This VN/Game moves at a moderate to fast pace, as it tries to tell a story about a female exchange student and a male protagonist... Many of the characters don't feel all that believable, with some being a bit exaggerated and/or over the top... The protagonist seems more like an emotionless perv who just wants to get off as much as possible... The relationship between him and his girlfriend, feels hollow and fake... While the only time I feel there is any believable qualities for the protagonist, is with some of his interactions with the exchange student (who is actually not really treated all that well by the host family)… The character visuals look far more young then what the VN/Game suggests, and most are not that original... The story moves far too quickly, feeling more like it's just meaningless filler that was placed between erotic events/scenes, just to add some length to the VN... It's still very early in development, so it has plenty of time to improve itself and place more attention where it has issues... I went ahead and posted my review...
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Characters:
In some cases, there is a disconnect between the audience and the characters true personalities. This comes from me throwing you into the story half way through. MC's relationship with Lucy is several months old and has reached a breaking point where Player and Lucy don't want the same thing and it's tearing them apart. The Mother isn't a bad person, nor is she harsh with Katelyn. She is punishing her for masturbating, because Katelyn is a guest in her house who shouldn't be doing such things in her eyes. There are three reasons the mother doesn't want Katelyn and Player together. Firstly, the same reason as her not wanting Katelyn masturbating. Secondly, Player already has a girlfriend and she wants it to work, which it won't it Katelyn and Player are fucking. Thirdly, she doesn't want her son getting hurt. If he gets into a relationship with a girl who will be moving to a different country in two months, he will get hurt.
I aim to fix this with the addition of a Chapter 0, which I am currently creating. It goes back two months to when Player and Lucy were first dating, and when Katelyn first arrived. It shows the characters at their best, before you then see them at their worst in chapter 1.
Father:
He's a dick, and he doesn't want Katelyn there. He isn't involved in the story going forward because Player avoids him as much as possible.
Story Speed:
How does the story move too quickly? The first two chapters take place over the course of several days. You go from not kissing Katelyn, to kissing her. I moved faster than that when I was 8. On the other side of the story, Lucy's side, the story hasn't progressed. Player goes from being her frustrated boyfriend, to being her frustrated boyfriend, who potentially came on her face.
Models:
As for the age thing, they look how they look.
This is a DAZ game, of course they're not going to be unique. There is a very limited supply of models and most of them are shit. I apologise, but to criticise a DAZ game for this is stupid.
Notes:
I don't understand how telling someone not to masturbate and to do the laundry as punishment for breaking the rules is treating them like shit. Maybe I live in a bubble where doing laundry is a difficult and mentally scarring task.
You say you can already predict what's going to happen. I can predict the lottery numbers for this weekend too, doesn't mean I'm correct until it happens.