I can only assume that English is not your first language.
Download Grammarly. It's not perfect, but I find it super helpful.
Download Grammarly. It's not perfect, but I find it super helpful.
- May 16, 2017
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i am using it for the game and english is my first language
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The Title Music is SO bad ass. I literally listened to it 4 times before I even played the game.
- May 10, 2018
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I haven't played it yet, but I can already give you feedback.. If you're going to have Female Dom in the game you would be well served to give us the option of breaking her/them.. I would think there are still quite a few non-beta men left in this world that won't enjoy Femdom..
No one speaks in perfect english. Hell no one speaks in perfect any language, so why does it bother you that there's some aspects that aren't perfect ?
Some of the best scripts out there for film and games have janky dialogue and scripts.
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the girls are all different i won't spoil anything but all the girls will be into different things i'm trying to put in abit for everyone
I honestly only had a small issue with it. Looking past grammar and punctuation ... I don't know if there is one single game out there that is ABSOLUTELY PERFECT, that might just be creepy as hell at this point. The dialogue is quite..verbose I guess, but as this is just a little bit..just the tip..I'm sure by saying the text is going to be fixed that's included.
I like the sister, theres just something about the mother that bugs me..looks interesting though.
I like the sister, theres just something about the mother that bugs me..looks interesting though.
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That's fine and good, but I just played the sample and I stand by my suggestion. For me personally, any dom female that I'm not offered the choice to break is a deal-breaker for me... It instantly ruins it for me. I'm somewhat of a caveman I guess.. but so far, well done.
Maybe stop mislabeling game versions. A beta is a feature complete game, that's going through bug testing... not a work in progress, 3 minute demo.
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Beta release?
Pros:
Decent renders
Tags
Cons:
Writing seems to be all over the place
Backstory amounts to a small paragraph on a blank screen
Backstory will be released later in a comicbook format instead of in the game where it belongs
Again Tags: The only tags listed that are in the game are 3DCG, Male Protag, Milf and the missing voyeurism tag
Not enough here to really make an informed decision on what the game will be
I wouldn't even call this a proof of concept at this stage tbh.
*Beta release*
*Small paragraph story explanation on blank screen
*MC wakes up
*MC gets dressed
*MC steps out of bedroom
*MC meets chubby bitchy sister in hallway who tries to blackmail MC into cleaning her bedroom
*MC peeps on sister mopping her bedroom floor
*MC goes to the kitchen
*MC's mom yells at him for no reason(Goes from happy to see MC to bitch-fit in the blink of an eye for no reason)
*MC peeps on mom who is suddenly bent over for some unknown reason
*MC suddenly mentally calls mom a slut and says that mom and sister will be his out of nowhere
*End
That amounts to at most 10min of the MC's morning. Could have just as easily been MC wakes up, gets dressed, goes and takes a piss, washes face, brushes teeth, the end. Same amount of time in the MC's morning.
Isn't there a rule about tags? Something about the only tags allowed to be listed are the ones that are actually in the game at the time of release. While putting future tags in the OP under say a spoiler.
Pros:
Decent renders
Tags
Cons:
Writing seems to be all over the place
Backstory amounts to a small paragraph on a blank screen
Backstory will be released later in a comicbook format instead of in the game where it belongs
Again Tags: The only tags listed that are in the game are 3DCG, Male Protag, Milf and the missing voyeurism tag
Not enough here to really make an informed decision on what the game will be
I wouldn't even call this a proof of concept at this stage tbh.
*Beta release*
*Small paragraph story explanation on blank screen
*MC wakes up
*MC gets dressed
*MC steps out of bedroom
*MC meets chubby bitchy sister in hallway who tries to blackmail MC into cleaning her bedroom
*MC peeps on sister mopping her bedroom floor
*MC goes to the kitchen
*MC's mom yells at him for no reason(Goes from happy to see MC to bitch-fit in the blink of an eye for no reason)
*MC peeps on mom who is suddenly bent over for some unknown reason
*MC suddenly mentally calls mom a slut and says that mom and sister will be his out of nowhere
*End
That amounts to at most 10min of the MC's morning. Could have just as easily been MC wakes up, gets dressed, goes and takes a piss, washes face, brushes teeth, the end. Same amount of time in the MC's morning.
Isn't there a rule about tags? Something about the only tags allowed to be listed are the ones that are actually in the game at the time of release. While putting future tags in the OP under say a spoiler.
i like the sister and she has a big ass thats enought for me to become patron