nevermoreXX
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Has some clichés, like how rich father doesnt set up paid account for daughter library? But mc gets to play hero for buying books... And for what i have seen MC hasnt been even paid yet. ..Overused cliché. Minor one but still.
Casino scene was shitty
I didnt read further than that.
One major note tho:
the main difference between "goodnight" and "good evening" is that one is a greeting, while the other is a farewell
In other words, you would never say "Goodnight" to say hello to someone, and you would never say "good evening" to say bye to someone.
I am not native English speaker either, but when ever i read MC saying Goodnight to someone as greeting my hair jumps out of skalp
No insult intended. Just bit constructive criticism.
P.S
Cops scene from beginning of game, was major putoff. MC is in the parking lot, minding own business and cops approach with story "u are under arrest" and MC breaks pants like baby.. -You won't live long like that my friend.-
Even if they were to arrest you, it would be for.. loitering on parking lot? You have nothing incriminating on you.. money is in the briefcase inside the car. And theres nothing ominous about that ..
Casino scene was shitty
I didnt read further than that.
One major note tho:
the main difference between "goodnight" and "good evening" is that one is a greeting, while the other is a farewell
In other words, you would never say "Goodnight" to say hello to someone, and you would never say "good evening" to say bye to someone.
I am not native English speaker either, but when ever i read MC saying Goodnight to someone as greeting my hair jumps out of skalp
No insult intended. Just bit constructive criticism.
P.S
Cops scene from beginning of game, was major putoff. MC is in the parking lot, minding own business and cops approach with story "u are under arrest" and MC breaks pants like baby.. -You won't live long like that my friend.-
Even if they were to arrest you, it would be for.. loitering on parking lot? You have nothing incriminating on you.. money is in the briefcase inside the car. And theres nothing ominous about that ..
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