Jhon1885

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Bad renders. Everything is shaded with dark tone to the point its making the characters and environment ugly
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Bad game play design & confusing mechanics. There is no way to know which character at which location.
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A bad mix of game theme. Don't mix horror, super natural and SciFi together. Either go super natural or Sci Fi.

*Dark fantasy predominates, plus you should understand the plot, but I think I'm asking a lot from someone who doesn't know how to directly interpret icon drawings.

Bad "Engrish". There many Spanish text even if you select English in between conversation
The conversation is terribly dry

It would be good Mr. random, don't be so random, what part is in Spanish?
There is someone who is correcting the translation, it's all done for free, so, if you are not a jerk who only likes to project his pessimistic and frustrated vision of life, you could help to translate it, although the truth is that those who speak Spanish are more embarrassing when they want to do it.
(Without going any further, they even misspell the comments of this site).


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*I believe that one can and should comment on my game as well as others' (whose negative reviews are deleted).
But I also believe in the right to reply (which this place doesn't offer much for devs).


Greetings!
And keep crying to the big devs who don't register you (as I see you often do in the comments).
 
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RandomGuy99

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Bad renders. Everything is shaded with dark tone to the point its making the characters and environment ugly
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Bad game play design & confusing mechanics. There is no way to know which character at which location.
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A bad mix of game theme. Don't mix horror, super natural and SciFi together. Either go super natural or Sci Fi.

*Dark fantasy predominates, plus you should understand the plot, but I think I'm asking a lot from someone who doesn't know how to directly interpret icon drawings.

Bad "Engrish". There many Spanish text even if you select English in between conversation
The conversation is terribly dry

It would be good Mr. random, don't be so random, what part is in Spanish?
There is someone who is correcting the translation, it's all done for free, so, if you are not a jerk who only likes to project his pessimistic and frustrated vision of life, you could help to translate it, although the truth is that those who speak Spanish are more embarrassing when they want to do it.
(Without going any further, they even misspell the comments of this site).


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*I believe that one can and should comment on my game as well as others' (whose negative reviews are deleted).
But I also believe in the right to reply (which this place doesn't offer much for devs).


Greetings!
And keep crying to the big devs who don't register you (as I see you often do in the comments).
You can be selective to provide only things you want to show. If you cannot take criticism so be it. I won't be touching this game so i'm not bothered. Don't be defensive, it just show you're insecure of your game. If you need take your frustration on someone that review your game, then maybe you should just delete every negative comments. You attacking people who review your game negatively just show you're petty. Please don't tag me so that you can get more views on a thread that is not popular. Feel free to delete the reviews and comment to justify you're believe. If people dont like your game = jerk. That's really speak about you as an individual.
 
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I like it somehow, but I'll be honest, it needs a shit ton of work, and a good chunk of it in the dialogue flow in the translation. The UI and the "sandbox" needs a total overhaul to be honest. It's atrocious how overcomplicated it is for something that's better off simple. It leads to too much needless back and forth too, as you constantly have to go either room to room, or to the surveillance room to find the girls. A map menu(in the school) with icons or names would be a better solution. But, I'll give you a (y) for not being among the even worse ones. It's usable, but user un-friendly IMO.

The night/dark renders could use some work, as they are too dark, even with the whole wiccan/satanic/religious theme, it becomes a bit straining on the eyes. Quality-wise I have no complaints about the renders/images besides that tbh, but that might just be me checking too many LQ release-to-abandon titles(the "games" with renders looking like toasted Wooikee and Ewok shit in a blender, that gets an update or two without noteworthy content, then disappears. Y'know those games:HideThePain:).

Also, a lot of the dialogue(crunched version that is) was not translated, or it is, and Ren'Py calls for the wrong one. :unsure:

Inb4 arguing and bitching from whomever it should be; This wall of text is an opinion, specifically mine. And opinions are like assholes, they stink, and (almost) everyone has one.:poop::KEK:

Edit;Added a few details.
Yep ONLY me feel it too dark
 
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F*ck man... this game looks reeealy nice, but maaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan... this shit with switching the styles... like, just talking, or with the gun or knife... this is pretty shit... i lost almost 2 hours to realise that... f*ck... i pissed off... still the game is nice... hahahahah
Yep. ONLY ME took sometime to figure out some mechanics
 
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Jhon1885

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You can be selective to provide only things you want to show. If you cannot take criticism so be it. I won't be touching this game so i'm not bothered. Don't be defensive, it just show you're insecure of your game. If you need take your frustration on someone that review your game, then maybe you should just delete every negative comments. You attacking people who review your game negatively just show you're petty. Please don't tag me so that you can get more views on a thread that is not popular. Feel free to delete the reviews and comment to justify you're believe. If people dont like your game = jerk. That's really speak about you as an individual.
Delete???? hahahahaha you are a multi-account troll! you are the same of Itch! the ONLY one, who punctuated wrong and was left lost when seeing the other qualifications, I knew that someone who incurs in these fallacies could not be another.
and you already asked for professional help.
this game is too big, sorry go to the classic VN election.
 

Arassei

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Heya,

What a messed up story...
Absolutly nothing is good in it.

You have to work for that whore of an ex-wife. Later, the dev tried to give her some special agent shit background who "planned" to NTR the MC, I guess it was for letting the player seeing that slut on a new day, but it changed nothing. Nothing at all. I still wanted to see her dead. Worse, you have the possibility to see the scene when she cucks the MC.
Your daughter never said anything about her mother being responsible for the destruction of her parent's marriage and just accuse the MC. Stupid.
There are cameras in the bathroom, is that even legal ? And they are " Oh my god, someone spyied on us ! " Unbelievable...
And there are lesbian scenes out of nowhere just for the show, totally useless.
And the MC who's speaking with his wife like nothing happened. Shitty beta MC, you lived a hell since 15 years and you do nothing with her.

A big nope for me (and I guess for anyone with a little pride)

Tch.
 

Jhon1885

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Heya,

What a messed up story...
Absolutly nothing is good in it.

You have to work for that whore of an ex-wife. Later, the dev tried to give her some special agent shit background who "planned" to NTR the MC, I guess it was for letting the player seeing that slut on a new day, but it changed nothing. Nothing at all. I still wanted to see her dead. Worse, you have the possibility to see the scene when she cucks the MC.
Your daughter never said anything about her mother being responsible for the destruction of her parent's marriage and just accuse the MC. Stupid.
There are cameras in the bathroom, is that even legal ? And they are " Oh my god, someone spyied on us ! " Unbelievable...
And there are lesbian scenes out of nowhere just for the show, totally useless.
And the MC who's speaking with his wife like nothing happened. Shitty beta MC, you lived a hell since 15 years and you do nothing with her.

A big nope for me (and I guess for anyone with a little pride)

Tch.


Uff... "Alpha male", "Beta".
It's a story, it's not about reinforcing your fantasies, for that you have other games, which do that very well.
You will never find logic, because you are only looking to reinforce your fantasy, you are not understanding or trying to see what the VN has to offer.
The "agent attempt", because you have the whole codex, and the faction of new dawn that explains you how it all went, even in what Omega Red is.
Also, read yourself. The Vn tells a millenary history, that is even divided by phases, that have things like Lux MorteM, the Aquelarre, Amberlyn, and you only see... that the Ex cheated him and now he has to work for him.
Dude, really? I mean it's perfect that you like it easy and don't build a narrative, go to the Harem games, and don't bother here.
When you grow up you will realize that there are things that are not to your liking, and that doesn't mean they are wrong.

Greetings!
 

Norman Knight

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Heya,

What a messed up story...
Absolutly nothing is good in it.

You have to work for that whore of an ex-wife. Later, the dev tried to give her some special agent shit background who "planned" to NTR the MC, I guess it was for letting the player seeing that slut on a new day, but it changed nothing. Nothing at all. I still wanted to see her dead. Worse, you have the possibility to see the scene when she cucks the MC.
Your daughter never said anything about her mother being responsible for the destruction of her parent's marriage and just accuse the MC. Stupid.
There are cameras in the bathroom, is that even legal ? And they are " Oh my god, someone spyied on us ! " Unbelievable...
And there are lesbian scenes out of nowhere just for the show, totally useless.
And the MC who's speaking with his wife like nothing happened. Shitty beta MC, you lived a hell since 15 years and you do nothing with her.

A big nope for me (and I guess for anyone with a little pride)

Tch.
Are you serious bro?.

Of all the things you can find in this story, the only thing that you care is that Miriam cheated on the MC, and now he has to work for her out of necessity?.

ALL of this is explained in the story, the reason behind it, and the consequences of that.

You even glossed over that fact that her content is completely optional, you don't have to see that flashback, you don't have to be nice to her, you can even show resentment for that situation, or the fact that Sara was never told the reason as to why her family separated, all of this is explained in the story, and is there for anyone to see, anyone that's actually paying attention to the story and not just looking for his next power fantasy.

I would question how do you intend to help others devs with their stories, when you are so clearly biased that you didn't even paid attention to the story you just read.
 
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Jhon1885

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It's not even planned that way, in the sense of "alphas or betas".
In fact in the VN one can either forgive (if infidelities are also forgiven!) or not! (and increase the fury) you can distrust her.
She even even lost the daughter's trust with this revelation that she is an agent.
No joke, no one will admit it, but "secretly" if you are insecure, then you can not play this VN, as it will torment you!
But if not, like you, at most you will dislike it, you will not agree (which in fact I reiterate, in the VN is no obligation to be with her) is a narrative resource that unites even with the proof of the star and also reinforces the fact of the Blue Blood, as that infidelity had repercussions.


Really, even reading the codex helps!
The MC is one of the pillars of change, a dark child, along with Charly, Zayran.
That's why he was given up for adoption (I won't elaborate but in the codex it talks about mothers dying in childbirth).
to the Amberlyn castle, he himself left when the war of wailing started.
But he was always in the care of new dawn.
And I don't want to write and keep spoiling, but, I mean.... do you get it? Are the trolls that shallow?
 

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It's not even planned that way, in the sense of "alphas or betas".
In fact in the VN one can either forgive (if infidelities are also forgiven!) or not! (and increase the fury) you can distrust her.
She even even lost the daughter's trust with this revelation that she is an agent.
No joke, no one will admit it, but "secretly" if you are insecure, then you can not play this VN, as it will torment you!
But if not, like you, at most you will dislike it, you will not agree (which in fact I reiterate, in the VN is no obligation to be with her) is a narrative resource that unites even with the proof of the star and also reinforces the fact of the Blue Blood, as that infidelity had repercussions.


Really, even reading the codex helps!
The MC is one of the pillars of change, a dark child, along with Charly, Zayran.
That's why he was given up for adoption (I won't elaborate but in the codex it talks about mothers dying in childbirth).
to the Amberlyn castle, he himself left when the war of wailing started.
But he was always in the care of new dawn.
And I don't want to write and keep spoiling, but, I mean.... do you get it? Are the trolls that shallow?

Or better story telling would help.
 

Arassei

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Are you serious bro?.

Of all the things you can find in this story, the only thing that you care is that Miriam cheated on the MC, and now he has to work for her out of necessity?.

ALL of this is explained in the story, the reason behind it, and the consequences of that.

You even glossed over that fact that her content is completely optional, you don't have to see that flashback, you don't have to be nice to her, you can even show resentment for that situation, or the fact that Sara was never told the reason as to why her family separated, all of this is explained in the story, and is there for anyone to see, anyone that's actually paying attention to the story and not just looking for his next power fantasy.

I would question how do you intend to help others devs with their stories, when you are so clearly biased that you didn't even paid attention to the story you just read.
Uff... "Alpha male", "Beta".
It's a story, it's not about reinforcing your fantasies, for that you have other games, which do that very well.
You will never find logic, because you are only looking to reinforce your fantasy, you are not understanding or trying to see what the VN has to offer.
The "agent attempt", because you have the whole codex, and the faction of new dawn that explains you how it all went, even in what Omega Red is.
Also, read yourself. The Vn tells a millenary history, that is even divided by phases, that have things like Lux MorteM, the Aquelarre, Amberlyn, and you only see... that the Ex cheated him and now he has to work for him.
Dude, really? I mean it's perfect that you like it easy and don't build a narrative, go to the Harem games, and don't bother here.
When you grow up you will realize that there are things that are not to your liking, and that doesn't mean they are wrong.

Greetings!
Norman Knight
No no, I just didn't talk about all that paranormal thing.

What consequences are you talking about ? Nothing changed. At all. It's not because Sarah is now angry at her mom or whatever.
Just some sentences, and later, it will have more sentence to reconcile both of them.
I didn't see a slap in her face, I didn't see her throwing some items, I didn't see her being angry, etc...
So, don't talk about consequences with that story...

Okay, fine, I will help the dev with his story :

Jhon1885

Dear dev, you like to talk about others fantasies and all, but don't forget that a porn game is precisely for the fantasies of the players. So, when you come and try to be a psychologist, forget it.
It's not an " insecure " problem and whatever you want to think, it's just logic.
Since the begining, your story is unbelievable. Since the begining, I was already out of the story. It not about to have the option to forgive to her or not later in the game... of course you will forgive her, otherwise, you won't see the sex scenes!
The MC is " the player " why the player would want to be someone shitty like the MC ?
And the wife about being a special agent and ...pfff... seriously ? Cheating on the MC was the so called great plan of that powerful special agent ?
Since 15 years, the father didn't even sent a message to his daughter to tell her just " hi " or something ?
Since 15 years, the daughter didn' even tryied anything to see her father or even asked her mother or something ?
Why, in the first place, you went with that cheating story ? In what it is an obligation for your whole story ?
Players are not stupid, it's not their first porn game, they know how it works.

" Also, read yourself. The Vn tells a millenary history, that is even divided by phases, that have things like Lux MorteM, the Aquelarre, Amberlyn, and you only see... that the Ex cheated him and now he has to work for him. "
I didn't see " only that ", it's just the only thing I decided to talk about. I have nothing to say about your paranormal story.

"Dude, really? I mean it's perfect that you like it easy and don't build a narrative, go to the Harem games, and don't bother here.
When you grow up you will realize that there are things that are not to your liking, and that doesn't mean they are wrong. "

Sure, but if one day you wonder why you only have 3 patreon, then you already have your answer.
Every " normal " person will tell you that you are wrong, just because you could do so something else with your prologue, but, with you so porwefull agent, with her so powerfull organisation, etc... the only thing you find with that brain of yours, is made her cheating on the MC.
So, yes, I really think that's wrong. I believe you didn't think more than 10 minutes about that story, or, even yourself, you would realise there is tons of hole in that.
You can"t want a player to be interested in your paranormal story that come after he sees your prologue.

With that, good luck.
 
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