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You don't, actually. Currently the "correct" order is to sit with P&L so you can introduce Skylark after dinner, Harmony will then meet up with you the next day anyway and you proceed to the lake scene.
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I could maybe believe it if there was something in the text to make you think that her cheery slutty extroverted attitude reflects her real self while the timid fearful behavior is caused by her abuse. But there isn't.
As far as we know, Lel was always timid. This thought is reinforced by a conversation with Panki, by Lel's behavior and by the fact she can even get started on her character development out of that behavior in a natural way.
As it is, we're left with Kayden's temporary unconsciousness causing her behavior, personality and instincts to completely leave the atmosphere and be instantly replaced with their opposites.
There are no signs of Lel 2 before the pirate ship and there are no traces of Lel 1 left after the pirate ship. They're separate individuals.
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Multiple personality disorder? It could be a fun idea to play with if Davie wanted to go down that route...
Ooooh, okay. Still, it's a bit of a shame I'm losing the dinner convo with Harmony, but I'll take it.
Yeah you're not wrong. It could've been done better.
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These are basically the sidequests you get in nearly any MMORPG and are in service of the main story as well. The meaning is in how Sparkle chooses to handle these situations.
This isn't explained in the game but the Tyrants have staked claims on various territories (appointing themselves Presidents, Queens, Chancellors, Prime Minsters, Viscounts, etc.). They are building out their territories as they see fit - for instance with a medieval or western theme. There is bound to be bleed-over, of course, but they can control this with influence and law (e.g. firearms are illegal).
Yes, this story is very character-driven and the plot has always been secondary to that. I agree as well at the plot is flawed in parts but thankfully I have a lot of latitude to fix it since this is a work in progress.
Odd that the exposition is delivered by people named Gab and Wendy (windy) isn't it?
I like her a lot too
I do like random nonsense and odd characters. I also feel that each of these encounters helps Sparkle make progress as a person. That said, I understand your viewpoint and why you would find the game frustrating since you are looking at it from a plot-first perspective.
Thank you! There may be an opportunity for Sparkle to become "male" in the future.I got She Hulk that Nice
But So far the game Got Good Story Keep up wanna see full story soon
I'm working on the foreshadowing/backpedaling mechanics to allow for CNC content.So... will we ever get non-con Roopah or? I too would be uh.. intrigued by this
Thank you! It took a long time to create that scene
NoStepOnSnek is correct about the order to get the P+L+S+H harem going. I have it in my notes to fix it so that sitting with Harmony does not preclude the "harem" meeting with Skylark.
Also yes, if Sparkle is at least decent to Lel (don't leave her gagged and don't abandon her to the succubus are two big things) then Lel will either treat Sparkle "fair" or "nice" as an owner and she will not force Sparkle to clean up Butterslap. If Sparkle is in a relationship with Lel or Panki+Lel then Sparkle can make the choice to clean him up or not.
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I've gathered up the below quotes to reply on the issue with Lel's character:
I won't argue that the transition from demure Lel to manic Lel isn't somewhat abrupt. I did attempt to convey an "awakening" that began the moment Sparkle was invited into the group. In fact, Sparkle is the primary catalyst for the change in her attitude.
- Sparkle displays empathy and sympathy for Lel's situation (even if she doesn't sit with her or try to get her a blanket). No one else has done this for Lel before.
- Sparkle makes a deal to get Lel back into the group which returns to Lel a sense of purpose and value. Sparkle must actually like Lel to endanger herself to find her.
- Lel rescues Sparkle. This is a big moment for her. Not only does she feel wanted by the group (at least enough for them to come find her), but she has now proven herself to be a valuable member. She even brushes off Kayden's gruff reception at that point.
- Even if Sparkle denies Lel's request to fight, she respectfully considers the request (Lel gets miffed at the time but she appreciates that at least).
- Thanks to Sparkle taking some of the heat from Kayden with her own deficiencies and antics, Lel is able to get some breathing room. She uses the newfound leeway to strike up a friendship with Panki (who previously thought Lel didn't like her since she is half-Demon) and she finds new confidence through that relationship.
- When Kayden is injured and out of it for a few days, Lel is suddenly free from any oppression at all. Without anyone telling her what to do, she revels in that freedom and embraces any opportunity to enjoy herself.
- Eventually when Kayden returns to command, it's too late to stuff Lel back into the corner. She's friends (and potentially lovers) with Sparkle and Panki (who often stands up to Kayden) and she's having way too much fun playing pirate.
This doesn't take into account the possibility that Sparkle has become the looter, which only bolsters Lel's change in attitude now that she is a proper (equal) group member.
All that said, I know I didn't convey all of this in the story itself - and certainly not in the detail I outlined above. If anyone has any suggestions on how to make this transition of character less abrupt please feel free to let me know. I'll also look through the story to see if I can hint at the changes and make them more gradual. Thanks!
I had considered that (and bipolar disorder) early on when fleshing out Lel's character but I decided against diagnosing any of the characters. I'm not qualified for thatMultiple personality disorder? It could be a fun idea to play with if Davie wanted to go down that route...
Perhaps a supportive/emotional heart-to-heart between Sparkle and Lel where Sparkle asks her about where this change came from? Where she provides these additional details? Or at least a more detailed answer from Gab cuz her current answer isnt satisfactory. This wouldnt make it more gradual but at least provide context to justify it.
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I can't decide whether you were only being cheeky with the names or if there's some deeper meaning there. It's maddening!
Gab and jabber jaw, which wends through the reeds as Grendel in his marshes and fens, leading only ever deeper to darker, more dangerous devilry...
Gab and jabber jaw,
wending through the reeds
as Grendel in his marsh and fen,
to deeper, darker devilry...
Nice! I'm putting that one down in my notebook for my own story.
Fair enough! Write what you know, eh?I had considered that (and bipolar disorder) early on when fleshing out Lel's character, but I decided against diagnosing any of the characters. I'm not qualified for that
Still! Even if she isn't clinically diagnosed with anything, I think it'd be cool if she realized she can now switch between shy sub and awkward nympho dommy mommy at will to play with Sparkle & co.
I think back to when she first appears in her catsuit, coyly jumping you without any pretext or expectation of returning the favor in the Goblin dungeons. That, for me, was one beautiful bookend on her spectrum. The other, perhaps, was when she was gushing about how she's going to be such a great owner, proving it by not making you give a literal troll a tongue bath and finding time to compliment your ass in the same breath.
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Yeah well she'd have been even better if she intervened before Sparkle go spunked on...
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Think on the bright side: she was probably creating an excuse to clean Sparkle up later +/- help.
I bet Harmony would be into that... Who can polish Sparkle's spear/peach better? The first one to get her dirty again wins? Like Jenga, but worse, lol.
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Probably not. We can hardly abscond with an ambassador of the kingdom, can we...?
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Thanks! ...Uh, I don't think I like this route though, I became suspicious immediately.[/spoiler]
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Hi all, new update has just dropped. Enjoy when you get to play it!
Healslut 0.76e Release
From ProWritingAid:
"Most publishers consider novel length as between 50,000 and 110,000 words. The average length is about 90,000 words. Big, epic stories can be 120,000+ words."
The game contains 34,340 dialogue blocks, containing 331,297 words and 1,803,002 characters, for an average of 9.6 words and 53 characters per block.
There's like 3 books in this thing.
Anyway this won't seem like a very big update I'm afraid. A lot of work went into it but there's only about 20 minutes of new content altogether. I plan to sit down and really grind out some story for the next update. Maybe I can get us into tetralogy territory.
Thank you for supporting the development of this game. I appreciate you!
Changelog:
Healslut 0.76e Release
From ProWritingAid:
"Most publishers consider novel length as between 50,000 and 110,000 words. The average length is about 90,000 words. Big, epic stories can be 120,000+ words."
The game contains 34,340 dialogue blocks, containing 331,297 words and 1,803,002 characters, for an average of 9.6 words and 53 characters per block.
There's like 3 books in this thing.
Anyway this won't seem like a very big update I'm afraid. A lot of work went into it but there's only about 20 minutes of new content altogether. I plan to sit down and really grind out some story for the next update. Maybe I can get us into tetralogy territory.
Thank you for supporting the development of this game. I appreciate you!
Changelog:
- Kayden's free-use dinner scene is now completed (72 freakin renders for 2 images in the scene!)
- Futa Sparkle can now choose to bottom for Harmony at the camp outside the Goblin village
- Can now do sexytimes with Manster in Underwell regardless of having Harmony in the party
- If in a relationship with Panki+/-Lel, Sparkle has opportunities to quit free use near the start of her duties
- Can now attempt to smuggle the Pixie power regardless of having the Fairy Form spell
- Tons of renders redone for lighting consistency and clarity (thanks writer's block!)
- Altered the girl version of the "steamy" outfit to be without bra instead of without bottoms because boobs
- Changed the ADU collar classic girl hair because I wanted to
- Added "Lying with Lel" to Replay Scenes
- Added some images to the starting questions screens
- Added a bit more content to the "bumplug after sexytimes with Kayden" scene
- Added subtle click sound when making choices to give them some weight
- Fixed incorrect opening sound for the status screen
- 80% "just" removed because of way too much "just"
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I feel this in my soul, lol.
I can't go five minutes without Grammarly hitting me with a slew of unnecessary ellipsis and conciseness errors...
Also,
Is there anyway to have a choice of "steamy" outfit without bra/bottoms? I like having no bottoms.
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One thing I noticed about Sparkle's Bimbo transformation: When I was playing as free Sparkle, Lel made a comment about looking for an antidote, because somebody would probably want her back to normal. When I was playing as Lel-owned Sparkle (which I would love to adopt as my head-canon), she did not make that comment. Does that mean Sparkle's transformation is only temporary on the free (and possibly the group-owned) path, while Lel intends to keep her that way if she's her property?
If so, that would make me reconsider the whole ownership issue. I'm fine with temporary Bimbo Sparkle. She is pretty hot after all. But permanent? I don't know. I adore Sparkle's "normal" personality way too much for that... Though on the other hand, I didn't get the opportunity to experience much of Sparkle's new Bimbo personality. Since I will never not play as free-use Sparkle, I didn't get to see the Roopah date scene (yet).
On an unrelated note, that new scene with Panki and the magister is brilliant. Really. The only unfortunate thing is that it probably won't happen in my timeline. I simply cannot abandon Harmony's sexytimes scene at the camp.
If so, that would make me reconsider the whole ownership issue. I'm fine with temporary Bimbo Sparkle. She is pretty hot after all. But permanent? I don't know. I adore Sparkle's "normal" personality way too much for that... Though on the other hand, I didn't get the opportunity to experience much of Sparkle's new Bimbo personality. Since I will never not play as free-use Sparkle, I didn't get to see the Roopah date scene (yet).
On an unrelated note, that new scene with Panki and the magister is brilliant. Really. The only unfortunate thing is that it probably won't happen in my timeline. I simply cannot abandon Harmony's sexytimes scene at the camp.
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