Just ended up skimming through this. Story and text seem fine, if not great - lots of fun lewd situations, the characters and metaphysics are very interesting. My problem is the style. No sex scene is hot. Every scene meant to be moving is disturbing. Every single girl falls distinctly into the uncanny valley - They're too monstrous to be cute or hot, and too human to tickle my monster fetish. Please, dear god, get better at modelling. Maybe hire someone to make these models and animate these. Use honeyselect, or SOMETHING. It's not even low quality - it's just genuinely doesn't work. This is like, the porn version of scott cawthons early shitty christian games he made. it's unintentionally horrifying. You could rebrand your modelling career into horror, probably!