VN Ren'Py Abandoned Kindread: The Redburns [Ch. 5] [Inkalicious]

[Dyhart]

Just to add to what myuhinny said, this is basically where Patreon has taken us these days... A Dev can write 95% of a story about incest, so long as they never actually mention incest. Then it's up to the community to mod in that 5% of proper references.

I knew about the patreon rules but I didn't realize it was so bad that the devs have to deny involvement on a 3rd party site. O guess better safe than sorry. Still this makes much more sense now. I just downloaded it and will try.

 

[inkalicious]

I started over as I had named them one sister and the younger one was name sis.

Named mom Mary but had to open the console and edit it to Mom so the sister would quit calling her by her name.

Keep up the great work!

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@Dyhart

Too much didn't make sense if they were not related and there would of been no reason for either of the girls to have put up with his preving if they were not related as any other girl would of kicked his ass out the door already.

@Dyhart

Too much didn't make sense if they were not related and there would of been no reason for either of the girls to have put up with his preving if they were not related as any other girl would of kicked his ass out the door already.

Ahhh ok. You know that does make sense from some of the comments I have seen on here. Thanks. Will give it a try.[/QUOTE]

Just some quick thoughts on the relationships in the game, and INCEST! (I've talked about this here and on the

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The VN did start as an incest VN, then the Patreon ban hammer came down. I also cannot be associated with any patches etc.
There was an early choose-your-relationship version, but that limited my dialogue options and early testers also hated the input hassle.
I eventually came around to the fact that you can put your own spin on their relationship (if you don't use the patch).
The patch does use the older woman's name here and there. It's deliberate as the younger girl wants to be seen as a peer, not as a child. Well, that's what I'd do.

I've tried to write it so that they've known each other for years and do deeply care for each other. 'Love' is mentioned with or without the patch. Maybe they knew each other before the end of the world? Who knows, but they have been fighting to survive for many years together.
Then the MC gets frisky. His behaviour changed the dynamic and made things more than awkward, but kicking him to the curb is probably a death sentence. Maybe even for the girls, as their numbers would shrink and they've survived so far as a unit.

Spoiler: Collecting the undead

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[inkalicious]

How to get her in chapter 2 with bra showing? (image78)

Solid update, though I can't figure out what lets your sister flash you at the very end (It happened to me like once), or how to get the shirtless handjob. There also seems to be a path where your mom finds you and your sis sleeping together (clothed, like the start of Ch2), and she seems to get fairly upset and jerks you off.

Do wish there was some way we'd know of the consequences of the choices we pick, it's hard to decide if kissing your sister is the right choice or not, or if you should leave some jizz in the cup.

Okay renders and characters are really good, story intro in itself is quite good. the story in general and dialoges is mostly green. But critical stuff well 1 i can't tell the difference of what some dialogues if they do much or any real difference, the only real difference is sex/pictures stuff or not sex stuff. Without a walkthrough or point system there's no telling if choice a does anything to choice b or further other than the current choice place. 2 part is atleast 2 choice's are a no win really with the younger female but at same time it doesn tell anything about ending path or points either so no clue what to pick. and also the dl one i got must have been with incest patch of some parts or atleast wrongly written or so because the way its stated/written there is some kind of family relationship with them.. so for now you get a clean 5/10. a walkthrough if the options does some kind of better ending or whatever in future would earn you 1-3 points. cleaning up those dialogues without touching the incest patch would be a 1+ point regardless of walktrhough or not. adding a point system for showing either sex path/paths or Good guy ending path(if there is one) would earn you 4 points, yeah this is the biggest problem as i said fix it please. and walkthrough would only get you +1 then if you make one. I don't see any need for more people in this game yet atleast. But if Mc would find another woman and her existence would make the other 2 girls jelousy then sure but id rather see a point system or walkthrough if there is any difference in the dialogues options. If not then id suggest you remove the options and just make a story without options its an honest review here. and yes you can surpass 10/10 thats the current expectations and if you surpass those expectations i can't see anyway for this game to fail become a real populare game around here and on patreon too.

I may not answer all of the above, but I'll explain a bit more about how it's built (some content in spoilers).

There is a hidden points system in play and it only relates to the affection of the girls. So paths will seem linear, but their affection level will unlock different visuals, dialogue or a very small scene.
Eventually they will lead to different relationships. Some relationships will be black and white, some will be shades of grey (not related to that terrible shitty book. Fuck that book and its hijacking of a useful phrase.)
Your goal might be to get the girls and survive, but they also have their own ideas and the world is trying to kill you.

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There is a walkthrough, but I've kept that for Patrons only. I don't plan to release it, but of course it may end up on here.

I'm also not planning to add an obvious points system, but of course I'm always open to user feedback and preferences.
Just to be clear. For this VN, it's fully written. Completed. The die is cast and your fates are sealed. But how the VN plays can be tweaked.

I think the VN is intuitive to some extent, though I have been pretty brutal in requiring certain stats to unlock image alternatives.

That's the sex. Of course the sex will affect everyone's reactions to events, but there's still a survival story happening. One that may not care who's fucking who.
For the story, some of the decisions you make now won't take affect until much later. My thinking here is that you can't predict how life plays out. It won't be punishing, but it will change your playthrough.

Spoiler: Hint to unlocking the affection routes

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[inkalicious]

aha.. Well gg for the work on the game I guess.. Btw here is the example of what I am talking View attachment 247310

As @Paris/Texas said, I think this might be related to the beginning of the VN, where a name wasn't added. The VN doesn't use default names and there's no code that changes the younger girls dialogue title.

 

[asgardtipar2]

As @Paris/Texas said, I think this might be related to the beginning of the VN, where a name wasn't added. The VN doesn't use default names and there's no code that changes the younger girls dialogue title.

ooooh So I should name them eh? Ok.. Tnx

 

[inkalicious]

I'm not making any bets on it just yet, but a few things seem clear:

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What manner of incomprehensible gibberish is this?!?

Interesting...

So yes, we're currently wading through how to get to the action, but there's a future awaiting you that puts your current situation into perspective. Best just to enjoy your honeymoon period.

 

[inkalicious]

ooooh So I should name them eh? Ok.. Tnx

Yeah. At the very beginning, just after a glimpse of a future event, there's a small intro where you name yourself and the girls.

 

[Padshij]

Thank you!
the game was a pleasant surprise
me not common to see something "new" made with Honey Select.

 

[asgardtipar2]

Yeah. At the very beginning, just after a glimpse of a future event, there's a small intro where you name yourself and the girls.

Yea.. I think I just pressed enter in hope that it will deafult name the girls.. My bad

 

[Daxter250]

good god! redheads in a game! =O
gotta resist... downloading...arrgh
nope, screw it, downloading.

 

[myuhinny]

@inkalicious

Spoiler: collecting the dead and the spectators

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[Stareagle lord]

I may not answer all of the above, but I'll explain a bit more about how it's built (some content in spoilers).

There is a hidden points system in play and it only relates to the affection of the girls. So paths will seem linear, but their affection level will unlock different visuals, dialogue or a very small scene.
Eventually they will lead to different relationships. Some relationships will be black and white, some will be shades of grey (not related to that terrible shitty book. Fuck that book and its hijacking of a useful phrase.)
Your goal might be to get the girls and survive, but they also have their own ideas and the world is trying to kill you.

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There is a walkthrough, but I've kept that for Patrons only. I don't plan to release it, but of course it may end up on here.

I'm also not planning to add an obvious points system, but of course I'm always open to user feedback and preferences.
Just to be clear. For this VN, it's fully written. Completed. The die is cast and your fates are sealed. But how the VN plays can be tweaked.

I think the VN is intuitive to some extent, though I have been pretty brutal in requiring certain stats to unlock image alternatives.

That's the sex. Of course the sex will affect everyone's reactions to events, but there's still a survival story happening. One that may not care who's fucking who.
For the story, some of the decisions you make now won't take affect until much later. My thinking here is that you can't predict how life plays out. It won't be punishing, but it will change your playthrough.

Spoiler: Hint to unlocking the affection routes

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I see, well then since there is an walkthrough and since there is a point system i just din't knew about it i can rate it now a clear 7 perhaps even an 8 or 9 if i did knew how good the walkthrough was ect. For an example i don't truly mind you being (brutal) honestly i like the fact that some parts is even seemingly (un-winnable) like (sister) asking a question on roof, like close her buttons on the shirt, and do or don't you don't really in a way win on it on atleast or atleast it seems so and thats fine with me for real.

 

[Dongus420]

Really like this game, it's different which is always a huge plus point.

Can't wait for more.

 

[Daxter250]

gotta say, after playing the game, it's pretty damn good. lovely girls, good graphics, nicely written. what it needs are different possibilities and outcomes and ofc more content!

 

[Mikey Mike]

I really like the premise of this game but wish the plot and renderings were better. They seem pretty naive and reckless in their decisions/actions. They should be finding/making better weapons and reading-up on survival hacks and skills. Finding a map of the city and an old phonebook would be quite helpful instead of blindly searching in circles.

 

[inkalicious]

I really like the premise of this game but wish the plot and renderings were better. They seem pretty naive and reckless in their decisions/actions. They should be finding/making better weapons and reading-up on survival hacks and skills. Finding a map of the city and an old phonebook would be quite helpful instead of blindly searching in circles.

I think they're doing pretty well, but are too reliant on scavenging as they don't have any sustainable options we've seen. Plant some herbs for God's sake.
Their stores, general health and lack of worry around starving/dying of thirst are the main survival pointers. Any other details will be incidental to the story.

When we join them, they've stripped a radius around them and are now going further afield (mall and warehouse complexes out of town). And yep, we're also seeing that they're kinda creating their own problems and feeling the impact of them. The group is weakening.

The decisions/actions I think you're referring too are also there to speak to character and state of mind. And push the story along. And have some 'doh' moments. Got to have some of them, but not too silly...

Spoiler: I'll just see what that scratching noise behind the door is.

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[Deleted member 1044747]

They definitely don't have their priorities straight - spending half of their time with innuendo talk, peeping, boob flashing or jerking off each other.
Don't they have better things to do?
Anything to distract themselves from these sexual... urges - maybe read some books (and I'm not talking about the Kamasutra), do some body exercises (no, NOT training your wrist muscles!) or craft a weapon (wait - why is this "weapon" shaped like a dildo?).

(Although, dildos do make great weapons.)

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Enough! Get a grip, guys (not his cock, mom. Damnit!).
Argh, this is hopeless.

You know what?
It probably sounds crazy, but I'm getting more and more suspicious the whole zombie setting is just a pretence to tell... an adult themed story.

Plant some herbs for God's sake.

You mean herbs like these?

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"Mix the green and the red ones."
"Am I doing it right, mom?"
"Just like that, sweetie."
"Funny, some of these red flowers look like male and some like female parts. I wonder what happens if I..."
"No, don't... ah - not the aphrodisiac again!"
"Sorry, mom!"
"No worries, hon. Put it to the others."
"Mom?"
"Yes, hon?"
"What's an aphred... siac?"
"Uh, it's erm... a... eh... a spice... right! - We can use it to erm... spice up our dinner later on."

 

[Daxter250]

You mean herbs like these?

they better don't mix herbs or they end up like jill valentine ^^

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(Although, dildos do make great weapons.)

don't forget, you can find one in bathrooms of

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!
i always chased police officers with it xD

 

[inkalicious]

They definitely don't have their priorities straight - spending half of their time with innuendo talk, peeping, boob flashing or jerking off each other.
Don't they have better things to do?
Anything to distract themselves from these sexual... urges - maybe read some books (and I'm not talking about the Kamasutra), do some body exercises (no, NOT training your wrist muscles!) or craft a weapon (wait - why is this "weapon" shaped like a dildo?).

(Though, dildos do make great weapons.)

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Enough! Get a grip, guys (not his cock, mom. Damnit!).
Argh, this is hopeless.

You know what?
It probably sounds crazy, but I'm getting more and more suspicious the whole zombie setting is just a pretence to tell... an adult themed story.


You mean herbs like these?

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"Mix the green and the red ones."
"Am I doing it right, mom?"
"Just like that, sweetie."
"Funny, some of these red flowers look like male and some like female parts. I wonder what happens if I..."
"No, don't... ah - not the aphrodisiac again!"
"Sorry, mom!"
"No worries, hon. Put it to the others."
"Mom?"
"Yes, hon?"
"What's an aphred... siac?"
"Uh, it's erm... a... eh... a spice... right! - We can use it to erm... spice up our dinner later on."

Any suggestion that drugs are being consumed is wholly inappropriate when we're talking of a heart-wrenching story of love and compromise during a time of adversity.

Though flying dildos are a go.

 

[gestved]

I think its embaressing to take this much time on this little bit of content..
And one billion dolar idea.. HOW ABOUT YOU NAME THE PERSON WHO IS TELLING THE SENTENCE... Like I know when MC is talking but have no IDEA when the mum or sis are talking.

you have to give them names for it to appear, if you don't name the characters their names will be a blank space

dev could block not giving characters names, but it's not a big issue, a bunch of games do something like this, I personally rather that the dev give the names himself, so I'm always skipping the option to give a name to a character